Freedom is Precious
Quatrain rhyming poem30 total reviews
Comment from Donovan
No spelling errors found. No grammar errors detected.Bad Phrase Score*: 3.867 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.
Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing. Transitional Words Score*: 42
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range! Vocabulary Score: 51
Vocabulary Word Count: 3
Percentage of Vocab Words: 1.67%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): leave, faltered, haunt
This paper could benefit from greater usage of vocabulary words. Although your vocabulary score is within the average range for most writers, boosting it above 60 will help your paper stand out. I ran it through paper rater of course does not doe poetry as a category. I gave it an A...it gave it a B...that is why you should like me more.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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No spelling errors found. No grammar errors detected.Bad Phrase Score*: 3.867 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.
Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing. Transitional Words Score*: 42
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range! Vocabulary Score: 51
Vocabulary Word Count: 3
Percentage of Vocab Words: 1.67%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): leave, faltered, haunt
This paper could benefit from greater usage of vocabulary words. Although your vocabulary score is within the average range for most writers, boosting it above 60 will help your paper stand out. I ran it through paper rater of course does not doe poetry as a category. I gave it an A...it gave it a B...that is why you should like me more.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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I love you lots.... and love your wonderful commentary and grade. What does paper rater know about creativity in poetry..... LOL Thanks for the great support and kindness.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear skye,
Great tribute to the poor bastards that lay their lives on the line for freedom. I could make just one change to broaden the tribute in the last line, but this is your poem and I respect your patriotism.
Free world's daughters and sons.
Thanks for writing this.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Dear skye,
Great tribute to the poor bastards that lay their lives on the line for freedom. I could make just one change to broaden the tribute in the last line, but this is your poem and I respect your patriotism.
Free world's daughters and sons.
Thanks for writing this.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 15-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you very much for your encouraging and kind words. I go with America, only because it is my country, but you are so right... the free world owes all freedom to these brave soldiers who fight to protect us all.
Comment from Gunjann
its a great thought....National thought is always superb!! you have written it beautifully , I enjoyed reading it till the end but since its a quatrain so somewhere rhymes are missing...a perfect quatrain should go with aabb, abab,,and all.....
otherwise I enjoyed it and also has touched my heart
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reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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its a great thought....National thought is always superb!! you have written it beautifully , I enjoyed reading it till the end but since its a quatrain so somewhere rhymes are missing...a perfect quatrain should go with aabb, abab,,and all.....
otherwise I enjoyed it and also has touched my heart
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you very much for your encouraging and kind words.
Comment from Ankh
This is a great poem about surviving the horrors of combat. Most people will never know the smells and sounds that a firefight involves, or the memories that similar scents and sounds invoke.
Seth
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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This is a great poem about surviving the horrors of combat. Most people will never know the smells and sounds that a firefight involves, or the memories that similar scents and sounds invoke.
Seth
Comment Written 14-May-2011
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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Thank you for the terrific review and kind comments.
Comment from Kingsland
What is it all for. Death and destruction at any and all doors. I have no beef with you my good man of honor and approach. You were only doing your duty as it was given. But unless we stop this vileness of war. In the end, war will end us all... John
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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What is it all for. Death and destruction at any and all doors. I have no beef with you my good man of honor and approach. You were only doing your duty as it was given. But unless we stop this vileness of war. In the end, war will end us all... John
Comment Written 14-May-2011
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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You are absolutely correct... war solves nothing, and we will end up destroying the world. I appreciate your thoughts and kind review. Thank you.
Comment from Hitcher
This is an excellent tribute to the one and all and the sacrifices they make, for without them the freedoms that many take for granted would be quickly torn asunder, burned and broken into a thousand pieces...
Excellent poem!
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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This is an excellent tribute to the one and all and the sacrifices they make, for without them the freedoms that many take for granted would be quickly torn asunder, burned and broken into a thousand pieces...
Excellent poem!
Comment Written 14-May-2011
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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I appreciate your thoughts and kind review. Thank you. Freedom is worth the fight.. when the alternative is destruction, loss of rights, and death.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Wonderful poem and glorious message. Thank you,thank you,does not seem enough. We have and do pray for the soldiers,who serve us by laying down their lives. Beautiful structure,flow and rhyme. Great message. Bravo dear servant.
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Wonderful poem and glorious message. Thank you,thank you,does not seem enough. We have and do pray for the soldiers,who serve us by laying down their lives. Beautiful structure,flow and rhyme. Great message. Bravo dear servant.
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Thanks for this terrific review and kind comments.
Comment from Pen&Ink
"Never again (to)
stray" might fit the rhythm better.
"(Our)daughters and sons." Again, a rhythm issue.
All in all, I liked your poem. Your patriotism and loyalty come through loud and clear. The rhymes are very good.
Ray
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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"Never again (to)
stray" might fit the rhythm better.
"(Our)daughters and sons." Again, a rhythm issue.
All in all, I liked your poem. Your patriotism and loyalty come through loud and clear. The rhymes are very good.
Ray
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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I am very grateful for your suggestions and am delighted you liked it. Thank you.
Comment from pickthorn
A really great quatrain entry. Your pride and dedication to your flag and country are so apparent in this beautiful poem. Thank you for your military service. I hope you win.
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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A really great quatrain entry. Your pride and dedication to your flag and country are so apparent in this beautiful poem. Thank you for your military service. I hope you win.
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Thank you very much for the terrific review and generous gift of six.
Comment from Des Beirne
I'm not an American, but lots of us Brits feel the same way.
Your poem honours those who are chosen to fight (and die) for our freedom. I commend your thoughts and words.
Great read.
Des
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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I'm not an American, but lots of us Brits feel the same way.
Your poem honours those who are chosen to fight (and die) for our freedom. I commend your thoughts and words.
Great read.
Des
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
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Around the world, people feel similiar about similiar events, jobs, family, world situations. Thank you very much for the terrific review.
