Revisiting Newton
A tanka for Joan11 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
How kind of you to dedicate your humorous poem to me! I enjoyed your whimsy and imagination and am now thinking about a new expression: "If apples had wings..." LOL Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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How kind of you to dedicate your humorous poem to me! I enjoyed your whimsy and imagination and am now thinking about a new expression: "If apples had wings..." LOL Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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Hello Joan, my friend, I am happy you liked the poem, you asked for it and you got it. I thank you for your encouragement, God bless you.
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I wish my requests in life could normally be so easily and quickly fulfilled! Thanks again for the fun. Sweet dreams- Joan
Comment from Deejharrington
I enjoyed your poem that gives a wink at Newton and flying apples. If he had you at his side, under that fruit tree, it would have saved many years of contemplation. LOL
dj
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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I enjoyed your poem that gives a wink at Newton and flying apples. If he had you at his side, under that fruit tree, it would have saved many years of contemplation. LOL
dj
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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deb, you made me smile my friend, I thank you for the wonderful review, take care.
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Glad to. You're welcome
deb
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi ameen,
What a great tanka you wrote for Joan. I am sure she is very pleased. Your poem is well crafted and clever. I like the humor, the words, and the even flow. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Hi ameen,
What a great tanka you wrote for Joan. I am sure she is very pleased. Your poem is well crafted and clever. I like the humor, the words, and the even flow. Well done, chey
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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chey, I thank you my friend, as always, I am grateful to you for your kind review, take care.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good syllable count and structure for the tanka
I love the humor in your observations about birds and apples and why some things fly and others fall LOL Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Your poem is in good syllable count and structure for the tanka
I love the humor in your observations about birds and apples and why some things fly and others fall LOL Brooke :-)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Brooke my friend, I am happy you liked the poem, thank you very much, as always I am grateful.
Comment from juliaSjames
What a cute piece of whimsy, Kamran. Gave me an early morning chuckle and that set the mood for this rainy day.
THANK YOU!
Love how you manage to observe the rules of tanka even when you're kidding around. That's poetic discipline, my friend. Kudos!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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What a cute piece of whimsy, Kamran. Gave me an early morning chuckle and that set the mood for this rainy day.
THANK YOU!
Love how you manage to observe the rules of tanka even when you're kidding around. That's poetic discipline, my friend. Kudos!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Julia my friend, rain's a blessing, enjoy. I am grateful to you my friend, glad you liked the humor, again, thanks and have a great day, God bless you.
Comment from allborn66
This is an interesting poem. I'm not sure if I found it humorous, but it is clever. It doe have a nice flow. The picture is eye catching.
Barbara
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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This is an interesting poem. I'm not sure if I found it humorous, but it is clever. It doe have a nice flow. The picture is eye catching.
Barbara
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Hello Barbara, I appreciate your visit my friend, glad you liked the tanka, thank you very much.
Comment from Trybuck
Apples don't have wings
nor a voice that sings
But they do have taste
and it would be a waste
To have to chase
A flying apple
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Apples don't have wings
nor a voice that sings
But they do have taste
and it would be a waste
To have to chase
A flying apple
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Hey Buck, what a wonderful review, full of logic my friend, I am glad you visited, thank you very much.
Comment from I am Cat
That was SUCH A fun! Tanka! 31 syllables just like it SHOULD have! Excellent work, Kamran! I really enjoyed it so much... it made me smile, and YES< MoonWillow SHOULD be thanked for the artwork, it's superb! All in all, definitely a winner. Thanks so much for sharing!
The only thing I think might "feel" better on my tongue might be in the second line thinking about "could not" instead of "couldn't"... I had to stretch my palette for that one... could not seems to flow a little easier for me... but that's just me. *wink*... either way, it's a winner!
Thanks for sharing!
Cat
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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That was SUCH A fun! Tanka! 31 syllables just like it SHOULD have! Excellent work, Kamran! I really enjoyed it so much... it made me smile, and YES< MoonWillow SHOULD be thanked for the artwork, it's superb! All in all, definitely a winner. Thanks so much for sharing!
The only thing I think might "feel" better on my tongue might be in the second line thinking about "could not" instead of "couldn't"... I had to stretch my palette for that one... could not seems to flow a little easier for me... but that's just me. *wink*... either way, it's a winner!
Thanks for sharing!
Cat
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Hello Cat, my friend, I thank you for the visit and the wonderful review, glad you liked the tanka. Also, appreciate your wonderful suggestion(done); again, thank you very much.
Comment from debsjubilantpoetry
I like this very much. Nice art selection. Great form and perfect count. It's humorous. It says a lot in just a few words. I can just see Newton trying to figure out why birds don't fall. I would recommend to others. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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I like this very much. Nice art selection. Great form and perfect count. It's humorous. It says a lot in just a few words. I can just see Newton trying to figure out why birds don't fall. I would recommend to others. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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Hello debsjubilantpoetry, I am so glad you liked the poem, thank you very much for the visit and the wonderful review.
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you're welcome ameen
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, ameen, a great job witing thing tanka poem about the laws of physics and how they work, it made me smile, much needed today. i enjoyed reading it
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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this is very well written, ameen, a great job witing thing tanka poem about the laws of physics and how they work, it made me smile, much needed today. i enjoyed reading it
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Comment Written 16-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2011
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swj my friend, I am so happy you liked the poem, thank you very much and God bless you.