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6 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
It's late and I'm tired, but this line just doesn't make much sense to me:
While from Mans capital's evil deeds increase to spout,
Otherwise this poem clearly states your views clearly and has good strong rhymes!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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It's late and I'm tired, but this line just doesn't make much sense to me:
While from Mans capital's evil deeds increase to spout,
Otherwise this poem clearly states your views clearly and has good strong rhymes!!! Debbie
Comment Written 12-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Although this is well
written and you do mention
God and ask at the end
how can anyone doubt,
I didn't feel the piece
was actually in Praise of
God... which is what the
contest is all about.
Good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Although this is well
written and you do mention
God and ask at the end
how can anyone doubt,
I didn't feel the piece
was actually in Praise of
God... which is what the
contest is all about.
Good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Mara del Mar
A poem is well expressed, with a strong message of protest and denunciation, as well as a call to sanity of human beings before its imminent destruction. With what is spent in the arms race would solve many problems of humanity. Congratulations, a great job.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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A poem is well expressed, with a strong message of protest and denunciation, as well as a call to sanity of human beings before its imminent destruction. With what is spent in the arms race would solve many problems of humanity. Congratulations, a great job.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for the review
Comment from katinka
Some of this is very good. In the first stanza I would leave off the last sentence, repetitious 'blunder'.
The smell in your 'snout' doesn't do it for me, you can do better. All in all well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Some of this is very good. In the first stanza I would leave off the last sentence, repetitious 'blunder'.
The smell in your 'snout' doesn't do it for me, you can do better. All in all well done.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you
Comment from Just2Write
All will turn out as it should. Man has been battling the demon within since the day before he was turned out of the garden. Can he find peace and serenity? Perhaps - but no war will win him that prize. No battle, save the one to quell his ambitions to conquer another.
I do believe, as you do that nature is in rebellion. The quakes and volcanes are not caused by man. (At least I don't think so) but the hurricanes, floods and much of the melt-down are.
I hope we wake up real soon, or there will be nothing to wke up to.
Your poem does much to make us think about what the heck we are doing to ourselves. A good place to start, would be to stop fighting apart for power and to starting fighting together for peace.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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All will turn out as it should. Man has been battling the demon within since the day before he was turned out of the garden. Can he find peace and serenity? Perhaps - but no war will win him that prize. No battle, save the one to quell his ambitions to conquer another.
I do believe, as you do that nature is in rebellion. The quakes and volcanes are not caused by man. (At least I don't think so) but the hurricanes, floods and much of the melt-down are.
I hope we wake up real soon, or there will be nothing to wke up to.
Your poem does much to make us think about what the heck we are doing to ourselves. A good place to start, would be to stop fighting apart for power and to starting fighting together for peace.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the review
Comment from The Stranger
war is a crime perpetrated by corrupt politicians and dictatorships, the usual reason for hostilities is the lure of the "black gold"-oil
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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war is a crime perpetrated by corrupt politicians and dictatorships, the usual reason for hostilities is the lure of the "black gold"-oil
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the review