the law of gravitation
gallery or facet6 total reviews
Comment from oozer
A well thought-out poem. A well worked-out idea.The power of gravity. You can see we gravitate all the time. All too often we tend to gravitate to the things we shouldn't.
Literature is gavity! well at FanStory there is quite a lot of gravity going on! The poem is of akind that only a very knowledgeable writer would attempt.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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A well thought-out poem. A well worked-out idea.The power of gravity. You can see we gravitate all the time. All too often we tend to gravitate to the things we shouldn't.
Literature is gavity! well at FanStory there is quite a lot of gravity going on! The poem is of akind that only a very knowledgeable writer would attempt.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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thank you for the time of day for your review,oozer!
your so vain,
godlucifer
Comment from rchitwood
Very interesting poem and I am glad you added notes as now I understand your poem a little better.Your poem describes the Law of gravity very well I like the art is a gallery and literature is an art.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Very interesting poem and I am glad you added notes as now I understand your poem a little better.Your poem describes the Law of gravity very well I like the art is a gallery and literature is an art.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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thank you for the time of day for your review,rchitwood!
your so vain,
godlucifer
Comment from tx
Hi love the art work and the words in your poem paint the same very pretty picture what you have put into your poem is very true every thing is eventually pulled together one follows the other interesting write i liked it cheers tx
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Hi love the art work and the words in your poem paint the same very pretty picture what you have put into your poem is very true every thing is eventually pulled together one follows the other interesting write i liked it cheers tx
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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thank you for the time of day for your review,tx!
your so vain,
godlucifer
Comment from Van
Who calls your writing philosophical? That and the use of modern words like gracious and extravagant... I've seen this posting on nearly everything you've written. What does it mean to you? To the reader it just seems like fluff without substance.
Not using capitalization in this instance does not enhance your poetic prowess in my opinion. It detracts from it.
Your article usage still needs work. You are still using 'a' and 'an' incorrectly. 'an' is used preceding vowel sounds. 'a' is used preceding consonant sounds. 'an gallery' is simply wrong and grates the reader's ears.
Place a space after your commas.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Who calls your writing philosophical? That and the use of modern words like gracious and extravagant... I've seen this posting on nearly everything you've written. What does it mean to you? To the reader it just seems like fluff without substance.
Not using capitalization in this instance does not enhance your poetic prowess in my opinion. It detracts from it.
Your article usage still needs work. You are still using 'a' and 'an' incorrectly. 'an' is used preceding vowel sounds. 'a' is used preceding consonant sounds. 'an gallery' is simply wrong and grates the reader's ears.
Place a space after your commas.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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thank you for the time of day for your review,van! again thank you for the corrections and errors. i am trying to used the "a" and "an" correctly. i have an idea and i am trying to enhance that idea.
your so vain,
godlucifer
Comment from Ekim777
You use words like gravitation, love, gallery, facet, all words I know and know the meaning of them but I don't understand the context you put them in. I would still like to challenge you about your words. Gravity laws as laid down by Newton are no longer valid. They have been superseded by someone else. Everyone has their ideas about love, it has become a tired word. Facet is a fragment and we all live in a fragmented world. I understand that you have devised your own meaning to these things but I can't understand them. I presume you want to communicate with your fellow beings. After all you say you cherish intimacy.
Then you bring in literature. Literature is a powerful force but in my experience philosophy and poetry or any other kind of creative writing don't mix.The words of philosophy are abstractions. The words of creative writing are visual and sensual images. I think you must choose. I also suggest you try to be simple. _ Ekim
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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You use words like gravitation, love, gallery, facet, all words I know and know the meaning of them but I don't understand the context you put them in. I would still like to challenge you about your words. Gravity laws as laid down by Newton are no longer valid. They have been superseded by someone else. Everyone has their ideas about love, it has become a tired word. Facet is a fragment and we all live in a fragmented world. I understand that you have devised your own meaning to these things but I can't understand them. I presume you want to communicate with your fellow beings. After all you say you cherish intimacy.
Then you bring in literature. Literature is a powerful force but in my experience philosophy and poetry or any other kind of creative writing don't mix.The words of philosophy are abstractions. The words of creative writing are visual and sensual images. I think you must choose. I also suggest you try to be simple. _ Ekim
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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thank you for the time of day for your review,ekim777! you gave me a very nice review,although i must say you had said the words i used love,galley,are simple words that you understand. its real simple if a person say "how are you doing",my course of that meaning would relate to as saying "how are you doing in the day of the evening". i try and reverse psychology,thats what philosophy is all about. a mind is a mind of its own,it can be very creative.
your so vain,
godlucifer
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I'm not vain; I'm proud;proud to be a poet. Poetry has nothing to do with pyshology or philosophy. It's about creating pictures and making music, Be well. - Ekim
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, godlucifer, a great job writing this poem about the way everything has its place in this world, did you mean destiny instead of destine? i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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this is very well written, godlucifer, a great job writing this poem about the way everything has its place in this world, did you mean destiny instead of destine? i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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thank you for the time of day for your review,sweetwoodjax! i meant destine because destine is the law of science. you ask a very interesting question. if you would,will you explain to me the difference between destine and destiny.
your so vain,
godlucifer
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destiny is the fate of one's being.