The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Getting to Know Mr. Hurley"A family learns their father is a serial killer
31 total reviews
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hi,
Oh, this is a great chapter.
Interesting.
Good descriptions.
Good dialogue.
Full of intrigue.
Great way to end it too.
one possible spag: 11th paragraph from the bottom, 3rd line: of perjury did you mean or perjury? double check it.
Great job.
katie
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Hi,
Oh, this is a great chapter.
Interesting.
Good descriptions.
Good dialogue.
Full of intrigue.
Great way to end it too.
one possible spag: 11th paragraph from the bottom, 3rd line: of perjury did you mean or perjury? double check it.
Great job.
katie
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thanks for catching the spag. I am pleased you enjoyed this one.
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You're welcome.
Katie
Comment from Tellis
You have done quite a bit of character developement in this chapter and it goes a long way towards telling us about them and thier story. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter. I think any Publisher would be happy to snap up this book and I hope you send it to some to find out.
Tellis
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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You have done quite a bit of character developement in this chapter and it goes a long way towards telling us about them and thier story. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter. I think any Publisher would be happy to snap up this book and I hope you send it to some to find out.
Tellis
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you very much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this chaphter.
Comment from Permelia
I think James has to decide whether he is going to continue to help the detective with the unsolved murders his father has committed or be quiet. I think he will continue to help. I have often wondered how lawyers live with themselves-
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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I think James has to decide whether he is going to continue to help the detective with the unsolved murders his father has committed or be quiet. I think he will continue to help. I have often wondered how lawyers live with themselves-
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Many drink heavily. Other develop an I don't care attitude. Sadly, I've known both. Yes, James needs to take a stand.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Great job. I'm glad it's being followed immediately. I could have continued reading without a problem. But since it was not; IT'S ON TO THE NEXT!!!!
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Great job. I'm glad it's being followed immediately. I could have continued reading without a problem. But since it was not; IT'S ON TO THE NEXT!!!!
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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You are going to be disappointed...the next one isn't a chapter to the book, but I do plan to post the next chapter on Tuesday or Wednesday.
Comment from jmdg1954
Hello Valarie...
Your story continues to shine. The flow of the story is smooth ands I find it unintereupted, the dialgue is well written and the charectors make me feel as I am in the story itself.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Hello Valarie...
Your story continues to shine. The flow of the story is smooth ands I find it unintereupted, the dialgue is well written and the charectors make me feel as I am in the story itself.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Good work. Your writing is good. Your details, descriptions, and dialogue moved the story along at a good pace. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. I'll have to try and go back and read some of the other chapters.
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Good work. Your writing is good. Your details, descriptions, and dialogue moved the story along at a good pace. An enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. I'll have to try and go back and read some of the other chapters.
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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I am pleased you are continuing to enjoy this story.
Comment from MS Writer
Great story and chapter. I'm glad I'm following this because it is well written with characters who are natural. Good flow and I enjoyed this read.
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Great story and chapter. I'm glad I'm following this because it is well written with characters who are natural. Good flow and I enjoyed this read.
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
So now we know that as much as Mr. Hurley believes in the rules of attorney client confidentiality, he is willing to bend rules for a just outcome. Now the letters James has found are about to be read, but Mac will be there for the reading.What will they reveal. Are there murders and more secrets in the Mathews' family tree? And what new information does Mac have?
you sure like to leave your readers in suspense. How many Irish hugs will it take to get more information from you?
Roger
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Hi Valerie:)
So now we know that as much as Mr. Hurley believes in the rules of attorney client confidentiality, he is willing to bend rules for a just outcome. Now the letters James has found are about to be read, but Mac will be there for the reading.What will they reveal. Are there murders and more secrets in the Mathews' family tree? And what new information does Mac have?
you sure like to leave your readers in suspense. How many Irish hugs will it take to get more information from you?
Roger
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Glad you enjoyed this one. Yes, I do like to leave the reader hanging.
Comment from Showboat
Excellent chapter, Sasha, gripping, even though it was narrative. I know how Mac feels, too. Sometimes ethics can go in both directions, and I for one, felt he did the right thing.
Great chapter!
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Excellent chapter, Sasha, gripping, even though it was narrative. I know how Mac feels, too. Sometimes ethics can go in both directions, and I for one, felt he did the right thing.
Great chapter!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Thanks so much. I am glad you liked this one.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, you've left us wondering...
a really good chapter, with the
conversation flowing naturally...
Mr. Hurley smiled again.
Sasha, as you've used Mr. Hurley in the line above, might you consider here... simply ...He smiled again.
Don't keep us waiting too long, my friend.
This is the best story on line, and I'm so
enjoying it.
Margaret
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Oh, you've left us wondering...
a really good chapter, with the
conversation flowing naturally...
Mr. Hurley smiled again.
Sasha, as you've used Mr. Hurley in the line above, might you consider here... simply ...He smiled again.
Don't keep us waiting too long, my friend.
This is the best story on line, and I'm so
enjoying it.
Margaret
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Thanks for pointing that out. I'll make the change. Glad you enjoyed this one.