The Long Way Home
Where the hills really do have eyes33 total reviews
Comment from Veekz
OHHHH spooky reading! Even though nothing happened I had this horrible feeling of dread right until your good dog popped up to welcome you home :)
Love the descriptions of the gully and the trees within - also loved the reference to the hills resembling dinosaurs. However my fav line has to be: Late at night, when the moon is on vacation. Love the 'the moon is on vacation' - awesome!
One little fix up:
"Surely that won't happen.", I say
-should be
"Surely that won't happen," I say
Not big enough to take away the piece though so still top marks from me. Fab read! :)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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OHHHH spooky reading! Even though nothing happened I had this horrible feeling of dread right until your good dog popped up to welcome you home :)
Love the descriptions of the gully and the trees within - also loved the reference to the hills resembling dinosaurs. However my fav line has to be: Late at night, when the moon is on vacation. Love the 'the moon is on vacation' - awesome!
One little fix up:
"Surely that won't happen.", I say
-should be
"Surely that won't happen," I say
Not big enough to take away the piece though so still top marks from me. Fab read! :)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Jess! Thank you, and I will correct the period too! I am wondering, do you see a purple chest or a gold one? I bought a purple for this? It pays more!! I have trouble each time. But, thank you again...I hope you and your friends and family are doing well. It's always so good to hear from you!! xoxo, susan
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A chest? Purple, gold? What are they? Lol I didn't see either and don't know what they are sorry!! :)
Comment from sasil
Excellent writing! You really know how to set a mood and scene. Wonder if your auto has 4 wheel drive, lol. Awesome alliteration in the line about dinosaurs skulking beneath the stormy sky. I'm so glad to have read this! Best always, and be safe (lol).
S.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Excellent writing! You really know how to set a mood and scene. Wonder if your auto has 4 wheel drive, lol. Awesome alliteration in the line about dinosaurs skulking beneath the stormy sky. I'm so glad to have read this! Best always, and be safe (lol).
S.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Sasil! Thank you! I hope you are getting the purple chest! It pays more! I tried to put it on there, but I think it's a poetry one! NO fair! I contacted the site? I am thrilled to have you enjoy this!! Hugs for reading and reviewing for me Sasil!! xoxo, susan
Comment from sunny39
I think your descriptions are marvelous. I felt like I was in the car, seeing familiar places that seemed so unfamiliar in the darkness of night. I can feel the anxiety of the lone driver building - the imagination of the lone driver kicking into gear.
It was a fun write for you, and a fun read for me. This could have been, you know, a great beginning for a thriller.
Sunny
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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I think your descriptions are marvelous. I felt like I was in the car, seeing familiar places that seemed so unfamiliar in the darkness of night. I can feel the anxiety of the lone driver building - the imagination of the lone driver kicking into gear.
It was a fun write for you, and a fun read for me. This could have been, you know, a great beginning for a thriller.
Sunny
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hey! Thank you Sunny! Did you see a purple prose chest with this? It pays more and I bought one? I really appreciate this great encouragment and let me know which chest is there? HUG! Susan
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You are very welcome. Where would I look for the chest. I'm such a duh. LOL
