Our marriage
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Arrival and first days in Aberdeen "Short book about how our marriage started.
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Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I like reading about people's marriages and stuff, especially when they last a lifetime like yours did. It gives me hope that true love is still out there. We had someone that told my husband we'd end up in divorce before we were even married. Yep, she told him that to his face. Not cool at all. I can't imagine what kind of adjustment period you had to go through
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I like reading about people's marriages and stuff, especially when they last a lifetime like yours did. It gives me hope that true love is still out there. We had someone that told my husband we'd end up in divorce before we were even married. Yep, she told him that to his face. Not cool at all. I can't imagine what kind of adjustment period you had to go through
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your kid review, Ine. Have a great second part of the week. That is terrible, his sister did something similar, warned me about me marrying him. My mother made it possibly eve worse: 'If you don't understand his English jokes, we would not last at all.'
Comment from Espresso momma
Oh wow. what a beginning. And you are still a pair? that is great...I went to the Amsterdam Airport also. I was fasinated by its size. We were on our way to Lisbon. My sis wants me to come again in Spring and stay a while. Don't think I can pay for it. But, a nice thought. Thanks for the story...love it.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2011
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Oh wow. what a beginning. And you are still a pair? that is great...I went to the Amsterdam Airport also. I was fasinated by its size. We were on our way to Lisbon. My sis wants me to come again in Spring and stay a while. Don't think I can pay for it. But, a nice thought. Thanks for the story...love it.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Take care, Ine. Have never been to Portugal, apart from the airport.
Comment from Janie King
From Scotland to Holland..I've visited Holland but haven't got to visit Scotland yet...would love to do so some day..I'd love to visit Switzerland and Ireland too. Good piece. God bless.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011
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From Scotland to Holland..I've visited Holland but haven't got to visit Scotland yet...would love to do so some day..I'd love to visit Switzerland and Ireland too. Good piece. God bless.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Warmly and take care. Ine. I would love to visit Ireland, Swiitzerland I've been ages ago.
Comment from rchitwood
Very good story and I enjoyed reading it.I found one area that needs redone. ( And got it it one go ) it is down at the end of your story.But otherwise a very touching story of young marriage.Very good dialogue and nice creative images of life.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011
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Very good story and I enjoyed reading it.I found one area that needs redone. ( And got it it one go ) it is down at the end of your story.But otherwise a very touching story of young marriage.Very good dialogue and nice creative images of life.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 15-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Warmly and take care. Ine
Comment from Chris Tee
this is an interesting chapter of your marriage we have here old sport,
Well done with this splendid write we have here. Alfa Romeos in those days a sought after car.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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this is an interesting chapter of your marriage we have here old sport,
Well done with this splendid write we have here. Alfa Romeos in those days a sought after car.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Hand and take care, Ine
Comment from Charlene0513
To robina1978,
This story was filled with the entourage of events after your marriage and the rough times you had as you both tried to settle in and find a job adequate to your credentials.
Errors noted:
1)We had a few very loving nights. Long as well. That was possible as long as we did not have to go to work.
We had a few very(long but lovely) nights(together.)
-it needed to be made one long flowing sentence
2)Robert and I had practiced the road to the Psychiatric Hospital a couple of [times. Because] I had to be able to drive there myself.
...of times(,)because I had to....
-never start a sentence with "because"
3)My car had to have L-plates at the beginning. Within 6 months I had to set my test again.
....the beginning (but within six) weeks...
-join as one long sentence with "but" used as the conj. word
4)And got it it one go.
(I finally) got it (after) one (more) go.
-sentence was fragmented
5)Within this time I also....
(It was within)...... -needed noun & verb
Charlene
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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To robina1978,
This story was filled with the entourage of events after your marriage and the rough times you had as you both tried to settle in and find a job adequate to your credentials.
Errors noted:
1)We had a few very loving nights. Long as well. That was possible as long as we did not have to go to work.
We had a few very(long but lovely) nights(together.)
-it needed to be made one long flowing sentence
2)Robert and I had practiced the road to the Psychiatric Hospital a couple of [times. Because] I had to be able to drive there myself.
...of times(,)because I had to....
-never start a sentence with "because"
3)My car had to have L-plates at the beginning. Within 6 months I had to set my test again.
....the beginning (but within six) weeks...
-join as one long sentence with "but" used as the conj. word
4)And got it it one go.
(I finally) got it (after) one (more) go.
-sentence was fragmented
5)Within this time I also....
(It was within)...... -needed noun & verb
Charlene
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Hand and take care, Ine
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
well, it all seems a bit haphazard,
Dutchess Ine, but it all came good
eventually i guess! very nicely
penned and presented. as for ways
to improve the write -it's perfect
as is. warmly, xxx, eph.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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well, it all seems a bit haphazard,
Dutchess Ine, but it all came good
eventually i guess! very nicely
penned and presented. as for ways
to improve the write -it's perfect
as is. warmly, xxx, eph.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thanks for the time and kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine
Comment from hvysmker
Really amasing, but so good to see.
*** amusing? I dunno for sure.
That's all l can see to comment on. The story was interesting, though I had to guess at a couple of things like "L-license" and the medical terms. That's a case of where you stop with explanations. The "L" must stand for leaning and the medical terms can be looked up.
Charlie
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Really amasing, but so good to see.
*** amusing? I dunno for sure.
That's all l can see to comment on. The story was interesting, though I had to guess at a couple of things like "L-license" and the medical terms. That's a case of where you stop with explanations. The "L" must stand for leaning and the medical terms can be looked up.
Charlie
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thanks for the time and kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine
L is for learning and ECT is an abrevation for electroshocks. You fell in at the end. But some previous chapters were more entertaining I think.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was a nice story Ine. I enjoyed reading it and you had a nice flow and great imagery.
Well done my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Edit Check:
"turned out to be a disaster. The steering wheel came lose one day" // loose
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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This was a nice story Ine. I enjoyed reading it and you had a nice flow and great imagery.
Well done my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Edit Check:
"turned out to be a disaster. The steering wheel came lose one day" // loose
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your time and kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Thanks for the tip.
Comment from Dutchie
Very interesting chapter Ine. I can understand how hard it was to work in that hospital. The electro shock therapy became very controversial after the Dutch writer Jan Foudraine wrote his book; Made of Wood.
This story had a good flow and was a pleasure to read. Liefs Fia
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Very interesting chapter Ine. I can understand how hard it was to work in that hospital. The electro shock therapy became very controversial after the Dutch writer Jan Foudraine wrote his book; Made of Wood.
This story had a good flow and was a pleasure to read. Liefs Fia
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thanks for your time and kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine
