Law of Productivity
Productivity cannot be achieved with a single isolated effort.11 total reviews
Comment from tamarap2
This is good. Love the first two lines. Very creative and fresh. Your final line is a solid summation. Very nice job here. Tamara
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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This is good. Love the first two lines. Very creative and fresh. Your final line is a solid summation. Very nice job here. Tamara
Comment Written 06-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Thanks, Tamara. I'm much grateful for your time and kind review.
Comment from Denise S
It was a very good idea to write about the bees,i think. You did a very good job. It is always good to think about what these tiny creatures do
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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It was a very good idea to write about the bees,i think. You did a very good job. It is always good to think about what these tiny creatures do
Comment Written 06-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Denise, for sparing precious time to review my work, I say THANK YOU.
Comment from pixiemillie
What a delicious little 5-7-5 you have here. The artwork certainly befitting and as you note in this piece- -the swarm, the hive and only then will we have access to that precious sweetness.
Rule of the contest on point. Thank you and good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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What a delicious little 5-7-5 you have here. The artwork certainly befitting and as you note in this piece- -the swarm, the hive and only then will we have access to that precious sweetness.
Rule of the contest on point. Thank you and good luck.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much for your time and kind review of my poem. I really appreciate you.
Comment from bluecamy
This reminds more of an aphorism, true food for thought. You've done a very fine job at writing something meaningful and enjoyable in a very difficult format.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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This reminds more of an aphorism, true food for thought. You've done a very fine job at writing something meaningful and enjoyable in a very difficult format.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Bluecamy, I do appreciate your kind review. I'm also glad you found it enjoyable. Thank you so much.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
Your poem is cleverly written and very well thought out SofaJohn. I enjoyed reading your poem on bees very much. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Your poem is cleverly written and very well thought out SofaJohn. I enjoyed reading your poem on bees very much. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Ekim, for kind review, as well as your generous advice. I'll certainly put it into consideration.
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Thank you, Ekim, for kind review, as well as your generous advice. I'll certainly put it into consideration.
Comment from Ekim777
You have chosen a good occupation. Your image is multi faceted and polished. But why limit yourself to the three lines of Haiku. Take the plunge and write a full length poem where your images need connect up in the form of a metaphor. Let me mention that the Japanese Haiku is related to the Zen Buddhist rapport with nature and the universe. The first two lines should be relevant details and the third an eye-opening revelation.- Ekim
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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You have chosen a good occupation. Your image is multi faceted and polished. But why limit yourself to the three lines of Haiku. Take the plunge and write a full length poem where your images need connect up in the form of a metaphor. Let me mention that the Japanese Haiku is related to the Zen Buddhist rapport with nature and the universe. The first two lines should be relevant details and the third an eye-opening revelation.- Ekim
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Thank so much for your time and kind review.
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Thank so much for your time and kind review.
Comment from desdeomonas
I love the title for this. That was what caught my eye to begin with. Your word selection is very good. That's such and important element when so few words are used. Perhaps we humans have a lesson to learn form the bees. Good work.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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I love the title for this. That was what caught my eye to begin with. Your word selection is very good. That's such and important element when so few words are used. Perhaps we humans have a lesson to learn form the bees. Good work.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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I'm much honoured and I really appreciate you. Thank you so much.
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I'm much honoured and I really appreciate you. Thank you so much.
Comment from Chiina P
HmmmmmI enjoyed reading it. I think it was well put together and it shows your workmanship. Please keep up the good work. That was a very good job.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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HmmmmmI enjoyed reading it. I think it was well put together and it shows your workmanship. Please keep up the good work. That was a very good job.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Thanks a lot.
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Thanks a lot.
Comment from shirley31
Honey! ah what a sweet haiku reall well written beautifully chosen words, great art too i love the second line, full of imagery! x x x x x
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Honey! ah what a sweet haiku reall well written beautifully chosen words, great art too i love the second line, full of imagery! x x x x x
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Shirly. I'm much honoured for your time and comment.
Comment from Reini
First off, good luck with the contest!
I very much like the idea behind it. I like the catchy title too! I think it could use a bit of description, however. I know this is difficult with a haiku, but it is a thought.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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First off, good luck with the contest!
I very much like the idea behind it. I like the catchy title too! I think it could use a bit of description, however. I know this is difficult with a haiku, but it is a thought.
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you. Will try and improve my descriptive power.
