Sunset In Sheridan
Quitin' time ...36 total reviews
Comment from jlsavell
Realist101, this is such a moving and poignant story. The ending quite unexpected but handled brilliantly. Excllent composition and expert stroytelling in just a few paragraphs.. best wishes with the contest... jlsavell
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Realist101, this is such a moving and poignant story. The ending quite unexpected but handled brilliantly. Excllent composition and expert stroytelling in just a few paragraphs.. best wishes with the contest... jlsavell
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Hi there!! Thank you for this note of kind wishes and I send you some as well...thank you again. I am sorry for another late reply. Tiredly! :o) Susan
Comment from Trybuck
I reckon I missed this one. Good job of telling Charley's life story with few words. He lived the life he loved and only regretted not sharing that life with Lauralie.
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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I reckon I missed this one. Good job of telling Charley's life story with few words. He lived the life he loved and only regretted not sharing that life with Lauralie.
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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hi Buck! Thank you! Glad you caught it? I wish I could have lived out west and raised my son there. But we surely can't go back. Thank you my friend...Susan
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Nicely done my friend.
I enjoyed the slow meandering lines that seemed to fit this story so well.
I did feel so very sad for his horse....animals have a keen awareness of their owners and their times when they were called to work.
Great job and a pleasure to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Nicely done my friend.
I enjoyed the slow meandering lines that seemed to fit this story so well.
I did feel so very sad for his horse....animals have a keen awareness of their owners and their times when they were called to work.
Great job and a pleasure to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Hi Maureen!! I didn't know about this until someone wrote me...thank you and I am glad you enjoyed this one ... ! Wow...hug, Susan
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I know ....pretty wild 'wow'...:)
Truly a great job Susan.
Hugs
Maureen
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Thanks again Maureen...ps....I LOVE your profile photo. WOW! ;o) S.
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:) thanks sweetie
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This was a very good story. You chose your words well and it held the reader's interest. Your character description was awesome, in that, we felt we knew Charley by the end. Great writing. You have my vote at the booths.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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This was a very good story. You chose your words well and it held the reader's interest. Your character description was awesome, in that, we felt we knew Charley by the end. Great writing. You have my vote at the booths.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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HI Linda! Thank you for reading and reviewing this...I'm truly honored with your kind review and a special vote too! Wow! I send you a hug and a huge smile, Linda. Susan
Comment from LisaMartino
This is amazing, and I have to tell you I'm really not a country girl. I love the writing style, the imagery, the voice, the organization. Excellent job. Filled with emotion.
Lisa
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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This is amazing, and I have to tell you I'm really not a country girl. I love the writing style, the imagery, the voice, the organization. Excellent job. Filled with emotion.
Lisa
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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HI Lisa! SO sorry I'm late in thanking you! I'm thrilled when you enjoy my efforts. I really am. And a hug for the extra stars too! Thank you so much Lisa! HUG! Susan
Comment from Bellringer
Susan: Excellent, believable, down-to-earth story that shows the last moments of a life that, though rugged and without fanfare, was satisfying. Charley was "rich" in living and riding on God's earth. Very poetic and touching ending. Loved it! Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Susan: Excellent, believable, down-to-earth story that shows the last moments of a life that, though rugged and without fanfare, was satisfying. Charley was "rich" in living and riding on God's earth. Very poetic and touching ending. Loved it! Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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HI Hector! Thank you very much! I'm thrilled that you liked this. I have always admired the west...and hope if I have another life someday? (i do not know what to think about reincarnation), but I would love to be a gorgeous woman rancher! LOL! Thank you my friend. I'm back from surgery...weak and dizzy but can't stay away from the computer too long! :D Blessings for you too Hector! Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. I pray you get your full strength soon. warmly, Hector
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Had a setback this evening...but hopefully nothing serious. It takes time! Thanks for the thoughts Hector. It helps! :)) Susan
Comment from FlamingSpade
I enjoyed it to the hilt! Slap your ass and call you perty! Butter mine and call me a biscuit! I loved everything about it! When there's nothing more to say, there's nothing more to say! Ginger
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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I enjoyed it to the hilt! Slap your ass and call you perty! Butter mine and call me a biscuit! I loved everything about it! When there's nothing more to say, there's nothing more to say! Ginger
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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HI there! I had a book that was called "Butter My Butt and Call Me Biscuit"? HA! All sorts of funny quotes...it was a gift to a friend. Thank you so much Ginger! Your six says it all and I am so happy you liked this! Wow!! HUGS and apologies for being late with this heartfelt thanks!! :D Susan
Comment from J. P. Egry
This short short story has a terrific voice, as if told by one of Charlie's friends. The metaphors in the first paragraph are great---that whole introductory paragraph is lean and to the point---draws the reader into the character immediately. You provided us with character, setting, time of day and action that carries through right to the end.
I think, if you wanted to make this a little longer you could expand the last half a little, because I know that with your style of writing here, you could continue to make it come alive.
Two spots of apostrophe madness---we all get it sometimes---
1. Paragraph 2, line 2--should be "gelding's" because it's possessive
2. Paragraph 5, line 5--should be "coyote sang its song" because in this case the possessive doesn't have an apostrophe ("it's" would mean "it is"} The English language is such a mess, isn't it?
In the last line, I wasn't sure what "they" referred to since "whinnies" is that last plural noun before that. Did you mean the whinnies couldn't go or the hands couldn't go.
I loved this story! Just a little housekeeping to check out.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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This short short story has a terrific voice, as if told by one of Charlie's friends. The metaphors in the first paragraph are great---that whole introductory paragraph is lean and to the point---draws the reader into the character immediately. You provided us with character, setting, time of day and action that carries through right to the end.
I think, if you wanted to make this a little longer you could expand the last half a little, because I know that with your style of writing here, you could continue to make it come alive.
Two spots of apostrophe madness---we all get it sometimes---
1. Paragraph 2, line 2--should be "gelding's" because it's possessive
2. Paragraph 5, line 5--should be "coyote sang its song" because in this case the possessive doesn't have an apostrophe ("it's" would mean "it is"} The English language is such a mess, isn't it?
In the last line, I wasn't sure what "they" referred to since "whinnies" is that last plural noun before that. Did you mean the whinnies couldn't go or the hands couldn't go.
I loved this story! Just a little housekeeping to check out.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Hi there! I fixed these...and I send a huge hug and thank you for this help. This is why I feel bad for having the top spot here. I just cannot get apostrophes. It makes NO sense to me! I do need to buckle down and learn these tho. I'm so happy you enjoyed this and I may add to this. I'm always afraid of 'ruining' something tho? I do it with my art..totally overworked...?? It's very frustrating too. I also worked on that last sentence. I hope it's better. Again, thank you for a great review J.P.! Susan
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You are very welcome. Apostrophe rules, like many others often have exceptions that drive us crazy. If I get a chance, I'll try to give you some helpers. If I don't get back to you, remind me.
Comment from G.B. Smith
hey Susan
This is yet another superb job of writing a short story. Your descriptions are vivid and you tell the entire story in very few words. I love western stories and especially Wyoming ones. WTG
Bear
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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hey Susan
This is yet another superb job of writing a short story. Your descriptions are vivid and you tell the entire story in very few words. I love western stories and especially Wyoming ones. WTG
Bear
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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HI Bear! Thank you very much! I'm honored and thrilled that you enjoyed this so and you live out west if I remember correctly? What a joy. I love it. Thank you again my friend...Susan
Comment from BethShelby
Susan, I love your stories. They are told beautifully with language of the character scattered thoughout. This is the second time recently you've allowed a man to die of old age shy of seventy. I really wish let them be a little older.
At least in their eighties. LOL
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Susan, I love your stories. They are told beautifully with language of the character scattered thoughout. This is the second time recently you've allowed a man to die of old age shy of seventy. I really wish let them be a little older.
At least in their eighties. LOL
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Hi Beth! I guess I do get a bit repetitive...I don't mean to! I was just thinking of how long a person could feasibly ride? I am so glad you liked this...I even spent extra time editing this one! LOL! This morning, I'm counting down the time until the knife! My nerves are shot! Thanks again Beth...Please take care of yourself! :) xoxo...Susan
