When God Intervenes
Tragedy caused a man to lose his faith15 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Blast from the past! Greetings--I'm trolling portfolios for two-penny pieces stuck at 14 reviews to top them off to magic #15--a recogntion ribbon will be coming your way--nearly 10 years late! Cheers. LIZ
This is a stunning piece--glad I found it!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Blast from the past! Greetings--I'm trolling portfolios for two-penny pieces stuck at 14 reviews to top them off to magic #15--a recogntion ribbon will be coming your way--nearly 10 years late! Cheers. LIZ
This is a stunning piece--glad I found it!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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THANK YOU. I forgot this one. I wrote it several months after the passing of my wife. It was an easy story to do, especially when most of it is true. thanks again.
Comment from fm wright
A story that I'm sure many have experienced. I like the way you described each scene according to the emotions your character was going through. Each word rang true. Beautifully handled!
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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A story that I'm sure many have experienced. I like the way you described each scene according to the emotions your character was going through. Each word rang true. Beautifully handled!
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you
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You are quite welcome!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, that was a lovely story, so well told. It brought goosebumps to my arms, it was so nice. If those friends hadn't been true friends, they wouldn't have taken all that time to help their friend back into the fold. That is what love is about, caring and having faith. Losing someone you love does make you wonder if God truly exists, but He shows you in other ways that He does care. This was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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Aw, that was a lovely story, so well told. It brought goosebumps to my arms, it was so nice. If those friends hadn't been true friends, they wouldn't have taken all that time to help their friend back into the fold. That is what love is about, caring and having faith. Losing someone you love does make you wonder if God truly exists, but He shows you in other ways that He does care. This was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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Wonderful words to express your thoughts. I appreciated very much thank you.
Comment from Coco Jane
A good story of rebirth.
Paragraph 11 would fit more neatly after paragraph 4.
Paragraph 7 should say "creaked open."
"Tell him not to care. His boss didn't." (Note the use of periods instead of commas.)
...Pope reigning (note spelling with a g) over a bar mitzvah. (I don't quite understand this simile.)
I like the ending, as the friends' persistence finally brings the narrator back to life.
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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A good story of rebirth.
Paragraph 11 would fit more neatly after paragraph 4.
Paragraph 7 should say "creaked open."
"Tell him not to care. His boss didn't." (Note the use of periods instead of commas.)
...Pope reigning (note spelling with a g) over a bar mitzvah. (I don't quite understand this simile.)
I like the ending, as the friends' persistence finally brings the narrator back to life.
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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thank you for your suggestions.
QUESTION
How many popes did you ever see conduct a bar mitzvah?
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm so glad the friends did what they did. Only true friends would go to that much trouble. Your story is well-written, interesting start to finish. I do hope your character's friend's intervention goes far.
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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I'm so glad the friends did what they did. Only true friends would go to that much trouble. Your story is well-written, interesting start to finish. I do hope your character's friend's intervention goes far.
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from estory
You really captured this feeling of loneliness we have when we lose a significant other, and as you keep injecting all these little moments with Emily, scene after scene, we feel the pain of the loss. We get the struggle of the friends trying to help here too. They are persistent, and in the end, they drag you out of your shell. Also the loss of faith, when things don't go our way. The disappointment is apparent as you describe these scenes of lighting candles in a prayer vigil, promising to do anything to save your wife. And the answer is not what we want. It really is a real life kind of story, told from this personal point of view, in very personal terms. estory
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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You really captured this feeling of loneliness we have when we lose a significant other, and as you keep injecting all these little moments with Emily, scene after scene, we feel the pain of the loss. We get the struggle of the friends trying to help here too. They are persistent, and in the end, they drag you out of your shell. Also the loss of faith, when things don't go our way. The disappointment is apparent as you describe these scenes of lighting candles in a prayer vigil, promising to do anything to save your wife. And the answer is not what we want. It really is a real life kind of story, told from this personal point of view, in very personal terms. estory
Comment Written 28-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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thank you for your gracious, kind words. I'm so glad you enjoyed it and took the time to read it.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
The tears in my eyes tell me you struck a nerve. lol. I've been trying to figure this God thing out, trying to let Him in a little more, trying not to be so stubborn, trying to make friends even though I have walls 100 feet tall and 25 feet thick. It's a hard battle to fight and try to win. I'm glad this person had amazing friends, I have a couple of those as well, they can be real life savers.
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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The tears in my eyes tell me you struck a nerve. lol. I've been trying to figure this God thing out, trying to let Him in a little more, trying not to be so stubborn, trying to make friends even though I have walls 100 feet tall and 25 feet thick. It's a hard battle to fight and try to win. I'm glad this person had amazing friends, I have a couple of those as well, they can be real life savers.
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 28-May-2019
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thank you so much for that wonderful review. it is so appreciative.
Comment from mvbrooks
this must have been difficult to write--in places the narrator's pain is palpable. The situation is very realistic.
A thought --there is at times stilted/unusual language that distracts from the narrator's conversational tone such as the comparison of blood boiling and meat sizzling on the grill or "I opposed his suggestions initially." It makes it seem less of a natural conversation.
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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this must have been difficult to write--in places the narrator's pain is palpable. The situation is very realistic.
A thought --there is at times stilted/unusual language that distracts from the narrator's conversational tone such as the comparison of blood boiling and meat sizzling on the grill or "I opposed his suggestions initially." It makes it seem less of a natural conversation.
Comment Written 27-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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thank you
Comment from Janin-Pohl-Edinburgh
This really moved me.
I could feel the grief so strongly and deep.
Often, when we're losing a loved one, we wander what God does...
God's actions and our expectations often do not match...
This text reflects how strange it often is: we can be so lost in our grief and our friends are in a different world...
I'm glad that all three friends went to the music...
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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This really moved me.
I could feel the grief so strongly and deep.
Often, when we're losing a loved one, we wander what God does...
God's actions and our expectations often do not match...
This text reflects how strange it often is: we can be so lost in our grief and our friends are in a different world...
I'm glad that all three friends went to the music...
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Thank you very much
Comment from SeaQuill
This story is so full of emotion that it brought me to tears. I love the slow transition of isolated futility to hope. The characters are very real and although the ending is perfect, it makes me wish this was a chapter of a book, because I want to read more. Excellent job!!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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This story is so full of emotion that it brought me to tears. I love the slow transition of isolated futility to hope. The characters are very real and although the ending is perfect, it makes me wish this was a chapter of a book, because I want to read more. Excellent job!!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your kind words. I'm very glad you enjoyed it
