Ice Chips and Puckered Lips
My Father and Mother's Last Goodbye47 total reviews
Comment from viking
This very well written poem is a cruel reminder that life can turn out to be totally different than we planned leaving us helpless and small.
Rhyming of this poem is natural and I can imagine being at his bedside,it is beautifully and carefully written. It brings tears into my eyes.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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This very well written poem is a cruel reminder that life can turn out to be totally different than we planned leaving us helpless and small.
Rhyming of this poem is natural and I can imagine being at his bedside,it is beautifully and carefully written. It brings tears into my eyes.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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viking, Thank you for your insightful review. I appreciate your time. Blessings, Katie
Comment from c_lucas
The lost of a loved one can be devastrating. Fond memories locked in your heart will ease the pain. This is well written. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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The lost of a loved one can be devastrating. Fond memories locked in your heart will ease the pain. This is well written. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you, It is amazing how healing it is to put these memories down through poems and stories. I appreciate you review. Blessings, Katie
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You're welcome Katie. Charlie
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--"My Father and Mothers Last Goodbye"
Mother's (apostrophe needed).
--"Now every word and touch,
Is a blessing mixed with tears."
Nicely expressed.
--Good rhymes.
--"Even deaths shadow cannot hide."
death's.
--"Death is not forever,
It's just an end to the body's pain"
Nice wishful faith.
--Sad poem.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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--"My Father and Mothers Last Goodbye"
Mother's (apostrophe needed).
--"Now every word and touch,
Is a blessing mixed with tears."
Nicely expressed.
--Good rhymes.
--"Even deaths shadow cannot hide."
death's.
--"Death is not forever,
It's just an end to the body's pain"
Nice wishful faith.
--Sad poem.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Bay K, thank you for the comments and catching my nits. I will correct them right away. Blessings, katie
Comment from Rose Hearth
No explanation needed for presentation. This is a loving and heartfelt poem of mixed feelings, appreciation at getting to say goodbye, and mourning for all that is lost.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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No explanation needed for presentation. This is a loving and heartfelt poem of mixed feelings, appreciation at getting to say goodbye, and mourning for all that is lost.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your understanding review.
Comment from JudithMarie
A wonderful poem, a story within Death is not forever,
that is both sad and beautiful. I felt the strong emotion of your words. How special for you to witness the depth of the love of your parents and the hope and strength they shared in their faith. This is beautifully written from the heart. My favorite: "It's just an end to the body's pain
We'll meet again at heaven's gate,In my heart 'till then you'll remain." What a wonderful way to think of the loss of a dearly loved one. Thanks for sharing. JudithMarie
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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A wonderful poem, a story within Death is not forever,
that is both sad and beautiful. I felt the strong emotion of your words. How special for you to witness the depth of the love of your parents and the hope and strength they shared in their faith. This is beautifully written from the heart. My favorite: "It's just an end to the body's pain
We'll meet again at heaven's gate,In my heart 'till then you'll remain." What a wonderful way to think of the loss of a dearly loved one. Thanks for sharing. JudithMarie
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Judy, Thank you. I am going to put this one to music too. The tune came to me while I was in the shower the other day. LOL God has been and continues to be so good to us through this process of grieving. Blessings to you, Katie
Comment from Darla9
Beautiful but very sad. I was hoping it was fiction. It must have been incredibly hard for you and your mother. I'm sure that your dad would love this poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Beautiful but very sad. I was hoping it was fiction. It must have been incredibly hard for you and your mother. I'm sure that your dad would love this poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Darla, thank you for your kind words. I think you are right, my dad would have liked it. I was able to write and sing him a song before he died. It was a really special moment. Blessings, Katie
Comment from Angel Debbie
Such a beautiful poem had me cry. My Mom died of Cancer and I fed her ice chips and held her hand. CAncr is not the best way to go in life but with this life we do not choose how we are to die only God can choose that way. I'm just glad that you and your parents had time together to love each other before the final passing. God Bless you and your family.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Such a beautiful poem had me cry. My Mom died of Cancer and I fed her ice chips and held her hand. CAncr is not the best way to go in life but with this life we do not choose how we are to die only God can choose that way. I'm just glad that you and your parents had time together to love each other before the final passing. God Bless you and your family.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Angel, I know you totally understand my experience . The process of dying is so sad, yet all walls somehow crumble and what is left is love. Thank you for your kind words. Blessings, Katie
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hi Katie,
This is a beautifully written story in a poem. What a touching goodbye scene you witnessed between your mom and dad. I'm so sorry for your loss. I don't know if you still remember my review of your poem about your dad which really made me cry. I'll never forget that. (It was about him crying in the night- something he wrote, then you finished it with your part about hearing him cry...)
Death is not forever,
It's just an end to the body's pain
-This is a comforting truth but I know the physical absence is not very easy to get used to. My thoughts and prayers are with you.
Hugs,
Anabella
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi Katie,
This is a beautifully written story in a poem. What a touching goodbye scene you witnessed between your mom and dad. I'm so sorry for your loss. I don't know if you still remember my review of your poem about your dad which really made me cry. I'll never forget that. (It was about him crying in the night- something he wrote, then you finished it with your part about hearing him cry...)
Death is not forever,
It's just an end to the body's pain
-This is a comforting truth but I know the physical absence is not very easy to get used to. My thoughts and prayers are with you.
Hugs,
Anabella
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Anabella, yes I remember that poem well. I really appreciate you heartfelt words. I still can't believe my dad is gone, but I rest in the assurance that I will see him again in glory. Thank you sister. Blessings, Katie
Comment from jdrago
Your notes say beautiful and sad, you did a very good job of capturing beautiful and sad in you poem. It was a very emotion read for me. The ice chips are a signature part of the process often overlooked. I like the way you used them in the title and in the closing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Your notes say beautiful and sad, you did a very good job of capturing beautiful and sad in you poem. It was a very emotion read for me. The ice chips are a signature part of the process often overlooked. I like the way you used them in the title and in the closing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much for your understanding review. The sweet hospice nurse told my mom that she didn't have to give my dad ice chips. But my mom said she needed to for herself, after that my father woke up one more time to kiss my mom. It was such a blessing. Thank you again, Katie
Comment from nancyjam
Though sad, this is a beautiful story
of a lasting love.
I am so sorry for your loss. You honor them
both with your tender depiction of their last
hours together.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Though sad, this is a beautiful story
of a lasting love.
I am so sorry for your loss. You honor them
both with your tender depiction of their last
hours together.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2011
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Thank you nancyjam, it was a blessing to witness their love.