Comment from Mr.muttley

Excellent

Now that has got to be one of the best acrostic poems I have read in a long time. I know the format is not a favorite of all, but you did a great job with it. With a nice rhyme as well.The poem described its word very nicely A grade A example of acrostic poetry I see how that one took the win

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011

Thank you so much, James, for such a wonderful review. I'm not really that fond of writing acrostics, and this is only the second one I've written. But it seemed to have worked. I think there are a lot of retired people on this site who might have related to it. Thanks again, my friend. Connie

Comment from Denise S

Good

The rhymes were almost perfect , I liked reading it though you described retirement quite well. The flow was good and you used just the right words, most of the times

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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011

Thank you for your review, Linda. Connie

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

I don't know why, but the absence of punctuation doesn't bother me a bit on this poem. It doesn't really need any. I know how difficult it is to write an acrostic without seeming to force words in places they wouldn't normally be, but you have done such a super job with this one. I enjoyed the whole thing, and think you may just have another winner on your hands. Loved the picture you chose too.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Thank you, MissMerri! It's good to see you back again. I'm glad you enjoyed this and always appreciate your feedback. :>)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

A strong acrostic for Retirement
I like the quirk/work rhyme
and the humorous easy/cheesy pairing
You really do capture the perks and the pains of the retirement years well :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Thank you, Brooke, for reviewing my acrostic. This is only the second one I've ever written, and it wasn't too difficult to do when I came up with the idea of retirement, something I am mostly enjoying at the present time. Thanks again, my friend. :>)

Comment from seashellrees4

Excellent

Of all the poems I read in this contest, I was drawn between yours and one other as my favorite. I voted for yours. I wish you good. :)

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Thank you for such a sweet review and for your vote too. I truly appreciate that! :>)

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

This was a well penned work. I enjoyed how you created this one around retirement.
Creative and insightful...wish you much happiness in your retirement...
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Thank you, Maureen, for your thoughtful review. I appreciate it. :>)

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Quite a nice little acrostic here poet and you convey the general worries and thoughts that retirement age citizens would obviously feel. It worked fine without punctuation and I liked the cheesy line...I am gonna sooooo hate watching what I eat later in life. I am already with aches and pains and taking nanna naps after tea so well on the way there me thinks.
Cute little write and I enjoyed the read...well done. Good luck in the contest.
Closet xo

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Thank you, Closet, for another of your splendid reviews. So you're already napping, huh? It's probably because you stay up half the night on FanStory after everyone else is in bed. Otherwise, how do you manage to do this? Thanks again, my friend. :>)

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I hope I get to the age of enjoying retirement one day. Hopefully I won't have to work til I die. I liked this and I wish you all the best in the contest

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2011

Thank you so much for your review. I, too, hope you don't have to work 'til you die. So far, my retirement has been pretty much like in my poem, except that I do eat cheese. Thanks again. :>)

Comment from amarherig14

Excellent

Retirement is good if we have saved money for it.Otherwise we have to live on social security which does not leave much for fun.Of course one do not have to go to work but when money is tight we wish we could have kept working.I am referring here to those that retire young.For older folks they have no choice, and life is not easy,even with a pension plus SSchecks.The golden years are not so golden after all.Your poem is well written and easy to read.Good luck.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011

Thanks so much for your review. I agree that sometimes the "golden years" aren't as golden for some as they are for others. My best to you, and thanks again.

reply by amarherig14 on 07-Sep-2011

You are welcome.Some retirees have to eat cat food because they prefer to pay for their medication.Regards, amarherig.

Comment from Melspoems

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this acrostic, it has a nice touch of humor to it. I particularly like the lines "Enjoying my naps, quite easy" and "Eating less things that are cheesy"

Good luck in the contest, and enjor your retirement.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011

Thanks so much, Melspoems, for such a nice review. I truly appreciate it. :>)