Hidden soul
First love6 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I felt a sudden chill,
looking at an unknown soul,
wonder if it's love..
Love comes to us when we least expect it.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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I felt a sudden chill,
looking at an unknown soul,
wonder if it's love..
Love comes to us when we least expect it.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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thank you very much....
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi suga,
When I looked at your bio when you reviewed my poem. It didn't show you had written a poem. This is a fine haiku. You have used expressive words, the count is perfect and I do like the theme. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessing, chey
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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Hi suga,
When I looked at your bio when you reviewed my poem. It didn't show you had written a poem. This is a fine haiku. You have used expressive words, the count is perfect and I do like the theme. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessing, chey
Comment Written 26-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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thank you very much....
Comment from ameen786
Hello suga, you have a beautiful theme in your poem but, it's not in the 5-7-5 format as required; google "Poetry forms" and you'll find all kinds of forms/styles with examples. Try changing your poem into 3-lines with syllable count of 5-first line; 7-second line and 5-third line, something like this:
felt a sudden chill
looking at an unknown soul
wonder if it's love
If you like it, go ahead and change and or work with this idea in mind, good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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Hello suga, you have a beautiful theme in your poem but, it's not in the 5-7-5 format as required; google "Poetry forms" and you'll find all kinds of forms/styles with examples. Try changing your poem into 3-lines with syllable count of 5-first line; 7-second line and 5-third line, something like this:
felt a sudden chill
looking at an unknown soul
wonder if it's love
If you like it, go ahead and change and or work with this idea in mind, good luck!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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i like this. thank you very much for your help...
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, suga, but it is not the right form, a five seven five poem is five syllables, seven syllables, five syllables. it can be more than one stanza but each stanza has to follow that format. you still have time to change it.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2011
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this is very well written, suga, but it is not the right form, a five seven five poem is five syllables, seven syllables, five syllables. it can be more than one stanza but each stanza has to follow that format. you still have time to change it.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2011
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thank you. the truth is i wanted 2 join the love poem contest.i don't how is tis poem is this contest.thank you very much 4 ur comment.
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* i don't know how is this poem in this contest.
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you can disable it and put it in the right contest. if you have any questions contact fanstory and they will walk you through it.
Comment from Spitfire
This is incorrectly labeled, hence the rating. The poem is far from a 5-7-5 format. Always read rules and examples when entering a contest. The subject matter is a good one and line two a nice specific detail.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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This is incorrectly labeled, hence the rating. The poem is far from a 5-7-5 format. Always read rules and examples when entering a contest. The subject matter is a good one and line two a nice specific detail.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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thank you.
Comment from l.raven
There is something so special about that first love. Feeling that go with you your whole life. Very well written. great weite
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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There is something so special about that first love. Feeling that go with you your whole life. Very well written. great weite
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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thank you very much
