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Comment from closetpoetjester
Hey Bevver this is smooth my friend. Great entry. Loved the single, two syllable words for the first four lines, clever rhyming and it crescendoed down my page with a drumlike beat...clever girl...The last two lines rounded it off nicely with some reflective comments. Loved the rhyming in this one. The black was quite hard to read on the brown sweets...maybe a dk grey might be a tad easier on the eyes ... jest er a thought. LOL
Really lovely offering to the FS Gods. Haha
Cheers closet xoxo
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Hey Bevver this is smooth my friend. Great entry. Loved the single, two syllable words for the first four lines, clever rhyming and it crescendoed down my page with a drumlike beat...clever girl...The last two lines rounded it off nicely with some reflective comments. Loved the rhyming in this one. The black was quite hard to read on the brown sweets...maybe a dk grey might be a tad easier on the eyes ... jest er a thought. LOL
Really lovely offering to the FS Gods. Haha
Cheers closet xoxo
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Hi, buddy. Thank you for your insightful review. I do appreciate your suggestion for the color. I've let my certificate lapse on this one as the contest is over. I came in second...so I was pleased LOL. I really appreciate your time and support, closet. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Tom C. Adams
Great contest entry Bev. I loved the motion in the -ing verbs, brought on by the venue - the presence of the -beats.
I didn't receive it...The poem probably posted during the ten days I was without internet service.
It is terrific, I am trying to catch up...I will go look now to see if it won. It should win...
Tom C.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2011
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Great contest entry Bev. I loved the motion in the -ing verbs, brought on by the venue - the presence of the -beats.
I didn't receive it...The poem probably posted during the ten days I was without internet service.
It is terrific, I am trying to catch up...I will go look now to see if it won. It should win...
Tom C.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2011
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Hi, Tom C. Thank you for your awesome review. I'm tickled that you thought it was good enough to win...that didn't happen, but I'm okay with it. A good entry did win. So appreciate your support for my writing efforts, my friend. You rock, Tom C! Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from anele;)
The last 2 lines must rhyme. Check out the criteria in the prompt. I like the message. Good picture and colors. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2011
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The last 2 lines must rhyme. Check out the criteria in the prompt. I like the message. Good picture and colors. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2011
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Thanks.
Comment from dr rupali
nice write! the beats can be felt throughout the write,
it is kinda honor, paying respect to the spirits
short and sweet!
well penned and all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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nice write! the beats can be felt throughout the write,
it is kinda honor, paying respect to the spirits
short and sweet!
well penned and all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your good wishes.
Comment from Espresso momma
You found a good subject to write one. I liked it with the photo. They do celebrate their heritage well as we all know. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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You found a good subject to write one. I liked it with the photo. They do celebrate their heritage well as we all know. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you! I really appreciate the good wishes.