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Simpler Times

Dear Diary written as my 15 year old self

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Comment from adewpearl
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great description of the fried chicken - has me hungry :-)
I'm laughing about the strawberries dug out of the jello LOL
That church outfit sounds exactly like the outfits I wore :-)
Love the humor about dad out hunting and the woods being his church :-)
I'm laughing out loud about the sermon props :-)
What a fun story from the point of view of a child :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011
    Brooke, I am so glad you liked my story. All true events. :o)
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from elliejean
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I love the picture. I love the story told by a 15 year old.
Sunday dinner was the best part of the day. Of course, even 15 year old girls know how to eat. The bratty brother was cute. She didn't mind the sermons. Love the preacher. Good work.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    Thank you Ellie for your kind review. I am glad you liked my diary entry. :o)
Comment from purrfect tale
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This was a nice story. I was surprised when I read the author's notes and found it was from your childhood diary. Interesting slice of life from a kids point of view.

Notes:

was pretty hectic(,) as always(,) this morning(,) trying to get ready for church

I had to borrow some white gloves from mother(,)

He says his church is in the woods(,)

back of the church talking to Johnny West(,)

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    Thank you for the SPAG corrections. I appreciate the help. Corrections will be made. :o) I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
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Wow! What a sermon! A wine bottle thrown across the people and crashed on the back wall!!! That's some church there! Nice Christmas story.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    True story. Scared the poo out of me. LOL. Also, stopped my flirting on the back pew (well, at least for a little while) :o)
    Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from rchitwood
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Your story is pretty good I like that preacher as he get the congregations attention. Your story has good dialogue and characters it held my attention well.Good Luck in the contest. Blessings Rita

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    Thank you Rita for your kind review of my contest story. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from bowls
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Very realistic. I can believe these are the things a fifteen year old would focus on. You create some lovely pictures in the process - the Sunday dinner is especially well done. (Why am I suddenly craving fried chicken?) This was a very enjoyable trip back into your past. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    I am glad you liked my story/diary entry. Hmmm, I'm craving fried chicken, too. :o) Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from leather
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I really liked this diary account--good perspective from a child's viewpoint. I do wish that I had known it was a diary entry from the very start. I kept thinking it was a very long monologue until the last paragraph. Happy Holidays.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    I am glad you liked my story/diary account. I'm sorry that you didn't realize it was a diary until the end. I did put "Dear Diary," at the first or at least I think I did. :o) Thank you for reviewing and your kind comments.
reply by leather on 14-Dec-2011
    You certainly did put it there--I just didn't read it. My mistake.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    That's okay...I had to go back and check. LOL
Comment from Jean Lutz
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Indeed your words speak of simpler times while catching the heartbeat of many who are thinking back and longing. In competing for a piece of the financial pie and American Dream whipped cream, the things that mattered the most were somehow buried. Best wishes with the entry and may your words stir memories for others.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    Thank you Jean for your kind review and comments. Yes, I hope it stirs memeories, too. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from TammyGail
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This was a great story - well written and expressed I remember my Diary my brothers were always snaking into it so never was it secret .. Lol but still it was mine - thanks for sharing and good luck

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    Thanks Tammy for your fine review of my story. I am glad it brought back memories for you.
Comment from gazzagodbod
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another lovely story so mant good ones in this contest but this is my fave so far thank you so much and good luck in the contest gazzax

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2011

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
    Thank you so much for your kind review of my story. I am glad you liked it.