The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "James In Charge"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Freeflyer
I have been away from Fanstory for a long time. Now that I am back, this was one story I just knew I had to get back into. Because I had to read so many chapters, to catch up, I left my comments for this chapter.
As usual the story keeps us on the edge of our toes.
Great writing.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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I have been away from Fanstory for a long time. Now that I am back, this was one story I just knew I had to get back into. Because I had to read so many chapters, to catch up, I left my comments for this chapter.
As usual the story keeps us on the edge of our toes.
Great writing.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thanks, I haven't posted much on this since my surgery. I am doing fine and hope to get back to it SOON.
Comment from MS Writer
This story continues to be suspensful, exciting and easy to get caught up in. Just great. Love your characters and the intricacies of the story. Well done!
Michele
reply by the author on 19-May-2011
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This story continues to be suspensful, exciting and easy to get caught up in. Just great. Love your characters and the intricacies of the story. Well done!
Michele
Comment Written 19-May-2011
reply by the author on 19-May-2011
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Thanks so much. I am thrilled you continue to enjoy this.
Comment from jmdg1954
Valarie Smurph... I've missed the past few chapters. I will need to catch up on those, but even so, I can feel the suspense brewing within this chapter. I am finding many twists and turns as I move along.
Nicely done.
John
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Valarie Smurph... I've missed the past few chapters. I will need to catch up on those, but even so, I can feel the suspense brewing within this chapter. I am finding many twists and turns as I move along.
Nicely done.
John
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Take your time, the book isn't going anywhere (at least not in the near future). I am thrilled you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from Readywriter52
James has many questions about his grandfather and father. He wants answers, but Mr. Hurley and Mac can't provide him with the answers he wants. James won't give up. I hope he won't find the answers too disturbing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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James has many questions about his grandfather and father. He wants answers, but Mr. Hurley and Mac can't provide him with the answers he wants. James won't give up. I hope he won't find the answers too disturbing.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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I think he already knows what the answers are he just needs to confirm them. Glad you continue to find this interesting.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Grandpa's and his father's lives are mazes of deception. I sense clarity from you and look forward to seeing where you will take it. Do you work from some sort of out line. Mine is usually giving the lead people conflicts something personal then something they have to resolve together.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Grandpa's and his father's lives are mazes of deception. I sense clarity from you and look forward to seeing where you will take it. Do you work from some sort of out line. Mine is usually giving the lead people conflicts something personal then something they have to resolve together.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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I have a general idea of where the story is going and a definite idea of how it will end, the rest comes as I write it. So, I guess I have an outline, but a sketchy one. Glad you liked this one. I just love James, I think of him as the son never had.
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I write similarly; though I know the conflict each has within themselves and between them ususally, I am often surprised at how a scene will rewrite a part after a day or so and then change itself to a very pausible result.
Comment from moyramouse
James really is a very strong character. His brain never stops turning things over, analysing what he's learnt and what he can do next to keep things turning over. His concern about who his real Grandma was is very touching, and that he wept -tears of emotion and frustration. I can't wait to read about his visit to his sister. I didn't realize she was in a Psychiatric unit - if you told us earlier I had forgotten. I wonder if James will find anything out from her and what his plan is to get his father to talk. This post kept my eyes glued to the screen and I hated getting to the end!! xxmouse
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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James really is a very strong character. His brain never stops turning things over, analysing what he's learnt and what he can do next to keep things turning over. His concern about who his real Grandma was is very touching, and that he wept -tears of emotion and frustration. I can't wait to read about his visit to his sister. I didn't realize she was in a Psychiatric unit - if you told us earlier I had forgotten. I wonder if James will find anything out from her and what his plan is to get his father to talk. This post kept my eyes glued to the screen and I hated getting to the end!! xxmouse
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Susan was betrayed by her boyfriend who sold a story about her to the tabloids. She was so distraught, she attempted suicide. I am so pleased you are enjoying this. I hope to post the next chapter either today or tomorrow.
Comment from Tellis
I don't know where he's going with this line of reasoning so you're doing a great job keeping up the suspense. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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I don't know where he's going with this line of reasoning so you're doing a great job keeping up the suspense. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Good...that was my hope. I am so pleased you enjoyed reading this one.
Comment from marcii
The mention of Susan at the end of this chapter reminded me that she was a part of this story. I didn't forget her or even Charlie but as they are not the main characters and so much is happening with James it's a good thing to hear of her.
Marcii
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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The mention of Susan at the end of this chapter reminded me that she was a part of this story. I didn't forget her or even Charlie but as they are not the main characters and so much is happening with James it's a good thing to hear of her.
Marcii
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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I may need to edit a bit and remind the readers that so far, this really only covers a few weeks of time. Yes, I thought it was time to let everyone know more about how Susan is ding. I get back to Charlie and Mom too.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Smurph,
I enjoyed reading this chapter but I too wonder what James is thinking and how can he get his father to tell him where he buried Mary Ellen? You have weaved a lot of mystery into this chapter and did it extremely well. The conversations seem natural and believable. I hope you don't make me wait to long until the next chapter. Well done...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Hi Smurph,
I enjoyed reading this chapter but I too wonder what James is thinking and how can he get his father to tell him where he buried Mary Ellen? You have weaved a lot of mystery into this chapter and did it extremely well. The conversations seem natural and believable. I hope you don't make me wait to long until the next chapter. Well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. I am working on the next chapter between reviews.
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Yippee!
Comment from WRITER1
This was a very good chapter, I don't know what he is up to but I think his father is in deep trouble. I like how he out shines the cop and attorney.
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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This was a very good chapter, I don't know what he is up to but I think his father is in deep trouble. I like how he out shines the cop and attorney.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Yup, Dad is no match for James. Glad you liked this one.