The Wind
It's about the speaker sending sighs to the wind.7 total reviews
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem e-EL. It was cleverly written and very well thought out. It would be great if the wind actually could take all our pain away.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem e-EL. It was cleverly written and very well thought out. It would be great if the wind actually could take all our pain away.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011
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thanks...
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count and structure.
I like your sensory appeal to touch and sound
I also like the alliteration of take my tears and the evocative mood you create. Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count and structure.
I like your sensory appeal to touch and sound
I also like the alliteration of take my tears and the evocative mood you create. Brooke
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011
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thanks a lot!
Comment from linsbm
Your poem has meet the syllabic requirement of haiku poem of 5-7-5. You personify the wind to dispense with your heart trouble and drive away and it makes sense. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Your poem has meet the syllabic requirement of haiku poem of 5-7-5. You personify the wind to dispense with your heart trouble and drive away and it makes sense. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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thanks...
Comment from WilliamDeen
So the wind can take away all the pain and tears. Then send the wind my way, when you are through. I have pain also! Your poem reads smoothly.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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So the wind can take away all the pain and tears. Then send the wind my way, when you are through. I have pain also! Your poem reads smoothly.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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thanks...i believe that all of us have problems...don't worry, the wind will come on your way...
Comment from Dutchie
This 5-7-5 poem is written well and has a good flow and correct syllable counting. Pleasant thought this talk to the wind. Would be nice if he took all sorrow and pain with him. Well done. Fia
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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This 5-7-5 poem is written well and has a good flow and correct syllable counting. Pleasant thought this talk to the wind. Would be nice if he took all sorrow and pain with him. Well done. Fia
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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thanks for your comment!
Comment from ernesto escarro
The Wind
The messenger has come deforming hairs
the wind is invited
to blow and send the message
that someone is crying.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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The Wind
The messenger has come deforming hairs
the wind is invited
to blow and send the message
that someone is crying.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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Thanks...you're post is really good too...
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Welcome. God bless.
Comment from TSPoet
Its good to see how some can take
the fewest of lines and have
such a strong impact
This is very good,
you have my heart with this
thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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Its good to see how some can take
the fewest of lines and have
such a strong impact
This is very good,
you have my heart with this
thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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Thank you very much. I'm a beginner but your words had encouraged me, so thanks a lot!
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I would for sure continue your
words with the ink of your heart
that flows...well done
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Maybe if you like feel free to
read I write
