i dont need no man
this poem is about how men have ruined my trust4 total reviews
Comment from mstad55
Sad, but so often true. I feel your pain as you write this poem. Well done. The male "gander" I think should be (gender)other than that, I think you expressed yourself very well. mstad55
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Sad, but so often true. I feel your pain as you write this poem. Well done. The male "gander" I think should be (gender)other than that, I think you expressed yourself very well. mstad55
Comment Written 24-May-2011
Comment from KathyH
I think you have a strong intense point of view to express here. The poem has a good edgy quality to it but I dont think it fits the contest format you have entered at all. Unless I'm missing something?
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I think you have a strong intense point of view to express here. The poem has a good edgy quality to it but I dont think it fits the contest format you have entered at all. Unless I'm missing something?
Comment Written 23-May-2011
Comment from Janie King
It is obvious that the men in your life have fallen short of the role God intended them to fulfill. No human being can really be what they should without allowing God to change their selfish nature. Unfortunately children copy their actions after the significant other (parent, grandpa, brother)..so the mess just trickles down and continues to hurt. I was very blessed. I never married but it was for an entirely different reason. My dad adored my mother (visa versa) and treated her like a queen (doesn't mean everything was perfect but their love for each other was never questioned). I, therefore, didn't want anything less than that and I didn't find it. I do know though that my brothers watched my dad and they treated their wives the same. They have all meen married 30+ years. Their sons watched them and they've all been married 7-10 years and they treat their wives as a jewell. My nephew was getting on to his 6 yr old and 4 year old because they weren't treating their mother with proper respect. He asked them if they saw him treat her that way. Boone said, "No daddy, you treat mommy like a princess." He informed them then he expected them to treat her the way he did. About two hours later Boone walked through the kitchen where his mommy was and he looked at his mom and said,"I love you hot stuff." They decided they have to do a little more clarifying of what he meant. (smile) Somewhere the cycle has to be broken but where are the examples? You have a good command of word usage and a broken heart. Your choice of words clearly allows your reader to see the scene you are painting for them. God bless.
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It is obvious that the men in your life have fallen short of the role God intended them to fulfill. No human being can really be what they should without allowing God to change their selfish nature. Unfortunately children copy their actions after the significant other (parent, grandpa, brother)..so the mess just trickles down and continues to hurt. I was very blessed. I never married but it was for an entirely different reason. My dad adored my mother (visa versa) and treated her like a queen (doesn't mean everything was perfect but their love for each other was never questioned). I, therefore, didn't want anything less than that and I didn't find it. I do know though that my brothers watched my dad and they treated their wives the same. They have all meen married 30+ years. Their sons watched them and they've all been married 7-10 years and they treat their wives as a jewell. My nephew was getting on to his 6 yr old and 4 year old because they weren't treating their mother with proper respect. He asked them if they saw him treat her that way. Boone said, "No daddy, you treat mommy like a princess." He informed them then he expected them to treat her the way he did. About two hours later Boone walked through the kitchen where his mommy was and he looked at his mom and said,"I love you hot stuff." They decided they have to do a little more clarifying of what he meant. (smile) Somewhere the cycle has to be broken but where are the examples? You have a good command of word usage and a broken heart. Your choice of words clearly allows your reader to see the scene you are painting for them. God bless.
Comment Written 23-May-2011
Comment from sidone
alot of boys learn from a girl
alot of ladies learn from a man
a gentleman and a woman understands
a problem just does't come from a man
different genders
if all men were women haters and women were men haters
who's going to create us
... just my thoughts a pleasure to read yours
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alot of boys learn from a girl
alot of ladies learn from a man
a gentleman and a woman understands
a problem just does't come from a man
different genders
if all men were women haters and women were men haters
who's going to create us
... just my thoughts a pleasure to read yours
Comment Written 23-May-2011
