Revenge
He lost the battle.5 total reviews
Comment from seashellrees4
Loved the picture you attached to your poem. I Thought this was a well written for the dark side of an emotion. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
Loved the picture you attached to your poem. I Thought this was a well written for the dark side of an emotion. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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thanks for reading
Comment from elliejean
The PICTURE IS LOVELY. Your POEM WAS HEARTBREAKING. But many people are filled with these bad feelings. THey never get rid of them. They enjoy feeling the hate. Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
The PICTURE IS LOVELY. Your POEM WAS HEARTBREAKING. But many people are filled with these bad feelings. THey never get rid of them. They enjoy feeling the hate. Great work.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2011
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
This is great poetry you've written here. Your imagery is swell and paints a mental picture in the readers head. You did a very good job using alliteration and metaphor in you poem. You've written with great rhyme in your poem. My favorite lines or stanzas you've written in your poem: "Beneath the shroud of lost resistance a battle for his soul was waged, revenge so sweet emerged the victor old values had been disengaged." Your poem is a real contender in the contest. I wish you good luck in the contest with your poem. Please keep on writing with a poet's creative pen. I hope you have a nifty day
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2011
Poet,
This is great poetry you've written here. Your imagery is swell and paints a mental picture in the readers head. You did a very good job using alliteration and metaphor in you poem. You've written with great rhyme in your poem. My favorite lines or stanzas you've written in your poem: "Beneath the shroud of lost resistance a battle for his soul was waged, revenge so sweet emerged the victor old values had been disengaged." Your poem is a real contender in the contest. I wish you good luck in the contest with your poem. Please keep on writing with a poet's creative pen. I hope you have a nifty day
Comment Written 12-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much for the great review.
Comment from Rama Rao
A fine poem which flowed smoothly, rhymed well and made good reading. You have taken revenge as a subject- an off beat subject and did a splendid job. However you may consider the word vintage mourning. Time is a great healer. If the mourning is vintage the thirst for revenge may be less than what you had shown.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2011
A fine poem which flowed smoothly, rhymed well and made good reading. You have taken revenge as a subject- an off beat subject and did a splendid job. However you may consider the word vintage mourning. Time is a great healer. If the mourning is vintage the thirst for revenge may be less than what you had shown.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much for reviewing.
Comment from ErikAHarris
Wow, good work there. I like this one. It is really well done with a simple rhyme scheme, and imagery, while very little is there, it is very effective. I quite like the last stanza, as it gives it a nice rounded edge. Quite pleasing to see revenge achieved.
Good work, and the first poem in a long time (more than 4-5 months in fact) that I would give 6 stars.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2011
Wow, good work there. I like this one. It is really well done with a simple rhyme scheme, and imagery, while very little is there, it is very effective. I quite like the last stanza, as it gives it a nice rounded edge. Quite pleasing to see revenge achieved.
Good work, and the first poem in a long time (more than 4-5 months in fact) that I would give 6 stars.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2011
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Wow..thanks so much for the rating.