Keith & Brianna
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Dinner Invitations"Blossoming romance
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Comment from krystie
I liked the fact that you used various ways to imply the "replies". Sometimes it is hard to keep the reader's attention if there are too many repetitious words.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
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I liked the fact that you used various ways to imply the "replies". Sometimes it is hard to keep the reader's attention if there are too many repetitious words.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
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You're nice. Thanks!
Comment from axelbeariter
Pania was quick thinking and suggested,/Try,Pania did some quick thinking and suggested,---- I also have 2 younger children./In dialogue use two instead of 2----but I don't mind doing a backyard bbq./Spell out barbecue too----Well written.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
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Pania was quick thinking and suggested,/Try,Pania did some quick thinking and suggested,---- I also have 2 younger children./In dialogue use two instead of 2----but I don't mind doing a backyard bbq./Spell out barbecue too----Well written.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
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You're nice. Thanks!
Comment from barfy
Always amazed, what is it that drives us to pen our thoughts with such passion and vibe?
A vivid and pleasant work. Technically OK. Didn't really awaken my soul, but you are obviously a very talented writer... A little more action please, or some dire activity to stun the reader. Remember, we only have a single chapter... You want to be remembered... Right?
Thank you... More soon?
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
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Always amazed, what is it that drives us to pen our thoughts with such passion and vibe?
A vivid and pleasant work. Technically OK. Didn't really awaken my soul, but you are obviously a very talented writer... A little more action please, or some dire activity to stun the reader. Remember, we only have a single chapter... You want to be remembered... Right?
Thank you... More soon?
Comment Written 07-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
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You're so nice. Thank you so much.
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