Champagne
Ode Haiku4 total reviews
Comment from Lise Deangelo
I like this fun haiku. I love grapes and champagne. I like the use of flute (glass). Good word choice in this one. Thanks so much for sharing and best wishes for the contest :) Lise
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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I like this fun haiku. I love grapes and champagne. I like the use of flute (glass). Good word choice in this one. Thanks so much for sharing and best wishes for the contest :) Lise
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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thank you so much for the kind review
Comment from Connie C
I really like this. All three lines are excellent in describing a nice glass of champagne. I especially like the second line, "effervescence in a flute." I'm not sure why someone would give you four stars for this (as it appears above your poem) because I think it is definitely a winner. It is one of my favorites in this contest so far. Connie
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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I really like this. All three lines are excellent in describing a nice glass of champagne. I especially like the second line, "effervescence in a flute." I'm not sure why someone would give you four stars for this (as it appears above your poem) because I think it is definitely a winner. It is one of my favorites in this contest so far. Connie
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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thank you! I have recieved another exellent, but I belive one person did not think it was a "true haiku". he or she did not get the "spirit" of the "ode haiku" competion. but bless you for your review!
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Trust me when I tell you that you are probably not the only one who was told they did not write a "true haiku." Perhaps this contest should have been titled a "5-7-5 Ode".
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thank you, as i dearly like this "whatever" poem. hope the judging is fair. hugs
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the bubbles that tickles the nose, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the bubbles that tickles the nose, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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thank you! loved your last entry
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--Hello! Normally, haiku center on some aspect of physical nature. Yours here is on man-made champagne. The ideal poem for the contest would be praising some aspect of environmental nature.
You did fulfill the 5-7-5 syllable count requirement, however. Good luck.
Bear in mind that this is not one of those write about anything haiku, but a typical one.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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--Hello! Normally, haiku center on some aspect of physical nature. Yours here is on man-made champagne. The ideal poem for the contest would be praising some aspect of environmental nature.
You did fulfill the 5-7-5 syllable count requirement, however. Good luck.
Bear in mind that this is not one of those write about anything haiku, but a typical one.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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sorry but this an "ode haiku", so i think the rules are "different". if you look carelfully at the entries, "ode to coffee is one. so not really sure where you are coming from.
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Ode to coffee is not a good entry either. Praise of physical nature should be the theme. Just trying to help.
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sorry but you are missing the spirit of this contes!! you have a righ to your opinon. this contest has changed the "original haiku" into something different. but no worries.