Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

Seems like more and more I find myself reading the dawn poems at dusk and reading the dusk poems at dawn. Go figure. Perhaps just another way of telling me my life has turned upside down. Anyway I enjoyed this. :-)

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011

Lol. Thanks, J

Comment from Linda England Bonam

Excellent

I liked this poem. It was uniquely different and refreshing. 'A solo sunrise, coffee for one' 'solo performance to an unforgettable love song,' those two were my favorite lines. Great job with this!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011

Thanks, Linda. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Oh, this carried a certain wistfulness to it, although it certainly ended on a positive note. I thought the title was really good and several verses memorable unto themselves. I think I might change out "dreamland" for "dreamers" perhaps. "dreamland" seemed a bit too corny for the weight of this piece. excellent

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011

Thanks Jude.

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Jewell, I had to read this through three times to fully grasp what I feel is the intent of your heart. It is a clever piece with deep feelings that must be felt, not read.
Bear

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011

Sometimes, you just don't get me, huh? ;)
You're not alone!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

nice use of consonance in dreamland's/mingles/morn/memories/autumn composes/ rhythms/ embraced/reminiscnet/me
nice allitertion in cool cotton
and solo sunrise
I also just love that phrase for its meaning
Vividly descriptive and wonderfully thoughtful :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011

Thanks Brooke! No suggestions?

Comment from bluerose675

Excellent

You've captured lonliness in such a beautiful and creative way here. Very expressive with beautiful images and I love the last stanza! Well written :)
Norma :)

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011

Thanks for your feedback,norma

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I'm glad you can still dance after what seems like lost love. I loved your poem because it was so...I don't know the word. However I do know I liked it

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011

Thanks, Red.

Comment from Diny

Excellent

BEAUTIFULL Jj- and I like this one a lot and all of the stanza's could even stand on thier own as well- just creatively expressive and so optomistic- lovely as are u- Di

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011

Hey girlfreind! Thanks!

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Jj,

This is a great free verse poem which you wrote expertly. It read like the loss of a mate that sears your soul. You expressive words are lovely and give a sensual feel to the lines. Well done....blessing, chey

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011

Thanks, chey

Comment from words

Excellent

Love this lyrical write.

Wish eddy would let me light it up with the six that it deserves.

Love your final stanza:Today I'll dance
across the stage of life
in a solo performance
to an unforgettable love song

I do agree. Hugs,d

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011

Thanks Diane