The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Some Things Are Best Left Alone"A family learns their father is a serial killer
31 total reviews
Comment from vickib
That's weird, but I've heard of that before people used to hide it this way. But where the heck is she? My mind tries to figure this out but you surprised me with this one. Great chapter Valerie.
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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That's weird, but I've heard of that before people used to hide it this way. But where the heck is she? My mind tries to figure this out but you surprised me with this one. Great chapter Valerie.
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Good to see you are almost caught up. Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from raw form
This is most excellent I love the turn of events as they unfold. you've got a great story here and I am thrilled to be able to read it before someone recognizes your talent and snatches you away from FS. Great stuff!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2011
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This is most excellent I love the turn of events as they unfold. you've got a great story here and I am thrilled to be able to read it before someone recognizes your talent and snatches you away from FS. Great stuff!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2011
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Not to worry, no matter what happens I plan to be with FS for quite some time. I am thrilled you like this that much.
Comment from Terry wrote
I've missed a few chapters,but will go back and read those, most of them at the beginning. I jumped in about four chapters ago. You write very convincingly, your characters are believable, your dialogue strong, and your description of their emotional behavior is very clear. I'll read on...
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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I've missed a few chapters,but will go back and read those, most of them at the beginning. I jumped in about four chapters ago. You write very convincingly, your characters are believable, your dialogue strong, and your description of their emotional behavior is very clear. I'll read on...
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you find my characters believable and enjoy the dialogue. Coming from my own personal dysfunctional family I have plenty of fodder to pick from. We were all nuts and never stopped talking.
Comment from Alaskastory
'Some Things Are Best Left Alone' is a chapter full of a shocking surprise. James' questioning of his mother adds revealing aspects of her life.Well written, Sasha!
need a space: '...in a()mixture of rage, fear, and...
space between words needed: '...so()many()people digging into Dad's past,...
I look forward to the rest of the truth and hope it is in the next chapter. lol, Marie
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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'Some Things Are Best Left Alone' is a chapter full of a shocking surprise. James' questioning of his mother adds revealing aspects of her life.Well written, Sasha!
need a space: '...in a()mixture of rage, fear, and...
space between words needed: '...so()many()people digging into Dad's past,...
I look forward to the rest of the truth and hope it is in the next chapter. lol, Marie
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thanks for catching the spags. I am thrilled you continue to enjoy this story.
Comment from Southern Writer
I have been waiting for the story of the dad's childhood.
You did a great job of showing how the mom became broken down by the endless verbal abuse.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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I have been waiting for the story of the dad's childhood.
You did a great job of showing how the mom became broken down by the endless verbal abuse.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Often people don't realize the deep, emotional damage years of verbal abuse can cause. I am pleased I was able to convey this. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from missy98writer
Sasha,
chapter twenty-five is superbly written. I have one last six and you're getting it fro chapter twenty five. James finally learned the truth which is a hard pill to swallow. Your descriptive writing is outstanding in this chapter. Your dialogue is excellent. This was an awesome line: "Mom snapped to attention like an obedient soldier. She blinked several times, sat up straight, and began to speak." James leaned his dad did indeed brain was his mamma. I look forward to reading more, my friend. Have a wonderful weekend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Sasha,
chapter twenty-five is superbly written. I have one last six and you're getting it fro chapter twenty five. James finally learned the truth which is a hard pill to swallow. Your descriptive writing is outstanding in this chapter. Your dialogue is excellent. This was an awesome line: "Mom snapped to attention like an obedient soldier. She blinked several times, sat up straight, and began to speak." James leaned his dad did indeed brain was his mamma. I look forward to reading more, my friend. Have a wonderful weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for your enthusiastic review and awesome 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate both. I always look forward to your comments and hope you have a wonderful weekend too.
Comment from marcii
They say that killers usually come from broken homes, I'don't believe this is always true, however James's Father sure had a messed up home.
One can't blame the way they are brought up for others in similar lives don't turn to murder.
Marcii
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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They say that killers usually come from broken homes, I'don't believe this is always true, however James's Father sure had a messed up home.
One can't blame the way they are brought up for others in similar lives don't turn to murder.
Marcii
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Statistically it is more likely that a serial killer comes from a violent/abusive childhood. This may explain why they grow into violent people but it is not an excuse. Many people come from violent backgrounds and do not become killers. I do believe that a violent childhood causes serious psychological damage that later shows up in a multitude of different ways. Those that receive help for this have a far greater chance of leading a relatively normal life.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
What an agony it must have been writing all this, even if it is fiction. James's mother has suffered such a cruel and insidious makeover. It is a very emotional chapter.
Giddy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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What an agony it must have been writing all this, even if it is fiction. James's mother has suffered such a cruel and insidious makeover. It is a very emotional chapter.
Giddy
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Yes, it was a difficult chapter to write. I am pleased you enjoyed it.
Comment from Readywriter52
James did learn a shocking secret from his mother. His father's past does explain a lot about him. His father was sadistic. His mother was also his sister. His father must have had a cruel childhood.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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James did learn a shocking secret from his mother. His father's past does explain a lot about him. His father was sadistic. His mother was also his sister. His father must have had a cruel childhood.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Yes, he did have a cruel childhood. Still, too many unanswered questions. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from axelbeariter
"I met John in my second year at college. For me it was love at first sight. He was so handsome and charming. He could have had any girl he wanted but he chose me./Even if it's true, this is a cliche scenario--work it to make it sound original----"John never loved me; he loved the woman he created."/now that's original, at least to me----"Damn it, I asked you a question. Answer it?"/great characterization----"There is more isn't there?"/great hook----I'm out of sixers, so I'll have to give you a fiver--just think of it as the six you were cheated out of, because of the system.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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"I met John in my second year at college. For me it was love at first sight. He was so handsome and charming. He could have had any girl he wanted but he chose me./Even if it's true, this is a cliche scenario--work it to make it sound original----"John never loved me; he loved the woman he created."/now that's original, at least to me----"Damn it, I asked you a question. Answer it?"/great characterization----"There is more isn't there?"/great hook----I'm out of sixers, so I'll have to give you a fiver--just think of it as the six you were cheated out of, because of the system.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thanks for the suggestions, I always appreciate them. Don't worry about the 6, I am more than happy with a 5.