doll
a poem on doll3 total reviews
Comment from stanzasandstuff
This 5/7/5 poem has great potential but
ver-y-beaut-i-ful-toy=6 syllables
made-of-plas-tic-and-others-too=8
A beautiful toy=5
made with love and plas-tic too=7
Am happy to review again
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This 5/7/5 poem has great potential but
ver-y-beaut-i-ful-toy=6 syllables
made-of-plas-tic-and-others-too=8
A beautiful toy=5
made with love and plas-tic too=7
Am happy to review again
Comment Written 26-Dec-2011
Comment from mumsyone
Very beautiful toy (6 syllables)
Made of plastic and others too (8 syllables)
Very beautiful toy (6 syllables)
Good try at the 5-7-5. Your poem is very nice, but it has too many syllables in each line. Maybe you could change it to something like:
a beautiful toy (5 syllables)
made of plastic and other (7 syllables)
a beautiful toy (5 syllables)
Please let me know if you change it.
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Very beautiful toy (6 syllables)
Made of plastic and others too (8 syllables)
Very beautiful toy (6 syllables)
Good try at the 5-7-5. Your poem is very nice, but it has too many syllables in each line. Maybe you could change it to something like:
a beautiful toy (5 syllables)
made of plastic and other (7 syllables)
a beautiful toy (5 syllables)
Please let me know if you change it.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2011
Comment from ernesto escarro
doll
normally enjoyed by the baby,
beautiful in the sense you feel in your breast the happiness of your child,
much to mention where the made was,
then you are thankful to them of their product.
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doll
normally enjoyed by the baby,
beautiful in the sense you feel in your breast the happiness of your child,
much to mention where the made was,
then you are thankful to them of their product.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2011
