Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from InfinitySeven
Another pearl from your lips. Thanks for continuing to aspire and inspire. I enjoyed this example of how we ought to think. So often we forget Truth and wander in despair.
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Another pearl from your lips. Thanks for continuing to aspire and inspire. I enjoyed this example of how we ought to think. So often we forget Truth and wander in despair.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2005
Comment from Cloaked Writer
Dear Author,
Purpose is a really fine, inspirational, and idealistic poem which the author reveals her humanity, wishing to be a light to others, a sympathetic ear for those needing to be heard, and yet wishing not to be taken advantage of or trampled upon. I love your poem's message.
Great work,
The Masked Writer
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Dear Author,
Purpose is a really fine, inspirational, and idealistic poem which the author reveals her humanity, wishing to be a light to others, a sympathetic ear for those needing to be heard, and yet wishing not to be taken advantage of or trampled upon. I love your poem's message.
Great work,
The Masked Writer
Comment Written 13-Jan-2005
Comment from danielg29
Very inspiring piece and a prayer that we should all pray and strive for. It flowed well and seemed full of true an genuine honesty. I liked it very much. With this prayer and these statements you answer some of the things you pray for. Keep up the good work and may we all see each other THRU HIS EYES.
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Very inspiring piece and a prayer that we should all pray and strive for. It flowed well and seemed full of true an genuine honesty. I liked it very much. With this prayer and these statements you answer some of the things you pray for. Keep up the good work and may we all see each other THRU HIS EYES.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2005
Comment from sonoran poet
In the second verse "Confidence beyond knowledge" seems like to much to say, makes that line heavy to me.
maybe spirit and knowledge or even spirit beyond knowledge....just a thought.
St. 7 maybe an open mind, since your heart is mentioned in St. 5
May I never walk
In selfish pursuit
For what I gain
Selfishly will
Only leave me lonely
I wouldn't repeat selfish again, I think it's understood.
May I never walk
in selfish pursuit
for what I gain
will only leave
me lonely.
Inspiring write!
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In the second verse "Confidence beyond knowledge" seems like to much to say, makes that line heavy to me.
maybe spirit and knowledge or even spirit beyond knowledge....just a thought.
St. 7 maybe an open mind, since your heart is mentioned in St. 5
May I never walk
In selfish pursuit
For what I gain
Selfishly will
Only leave me lonely
I wouldn't repeat selfish again, I think it's understood.
May I never walk
in selfish pursuit
for what I gain
will only leave
me lonely.
Inspiring write!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2005
Comment from Grey Morning
The idea is nice, and the first stanza is really good. The other stanzas feel a bit forced, so you may want to revise for rhythm.
Good luck,
Shana
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The idea is nice, and the first stanza is really good. The other stanzas feel a bit forced, so you may want to revise for rhythm.
Good luck,
Shana
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2005
Comment from Kingsland
nice words
but can you really be that magnanimous
it's so hard to be humble sometimes
but if you put it in your mind
you can be any way you choose to be
very nice poem
your fan ..kingsland
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nice words
but can you really be that magnanimous
it's so hard to be humble sometimes
but if you put it in your mind
you can be any way you choose to be
very nice poem
your fan ..kingsland
Comment Written 10-Jan-2005
Comment from HeartandSoul
I loved this and it's meaning is so true.
May I never walk
In selfish pursuit
For what I gain
Selfishly will
Only leave me lonely.
So true :)
Thanks for sharing this piece with us :)
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I loved this and it's meaning is so true.
May I never walk
In selfish pursuit
For what I gain
Selfishly will
Only leave me lonely.
So true :)
Thanks for sharing this piece with us :)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from Jaxson Phoenix
A beautifully written psalm, almost prayer like. If only more people would seek to achieve the level of self awareness you are so eloquently displaying, we would be in a much better time and place. Great job.
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A beautifully written psalm, almost prayer like. If only more people would seek to achieve the level of self awareness you are so eloquently displaying, we would be in a much better time and place. Great job.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2004
Comment from Pili Pubul
I absolutly love your purpose ! very well writen piece, full of wisdom and kindness, each stanza is precious. I love it .
'May I not allow myself
To be used negatively
Or walked upon unjustly.
May I never walk
In selfish pursuit
For what I gain
Selfishly will
Only leave me lonely.
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I absolutly love your purpose ! very well writen piece, full of wisdom and kindness, each stanza is precious. I love it .
'May I not allow myself
To be used negatively
Or walked upon unjustly.
May I never walk
In selfish pursuit
For what I gain
Selfishly will
Only leave me lonely.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2004
Comment from genielassie
A very fine poem. I like the way you sort of volunteer to be the one to do these things instead of asking, why should I be the one? It flows well too. Best wishes... ~Jean~
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A very fine poem. I like the way you sort of volunteer to be the one to do these things instead of asking, why should I be the one? It flows well too. Best wishes... ~Jean~
Comment Written 26-Nov-2004