Invisible
About loving a person who never noticed you exist.5 total reviews
Comment from fastdigits
A love poem in seventeen syllables
that poignantly whispers words of
love that are never seen by the one
you love.
Emotionally portrayed in poetic
fashion as they float by unseen.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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A love poem in seventeen syllables
that poignantly whispers words of
love that are never seen by the one
you love.
Emotionally portrayed in poetic
fashion as they float by unseen.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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Thank you! :)
Comment from DeKay
So true..am sure many folks would agree to wats written. Well written and its quite a challenge to draw this picture in a 5-7-5 poetry which u have managed so well. Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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So true..am sure many folks would agree to wats written. Well written and its quite a challenge to draw this picture in a 5-7-5 poetry which u have managed so well. Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from devbhatta
Invisible man how are you? You can do better.....
Like the Moon in sky
He observes silently, cutely without any hindrance
I never perceived.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Invisible man how are you? You can do better.....
Like the Moon in sky
He observes silently, cutely without any hindrance
I never perceived.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Thank you...
It's my first time to join here actually :)
I am a woman
Seeking for his attention
Loving secretly
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Too good.........
Comment from ernesto escarro
Invisible
The property
of time when everything is to sense.
They are unseen like when you are
appearing in sight unnoticed already somebody.
You seem to be invisible.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Invisible
The property
of time when everything is to sense.
They are unseen like when you are
appearing in sight unnoticed already somebody.
You seem to be invisible.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Just like water...
It's clear...
You won't notice it's presence...
Until you're thirsty :(
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Thanks for sharing. God bless the sharp imagery then.
Comment from psalmist
An excellent 5-7-5. I could feel that sense of chagrin, hopelessness, rejection that comes with not being noticed, no more visible than the air. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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An excellent 5-7-5. I could feel that sense of chagrin, hopelessness, rejection that comes with not being noticed, no more visible than the air. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Aww... thank you :)
Feels great that someone can feel the emotion I want to show in this poem.
