Unstoppable
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Unsaid"I am sick and tired of everyone bullying.
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Comment from Deorre Leonard
Just step a away.Walk away so many words left unsaid leave it for another day. Very expressive piecce nice flow. Well said.Deorre
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Just step a away.Walk away so many words left unsaid leave it for another day. Very expressive piecce nice flow. Well said.Deorre
Comment Written 25-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Thank you
Comment from wordsfromsue
This is good, expresses regrets and wondering what if. the writer is facing their downfall and shortcomings in a creative way.
There are a few typos: i stair back (stare)
now you moved one (on)
The flow is a little uneven.
Good writing, just needs a little editing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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This is good, expresses regrets and wondering what if. the writer is facing their downfall and shortcomings in a creative way.
There are a few typos: i stair back (stare)
now you moved one (on)
The flow is a little uneven.
Good writing, just needs a little editing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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i fixed it
Comment from TammyGail
Great work on weaving emotions into this poem
One Q though your last line did you mean
On or one ?
thanks for sharing was a pleasure to read and review
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Great work on weaving emotions into this poem
One Q though your last line did you mean
On or one ?
thanks for sharing was a pleasure to read and review
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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on i thought it sounded better.