Tiny Dancers
Nature Poem7 total reviews
Comment from psalmist
Oh, I love this. The vision of the beautiful ballerinas, the pink and white tears that fall to the ground. Wonderful visuals of tree and emotion.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Oh, I love this. The vision of the beautiful ballerinas, the pink and white tears that fall to the ground. Wonderful visuals of tree and emotion.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you for loving it!!!
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Dear person I just wanted to tell you how happy iwas that you one of the finalist and winners. Even though would loved to have won
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Thank you so much for your congrats. Actually, I voted for yours. I thought it was delightful. Linda
Comment from patmedium
Yes, the memories do remain, Val, all year until the next spring ... I look out of my window and I see the buds swelling and threatening to open on the four here in the centre of this little square. Nicely done. Love the illustration. Pat.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Yes, the memories do remain, Val, all year until the next spring ... I look out of my window and I see the buds swelling and threatening to open on the four here in the centre of this little square. Nicely done. Love the illustration. Pat.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for such an insightful review!
Comment from Shirley B
This is a lovely poem. The rhyme aamd meter are great. We don't have cherry trees trees around here. It is too hot and dry. The imagery in your poem is wonderful. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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This is a lovely poem. The rhyme aamd meter are great. We don't have cherry trees trees around here. It is too hot and dry. The imagery in your poem is wonderful. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review!
Comment from c_lucas
Flower blossoms heralds the coming of Spring. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Flower blossoms heralds the coming of Spring. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much
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You're welcome, Val. Charlie
Comment from RYME4U
This is a lovely description! The rhyme is good and thye rhythm is smooth and even. It presents a beautiful mind-picture. You did well on this one.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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This is a lovely description! The rhyme is good and thye rhythm is smooth and even. It presents a beautiful mind-picture. You did well on this one.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much
Comment from BothePo8
Here's how I would write this lovely poem so that it is a little smoother:
Cherry blossoms dancing
Ballerinas pink and white
Hopping, leaping, prancing
Springs visual delight
The Dancers time is brief
Petals floating to the ground
Pink and white, tears of grief
Now falling without sound
Now both stanzas have a 6/7/6/6/ meter pattern
My best wishes to you, Bo
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Here's how I would write this lovely poem so that it is a little smoother:
Cherry blossoms dancing
Ballerinas pink and white
Hopping, leaping, prancing
Springs visual delight
The Dancers time is brief
Petals floating to the ground
Pink and white, tears of grief
Now falling without sound
Now both stanzas have a 6/7/6/6/ meter pattern
My best wishes to you, Bo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Not sure what bumps you speak of Bo?
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Count the syllables in each line and in each stanza and see if they are the same....If not, there usually is a rhythm problem. My poems are pretty rhythmic. If you have the time, it might help to check one of mine for comparison. Just a thought....Bo
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i made some changes you might like - no pressure to change my status. thanks for all your input
Comment from amandabell75
You captured this cherry blossom tree beautifully and with emotion. It flowed beautifully and with wonderful word choice. Good luck with the entry :)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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You captured this cherry blossom tree beautifully and with emotion. It flowed beautifully and with wonderful word choice. Good luck with the entry :)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your thoughtful review