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Apricots

Poem in 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 Syllable Structure

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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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It is hard to make this format sound natural and acceptable, but I think you achieved it with this one. I love the structure and rhyme scheme and most of all, the brilliant colours you used present it. Good luck

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2011
    You're nice. Thanks!
Comment from Writingfundimension
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Hi, there. This is a beautiful poem! Just wanted to pass along the word...I have an entry that I was informed was not in compliance. I did not read the directions well enough...the last two lines are to rhyme. So, I've gone back to change it.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 27-Aug-2011
    Thank you for reading my poem. Sometimes, changes are a good thing. I look forward to reading your work. I wish you much luck in the contest as well.
reply by Writingfundimension on 27-Aug-2011
    I couldn't agree with you more LOL. I've learned, if nothing else from this site, to be flexible AND to read the contest rules better HAHA. Take care, Bev
Comment from Just Alyx
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I can't offer you five stars because the final duo doesn't end rhyme. If it were mine, though, I wouldn't care about forgoing the comp because it's so good as it is. To hell with restriction and let it live. Great poem and beautiful imagery to compliment its real lushness. Cheers. Alyx.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 27-Aug-2011
    I dunno about rhyme, but it has rhythm. Good tempo is everything. Thanks!
Comment from anele;)
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Check out the prompt criteria. The last 2 lines must rhyme. I tried to think of suggestions without changing your work, but cant come up with a thing...sorry. Good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 27-Aug-2011
    I dunno about rhyme, but Apricots has rhythm. Good tempo is everything. Thanks!
reply by anele;) on 27-Aug-2011
    for sure! Just wanted to point out the criteria...there was a few hrs left at the time.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2011
    thank you.
Comment from mumsyone
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I like your poem; the only hang-up is in the last line. The tree itself would not ripen, only the apricots. Just a suggestion: Apricot tree, when will they be ripe?

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
    I dunno. 'You' sounds good. 'the fruit' sounds biblical and it's 10 syllables. 'They' could be mistaken as unloving. I'll play with the words.

    Thank you.
    :)
Comment from Espresso momma
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Nicely done, and the photo is a great one for apricots. Thanks for sharing and best of luck on the contest. Have a great week end.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
    You're nice. Thanks.

    Have a great weekend too!
Comment from Osiek
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I was thinking:
apricot tree, I deeply fancy thee

but I am a crazy person that loves apricots.

The picture is so beautiful!

I like your poem. I could not see how you could improve upon it.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011

reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
    I like the image too. I love apricots too, but it's not a fanatic love. It's gentle and kind.

    You're nice. Thank you.
    Have a great weekend.