The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Confidentiality or Conscience"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from WilliamDeen
Sins of the father visit the son. Very intense writing. Held my interest from beginning to end. Good work in every aspect. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Sins of the father visit the son. Very intense writing. Held my interest from beginning to end. Good work in every aspect. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from vickib
Great job now what about those letters. LOL! You better not put that off in the next chapter missy. I'm on the edge of my seat. HEHE! Mr. Hurley is so cute waddling. XO
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Great job now what about those letters. LOL! You better not put that off in the next chapter missy. I'm on the edge of my seat. HEHE! Mr. Hurley is so cute waddling. XO
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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I promise they will be in the next chapter....really. Glad you like dthis one.
Comment from Readywriter52
James is dealing with his father's crimes. He wants to get more inforation from Mr. Hurley, but Hurley is claiming client confidentiality. James obviously believes that Hurley know more than what he's saying.
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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James is dealing with his father's crimes. He wants to get more inforation from Mr. Hurley, but Hurley is claiming client confidentiality. James obviously believes that Hurley know more than what he's saying.
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Yes, James is very frustrated.
Comment from raw form
Barreing right alongh with your story, I like the cliffhanger edge you put on each chapter. the element of surprise is your greatest gift with this story and I'm enjoying it immensly...still.
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Barreing right alongh with your story, I like the cliffhanger edge you put on each chapter. the element of surprise is your greatest gift with this story and I'm enjoying it immensly...still.
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thanks. Then you won't be disappointed with the next chapter...lol
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I have not been disappointed at all I realy enjoy the story SG its full of feeling and depth
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Val. So sorry I have missed so much. I've been laid up with a back injury recently. Am trying to get back at it again and it feels great.
Your writing is flawless as usual. Your great use of imagery is fabulous for example:
" I heard the elevator door open and a grey-haired, chunky man stepped into the hallway. I stood up and watched as he waddled toward me holding his brief case in one hand and a large stack of manila folders in the other. Without bothering to say hello, he handed me the folders in order to free up his hand so he could insert the key into the lock.
Bravo! Splendid writing as usual. bob
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Hi, Val. So sorry I have missed so much. I've been laid up with a back injury recently. Am trying to get back at it again and it feels great.
Your writing is flawless as usual. Your great use of imagery is fabulous for example:
" I heard the elevator door open and a grey-haired, chunky man stepped into the hallway. I stood up and watched as he waddled toward me holding his brief case in one hand and a large stack of manila folders in the other. Without bothering to say hello, he handed me the folders in order to free up his hand so he could insert the key into the lock.
Bravo! Splendid writing as usual. bob
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thank you so much. I too am behind in my reviewing. I took a few weeks off (doctor's orders) and have just recently returned. Hope you are feeling better!
Comment from marcii
Well James tried his hardest to get more details but really he learnt nothing much from the Lawyer accept that he already knew what James found out from his mother.
Marcii
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Well James tried his hardest to get more details but really he learnt nothing much from the Lawyer accept that he already knew what James found out from his mother.
Marcii
Comment Written 08-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thanks. At least now Mr. Hurley can get rid of the weight holding this secret has caused.
Comment from LadyNyx
Another great chapter that is active and full of energy. The interplay between the two works great for the chapter and has me wanting to know what the letters say even more. The analysis of the reasons behind a serial killer is not only a great way to relay information about James' father, but held a lot of truth to it. A really great chapter that leaves me wanting more...again. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Another great chapter that is active and full of energy. The interplay between the two works great for the chapter and has me wanting to know what the letters say even more. The analysis of the reasons behind a serial killer is not only a great way to relay information about James' father, but held a lot of truth to it. A really great chapter that leaves me wanting more...again. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 07-May-2011
reply by the author on 08-May-2011
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Thank you very much. I am so pleased you continue to enjoy this.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
Once more James exhibits his brilliant mind as he leads Mr. Hurley through a web of ethical considerations:
Mr. Hurley smiled. "It doesn't matter what you know, I still cannot confirm or deny it if it contains information I obtained prior to becoming your attorney."
I was losing my patience. "Would you consider lying?"
Not sure what I was proposing, Mr. Hurley scratched his head then asked, "You want me to lie about what your father said?"
I burst into laughter. "No, I want you to lie about telling me what he said. I find it hard to believe that being a lawyer you have never lied before." {How can a lawyer, escape such logic {Great dialog.]
I agree that arrogance is likely a driving force for many serial killers. have you looked at "Diary of a Serial Killer" by cooljules His serial killer is motivated by many things. It is a far different story than what you are writtin, but is still some of the best fiction on FanStory. I would classify it as crime, horror.Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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Hi Valerie:)
Once more James exhibits his brilliant mind as he leads Mr. Hurley through a web of ethical considerations:
Mr. Hurley smiled. "It doesn't matter what you know, I still cannot confirm or deny it if it contains information I obtained prior to becoming your attorney."
I was losing my patience. "Would you consider lying?"
Not sure what I was proposing, Mr. Hurley scratched his head then asked, "You want me to lie about what your father said?"
I burst into laughter. "No, I want you to lie about telling me what he said. I find it hard to believe that being a lawyer you have never lied before." {How can a lawyer, escape such logic {Great dialog.]
I agree that arrogance is likely a driving force for many serial killers. have you looked at "Diary of a Serial Killer" by cooljules His serial killer is motivated by many things. It is a far different story than what you are writtin, but is still some of the best fiction on FanStory. I would classify it as crime, horror.Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 07-May-2011
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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No, I haven't but I will take a look at it. My information comes from both law enforcement and lots, and lots of research. To be honest, I think the reasoning behind serial killers is still far too complicated to make a definitive statement of the why. Thanks so much for the great review and awesome 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from lola29
It's is almost impossible to believe that James is the son of a serial killer. Somehow, I believe James is his Mother's truth. This chapter was absolutely a thrill to read.
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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It's is almost impossible to believe that James is the son of a serial killer. Somehow, I believe James is his Mother's truth. This chapter was absolutely a thrill to read.
Comment Written 07-May-2011
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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I come from a severely dysfunctional family and I cannot tell you how often I wonder how in the world I could possibly be related to anyone of them. I like your comment that James is his Mother's truth....I might use that (would you mind?)
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I would be honored.
Comment from Permelia
When I start reading your story, I get so rapt up in it, I never notice anything to tell you to correct or help with the story. But this time I found something! Maybe ! LOL
variety a reasons - maybe variety of reasons?
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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When I start reading your story, I get so rapt up in it, I never notice anything to tell you to correct or help with the story. But this time I found something! Maybe ! LOL
variety a reasons - maybe variety of reasons?
Comment Written 07-May-2011
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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Thanks for catching that. I am so pleased you continue to enjoy this story.