Winter In Ice Glaze
A scene finishing winter advancing to Spring.3 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
This is a nice picture but I rather keep it just a memory for now.
I love how your poem flows
And your words gave me a chill. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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This is a nice picture but I rather keep it just a memory for now.
I love how your poem flows
And your words gave me a chill. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Humble Thanks, misscookie
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Your very welcome,
Comment from adewpearl
A tanka is a poem of five lines - yours only has four
The first line is supposed to have five syllables - yours has four
ice/glaze/blank/et
Since the line count is off, it's hard to tell which lines have correct or incorrect syllables.
I like your alliteration in cars coated and I like the visual you create with your descriptive detail. I will gladly raise your rating if you tell me you have revised to make your poem conform to the rules of the tanka as stated on the contest page :-) Brooke
Your poem now has the correct number of lines and each one has a good syllable count, so I am upping your rating, happily
man scrape sidewalk would sound better if your write:
men scrape sidewalks
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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A tanka is a poem of five lines - yours only has four
The first line is supposed to have five syllables - yours has four
ice/glaze/blank/et
Since the line count is off, it's hard to tell which lines have correct or incorrect syllables.
I like your alliteration in cars coated and I like the visual you create with your descriptive detail. I will gladly raise your rating if you tell me you have revised to make your poem conform to the rules of the tanka as stated on the contest page :-) Brooke
Your poem now has the correct number of lines and each one has a good syllable count, so I am upping your rating, happily
man scrape sidewalk would sound better if your write:
men scrape sidewalks
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Humble Thanks, Adewpearl. I will correct it.
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Just tell me when you do so I can up your rating :-)
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Sorry I had over look a line. Thanks for the eagle eye vision. I did make corrections. Thanks, adewpearl
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Doesn't seem that long ago since this was around me......I am thinking Spring and Summer no more winter....but I liked your work here and the artwork was also great......
Imagery was well defined and I think it will do well in the Tanka poverty contest. Thanks for sharing and good luck! :)
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Doesn't seem that long ago since this was around me......I am thinking Spring and Summer no more winter....but I liked your work here and the artwork was also great......
Imagery was well defined and I think it will do well in the Tanka poverty contest. Thanks for sharing and good luck! :)
Maureen
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Humble Thanks, MNapier
