A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Prisoner"Metre ... Freeverse
9 total reviews
Comment from FREE-ONE
I could only think about the Green Mile in the very profound write...I could see the person reminiscing about what has moved them from one extreme of life to another and finally to the end of the line...I think you did a fine job of moving the theme and journey through the readers mind...very nice...I truly enjoyed...Free
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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I could only think about the Green Mile in the very profound write...I could see the person reminiscing about what has moved them from one extreme of life to another and finally to the end of the line...I think you did a fine job of moving the theme and journey through the readers mind...very nice...I truly enjoyed...Free
Comment Written 27-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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EXCELLENT free much appreciated.
Comment from Kingsland
We all will walk the line from time to time. I liked the way you chose to format this verse. It reads smoothly and easily down the page. This was just a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read... John
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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We all will walk the line from time to time. I liked the way you chose to format this verse. It reads smoothly and easily down the page. This was just a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read... John
Comment Written 25-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Thank you John...
Comment from percival86jack
First,
it opens to let all in,
then
it closes that nothing may win
This verse stood out for me... an excellent write, my friend! Kudos, Jack
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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First,
it opens to let all in,
then
it closes that nothing may win
This verse stood out for me... an excellent write, my friend! Kudos, Jack
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Glad you liked, the door of life. Many we come across some open some shut but your heart and mine can choose whether it will open or close...
Comment from magicpotwhat
Very deep spiritual feelings here I feel and sense Negative emotions cause negative. Forgiveness love faith truth . Positive brings positive and opens the door to our soul but all I feel IS SADNESS in this the picture fits the message it says to me is the door is closed REGRET
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Very deep spiritual feelings here I feel and sense Negative emotions cause negative. Forgiveness love faith truth . Positive brings positive and opens the door to our soul but all I feel IS SADNESS in this the picture fits the message it says to me is the door is closed REGRET
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Well in a strange way the door is closed in this poem and depending what you read out of it the individual it could be opening another door by walking the line, a reference to marriage conveyed by the Johnny Cash song.
Or if you see it as a literal picture of a prisoner, maybe he is on death row and about to walk the line on last time, in which case the door is closed.
There is always forgiveness and maybe in both cases the individual has come to realise that, which makes it not so depressing...
Just a thought.
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Sorry if I have offended you but it was not meant to and yes I can see it more clearly now you have explained thank you so much
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No offence it`s just that I try to improve where I need to.
The four suggests slight revision whereas a five suggests that it is what its supposed to be with no correction...
No worries...
Comment from Allison78
Well since I love Johnny Cash I so enjoyed this wonderful poem you have written! Dark and beautiful and a pleasure to read, great job!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Well since I love Johnny Cash I so enjoyed this wonderful poem you have written! Dark and beautiful and a pleasure to read, great job!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Excellent thanks A.
Comment from TammyGail
Well Bicpen you have been converted.. Lolol
I love it your free spirit has weaved a stunning verse
Very well written and expressed, creative as hell.
Indeed you couldn't have used a better man to write a poem about. I've always liked Cash, though Country Music is not my thing respect must be given where it's deserved.
This was a exceptional read - very well written and expressed loved your closing lines and great use of imagery for this.. Happy I had a six for you its blocked me from many other people, thanks for the read it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Well Bicpen you have been converted.. Lolol
I love it your free spirit has weaved a stunning verse
Very well written and expressed, creative as hell.
Indeed you couldn't have used a better man to write a poem about. I've always liked Cash, though Country Music is not my thing respect must be given where it's deserved.
This was a exceptional read - very well written and expressed loved your closing lines and great use of imagery for this.. Happy I had a six for you its blocked me from many other people, thanks for the read it was a pleasure
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Im much the same Tammy not a big country fan but Johnny I love to bits and have utmost respect for his music...
I hope you enjoy what I have to offer on the free verse front and hope I can improve linguistically and with a sense of spirit that becomes your standard and others for that matter...
much love
delighted
Bic.
Comment from rashi kumar
Be it a poem, prose or painting or Music,
I look for appeal first and then anything else.
This is a great one, brimming over with appeal!
Just spell check- 'separated'
Great work!! Pleasure to read!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Be it a poem, prose or painting or Music,
I look for appeal first and then anything else.
This is a great one, brimming over with appeal!
Just spell check- 'separated'
Great work!! Pleasure to read!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Excellent, will do rashi, many thanks.
Comment from Galactia
Great poem love the ythum of the poem it flowed well.
my favourite stanza is..
Time draws nigh,
the hinge springs,
adverse and black my heart bleeds.
Time,
to walk the line.
regards
Tia
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Great poem love the ythum of the poem it flowed well.
my favourite stanza is..
Time draws nigh,
the hinge springs,
adverse and black my heart bleeds.
Time,
to walk the line.
regards
Tia
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Excellent Tia, many thanks.
Comment from G.B. Smith
This is a grand bit of poetic voice wanting to be heard. You are so right, I could visualize Johnny Cash singing the blues over this one. Nicely crafted
Bear
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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This is a grand bit of poetic voice wanting to be heard. You are so right, I could visualize Johnny Cash singing the blues over this one. Nicely crafted
Bear
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Excellent, many thanks bear.
