Where Aqua Waters Flow
Serenity by the sea26 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Helvi2,
your poem is very well written with swell imagery that paints a mental picture in the readers head. Beautiful art work you used. Your Naani is in great form and spot on syllable count. You excellently used metaphor and alliteration. I enjoyed the lines: "The sea there never roars Serenity's calm Wafts through the air." Your poem is excellent and a real contender in the Nonet Poem writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with this grand Nonet. I'd recommend this Nonet poem to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and have a blessed day.
Melissa.
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Helvi2,
your poem is very well written with swell imagery that paints a mental picture in the readers head. Beautiful art work you used. Your Naani is in great form and spot on syllable count. You excellently used metaphor and alliteration. I enjoyed the lines: "The sea there never roars Serenity's calm Wafts through the air." Your poem is excellent and a real contender in the Nonet Poem writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with this grand Nonet. I'd recommend this Nonet poem to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and have a blessed day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
Comment from Ekim777
A lovely poem, nicely structured but I should imagine that the soul's ears would welcome the seas occasional roar. Surely from the ocean deep wells many moods. Let us not forget that the first life emerged from the sea, a dynamic event and maybe the great mother sea would haul us back to her at the end of our little lives. It seems we share the same attraction to the waves and foam but I say, the sea is my sister; let her spirits rise. - Ekim
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A lovely poem, nicely structured but I should imagine that the soul's ears would welcome the seas occasional roar. Surely from the ocean deep wells many moods. Let us not forget that the first life emerged from the sea, a dynamic event and maybe the great mother sea would haul us back to her at the end of our little lives. It seems we share the same attraction to the waves and foam but I say, the sea is my sister; let her spirits rise. - Ekim
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
Comment from healfromwithin
You used a beautiful picture. The poem's 987654321 meter/cadence was met.
I had some suggestions/comments: Wavelets (the picture shows 3-5 foot faces in the picture. Wavelets are small.)
Serenity's calm (calm/calm) kind of repeats
caressing the souls ears? how about heart/cheek - or ?
A good idea for a piece.
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You used a beautiful picture. The poem's 987654321 meter/cadence was met.
I had some suggestions/comments: Wavelets (the picture shows 3-5 foot faces in the picture. Wavelets are small.)
Serenity's calm (calm/calm) kind of repeats
caressing the souls ears? how about heart/cheek - or ?
A good idea for a piece.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
Comment from Betty517
We meet again Helvi2,
I'm the bug lover from your other poem. LOL! I love the visual here it is so serene and beautiful. Your poem is both smooth and a compliment to fanstory! Excellent read.
Betty
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We meet again Helvi2,
I'm the bug lover from your other poem. LOL! I love the visual here it is so serene and beautiful. Your poem is both smooth and a compliment to fanstory! Excellent read.
Betty
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
Comment from Diny
Well welcome back- with allyour glory- This was really beautiful and I congradulate you on placing in this contest there were some HEAvy hitters entered !
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Well welcome back- with allyour glory- This was really beautiful and I congradulate you on placing in this contest there were some HEAvy hitters entered !
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
Comment from Pili Pubul
I love the imagery of this delightful poem. Very good nonet
very well written. I have not been around here in a long time , so I enjoy very much to red and review this one.
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I love the imagery of this delightful poem. Very good nonet
very well written. I have not been around here in a long time , so I enjoy very much to red and review this one.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
Comment from Mithma
This is nicely done with quality. It has a good imagery itself and as in your author notes I would like some other picture to go with this though this art work is superb it self for another construction. However well done
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This is nicely done with quality. It has a good imagery itself and as in your author notes I would like some other picture to go with this though this art work is superb it self for another construction. However well done
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
Comment from Permelia
Hi, Helvi- it is a long time since i started reading poems again. I really don't have the talent you girls do ( and men) but I do know when I like one. But oceans calm my soul- so this one I really like! Your friend Mona
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Hi, Helvi- it is a long time since i started reading poems again. I really don't have the talent you girls do ( and men) but I do know when I like one. But oceans calm my soul- so this one I really like! Your friend Mona
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, helvi, i enjoyed reading this nonet about the sea and the serenity that is found there, great picture, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, helvi, i enjoyed reading this nonet about the sea and the serenity that is found there, great picture, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
Comment from G.B. Smith
When ever you show up, it is wonderful to see your poetic brilliance. I admire your immense talents. You seem to write so effortlessly
Bear
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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When ever you show up, it is wonderful to see your poetic brilliance. I admire your immense talents. You seem to write so effortlessly
Bear
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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Hi Bear, I may seem to write effortlessly, but this poem had a lot of re-writes associated with it! THe fact that you think I have immese talent is such an honor! Thank you SO much for the wonderful six star review.! :o) ...... How are you doing? I read a past posting of yours that said you were having troubles and had left the country for a while! Hope things are better now! :o) Nancy
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I am hunkydory. I went to Reno to take care of my son & his family for a month. He was finishing up his degree and his wife is having a baby girl TODAY, and they just needed a bit of help with a 4 yr old girl and a two year old boy.
Love ya. Have a safe weekend. Today the 24th of July is the day we celebrate the pioneers coming into the Salt Lake valley. It is a big state holliday, and a fun time. All the oarades wil be Monday, and then there are about 15 rodeos to consider........YAHOO
Bear
