The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Be Careful What You Ask For"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Aski
I'm in catch up mode, going back a chapter at a time. I'm sorry I hadn't read this chapter earlier. It is extremely well done. Some gems in here are descriptions like: (1) "Leave it to Mac to hand me a large plate of piping hot pressure peppered with enough guilt to give someone with a cast-iron stomach a permanent case of heartburn;" and (2) "The big, tough, burly cop was pouring his heart out to me. I felt like I was treading on sacred ground meant only to be shared with him and God." Those are memorable. I like James' comment "now that I am qualified for sainthood." Considering James' father's humble start it is hard to imagine how he had become so successful. If James had a high IQ I guess that his father may have too.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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I'm in catch up mode, going back a chapter at a time. I'm sorry I hadn't read this chapter earlier. It is extremely well done. Some gems in here are descriptions like: (1) "Leave it to Mac to hand me a large plate of piping hot pressure peppered with enough guilt to give someone with a cast-iron stomach a permanent case of heartburn;" and (2) "The big, tough, burly cop was pouring his heart out to me. I felt like I was treading on sacred ground meant only to be shared with him and God." Those are memorable. I like James' comment "now that I am qualified for sainthood." Considering James' father's humble start it is hard to imagine how he had become so successful. If James had a high IQ I guess that his father may have too.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2011
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There has been a lot of research into the genetics behind high IQ's and it is equally divided between the yes and no's. I go into why James's dad was so successful despite his father's abusive nature later in the book. thanks so much for the awesome 6 stars, I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from vickib
I love the plate of food Valerie, cracked me up. So now the dad is getting even more mysterious his family too. And your right when your a kid you don't question the man who runs the house with an iron fist. I used to be scared to say anything ever let alone ask a question. So that rings very true for me. XO Vicki
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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I love the plate of food Valerie, cracked me up. So now the dad is getting even more mysterious his family too. And your right when your a kid you don't question the man who runs the house with an iron fist. I used to be scared to say anything ever let alone ask a question. So that rings very true for me. XO Vicki
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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It rings true for me too. I am glad you liked my plate of food comment too.
Comment from Tellis
Sounds like his father had a rough childhood and I wonder if there is criminal activity in his past? I enjoyed this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Sounds like his father had a rough childhood and I wonder if there is criminal activity in his past? I enjoyed this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thanks. I'm pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Alaskastory
'Be Careful What You Ask For'is a chapter that lets us see another side of Mac and learn more about the killer. James reaction and persistance to get more information on his father gives promise that more fascinating truth will be exposed soon.
Very enjoyable chapter, Sasha.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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'Be Careful What You Ask For'is a chapter that lets us see another side of Mac and learn more about the killer. James reaction and persistance to get more information on his father gives promise that more fascinating truth will be exposed soon.
Very enjoyable chapter, Sasha.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thanks so much. I am very pleased you enjoyed this one.
Comment from words
I'm so glad to see you back at posting again. You have been missed.
Love your story and would also like you to catch us up on your adventures with the breakfast club. I know that you guys have had some merry adventures ....
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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I'm so glad to see you back at posting again. You have been missed.
Love your story and would also like you to catch us up on your adventures with the breakfast club. I know that you guys have had some merry adventures ....
Hugs, d
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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I'm working on a few stories now. Hopefully I'll be able to post them in the next day or two. Glad you liked this chapter. It is so good to be back among the living!
Comment from axelbeariter
Arc of the Covenant/s/b Ark--that's what the label said when I found it in Ethiopia----Leave it to Mac to hand me a large plate of piping hot pressure peppered with enough guilt to give someone with a cast-iron stomach a permanent case of heartburn./great line----with the social skills of a wart hog, an IQ that made everyone in the room feel like a kindergarten dropout,/love it! Especially too, when all my reviewing points about your work are laudable
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Arc of the Covenant/s/b Ark--that's what the label said when I found it in Ethiopia----Leave it to Mac to hand me a large plate of piping hot pressure peppered with enough guilt to give someone with a cast-iron stomach a permanent case of heartburn./great line----with the social skills of a wart hog, an IQ that made everyone in the room feel like a kindergarten dropout,/love it! Especially too, when all my reviewing points about your work are laudable
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thanks so much for catching the spelling error. I am thrilled you got a kick out of my description of James. I've been waiting a long time to write this one...I just love that kid! Thanks so much for the awesome 6 stars, I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from lola29
Good grief! Was his grandfather also a serial killer? That's scary because one would tend to believe that a bad gene was passed down to that family. No wonder Mac likes James. Who wouldn't--he's a genious with a kind heart.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Good grief! Was his grandfather also a serial killer? That's scary because one would tend to believe that a bad gene was passed down to that family. No wonder Mac likes James. Who wouldn't--he's a genious with a kind heart.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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So far there has been no scientific evidence of a 'serial' killer gene...but who knows. I personally think it is totally environmental or cause and effect. Glad you like James as much as I do, he's the son I never had.
Comment from whitteron
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This is a solid chapter, with crisp writing. I didn't see any areas that needed to be changed, and it seems there is a family web filled with lies. Interesting....nothing at the cabin? bummer.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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This is a solid chapter, with crisp writing. I didn't see any areas that needed to be changed, and it seems there is a family web filled with lies. Interesting....nothing at the cabin? bummer.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Not so quick, they are still looking at the cabin....it's a big place. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
More frustration for James.After telling Mac all that he knew about his father's early background, he finds more holes in the police investigation.Nothing that Mac told James seems to rise to the level of Mac's warning, "James, some things are best left alone."
The bits and pieces that Mac reveals only makes James more determined to find out the truth of his father's early life. Now he is determined to find out the full extent of what his mother and Aunt Em always backed away from revealing.
This is an excellent Chapter, that revels only a few pieces of what appears to be a well kept family secret. Will James finally get his relatives to tell all. I'm ready to find out.
Love ans hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Hi Valerie:)
More frustration for James.After telling Mac all that he knew about his father's early background, he finds more holes in the police investigation.Nothing that Mac told James seems to rise to the level of Mac's warning, "James, some things are best left alone."
The bits and pieces that Mac reveals only makes James more determined to find out the truth of his father's early life. Now he is determined to find out the full extent of what his mother and Aunt Em always backed away from revealing.
This is an excellent Chapter, that revels only a few pieces of what appears to be a well kept family secret. Will James finally get his relatives to tell all. I'm ready to find out.
Love ans hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Yes, I did tease the reader a bit with this one. James definitely has his work cut out for him if he expects to find the truth behind who his dad really is. I am pleased you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, such mystery and leaving us hanging....
wanting to know more - most enjoyable, Sasha.
urge to laugh(,) remembering
It was obvious the why ??? Can't understand this.. perhaps
It was obvious that what
not to [not] push him. - lose 2nd "not"
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Oh, such mystery and leaving us hanging....
wanting to know more - most enjoyable, Sasha.
urge to laugh(,) remembering
It was obvious the why ??? Can't understand this.. perhaps
It was obvious that what
not to [not] push him. - lose 2nd "not"
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thanks for catching the spags. I take a look at that awkward sentence and see what I can do to fix it.