The Long Way Home
Where the hills really do have eyes33 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Yes and while the descriptives are excellent and the emotions build in terror, this could also be a psychological thriller whereby thise footsteps that chase you down the road are really reincarnates of your past.
Just in time you reach home. The light, the beacon and the welcome by the dog saved you tonight.
But, what about tomorrow, when once again you venture into the dark abyss? Will the demons of your momories catch you?
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Yes and while the descriptives are excellent and the emotions build in terror, this could also be a psychological thriller whereby thise footsteps that chase you down the road are really reincarnates of your past.
Just in time you reach home. The light, the beacon and the welcome by the dog saved you tonight.
But, what about tomorrow, when once again you venture into the dark abyss? Will the demons of your momories catch you?
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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HI Ingrid! Thank you so much. And you are so right! SEE????? YOU are so brilliant, you see things that the writers THEMSELVES don't even see! I am humbled and ashamed too! God, thank you so for this eye-opening note my friend! HUG! Susan
Comment from adewpearl
Your descriptive detail of setting creates mood well. Your wording is quite poetic, too :-)
You create strong visuals with lines like limbs resembling sinewy arms with claws.
You also express the narrator's fears effectively.
Your ending had me going there for a minute as those gnashing teeth reached for the car - I felt such relief in the final paragraph :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Your descriptive detail of setting creates mood well. Your wording is quite poetic, too :-)
You create strong visuals with lines like limbs resembling sinewy arms with claws.
You also express the narrator's fears effectively.
Your ending had me going there for a minute as those gnashing teeth reached for the car - I felt such relief in the final paragraph :-) Brooke
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Brooke! Thank you! What a great review! I love creating a sense of dread like that. It's the easiest emotion to convey for me. I don't know why. But, thank you so much for this enthusiastic review! ") Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, i really enjoyed reading this, reminds me when i was driving my little volkswagon beetle. i went to cocoa beach florida and wanted to find a church to go to, i got lost and ended up on a cow pasture road that went on for 37 miles. i refused to turn around because i wasn't giving up on church. i ended up in st. cloud and went to church and had a nice lunch. the next day when i left universal studios, i was cut off and couldn't get onto the beeline expressway. nobody could tell me how to get back to the beeline, it was 2 o'clock in the morning and i was driving around aimlessly, but God had a plan. I ended up in St. Cloud and i knew my way back to the hotel. but i was scared to death driving that 37 miles of cow pasture road, afraid i would break down in the middle of that dark expanse of notthingness
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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this is very well written, susan, i really enjoyed reading this, reminds me when i was driving my little volkswagon beetle. i went to cocoa beach florida and wanted to find a church to go to, i got lost and ended up on a cow pasture road that went on for 37 miles. i refused to turn around because i wasn't giving up on church. i ended up in st. cloud and went to church and had a nice lunch. the next day when i left universal studios, i was cut off and couldn't get onto the beeline expressway. nobody could tell me how to get back to the beeline, it was 2 o'clock in the morning and i was driving around aimlessly, but God had a plan. I ended up in St. Cloud and i knew my way back to the hotel. but i was scared to death driving that 37 miles of cow pasture road, afraid i would break down in the middle of that dark expanse of notthingness
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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OH LORD!!! 37 miles!!!!!! That is a long way to be in such a place! WOW! YOU should write a story about that Sweet! jeezz. I am so glad you made it! AND it's neat that this little tale brought back the memories I guess! Brrrr tho. I have chills just thinking of how long you drove around!! IN A BUG too! Oh it could have so easily gotten stuck! I had two different Beetles...they are valuable now...wish I had them back! ") Thank you for sharing your harrowing tale!! HUG! Susan
Comment from Trybuck
...And the story continues tomorrow in "How the Grinch Stole Christmas" and other bedtime stories for children. Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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...And the story continues tomorrow in "How the Grinch Stole Christmas" and other bedtime stories for children. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Buck! Thanks! I drove in a storm and really had the willies for some reason...I usually don't. I'm glad to hear from you!! Susan
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork
It is perfect for your poem
I love the flow of your poem it gave me goose pimples and chills
I use to work the grave yard shift and those and many more thing took over my imagination
a many nights I told myself is this worth the few extra dollars working these hours.
Nice weire.I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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I love the artwork
It is perfect for your poem
I love the flow of your poem it gave me goose pimples and chills
I use to work the grave yard shift and those and many more thing took over my imagination
a many nights I told myself is this worth the few extra dollars working these hours.
Nice weire.I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Cookie! Thank you! It's a real treat when you enjoy my efforts. I love that you got goosebumps! Just so it's not too bad! I was on that shift too when those kids knocked on our door at 2 am while Sam was home! BAD neighborhood here! ") Thanks again Cookie! xoxo, susan
Comment from Minglement
You certainly kept me hanging in there, waiting to see what would become of you on theat treacherous road. I used to live in the boonies too and it can be frightening in the dark, especially in stormy weather LOL. Fun read.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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You certainly kept me hanging in there, waiting to see what would become of you on theat treacherous road. I used to live in the boonies too and it can be frightening in the dark, especially in stormy weather LOL. Fun read.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Marcia! Thank you so. I really did have the creeps for a time. We have had floods and I had to go the long way. NOT good. ") I am so happy when you enjoy my efforts! Luv, susan
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You are always welcome. Have a great day! Marcia
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
THANKS FOR SHARING WITH ME A GOOD READ.Your story line is superb and interesting, and I like the picture you have chosen. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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THANKS FOR SHARING WITH ME A GOOD READ.Your story line is superb and interesting, and I like the picture you have chosen. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Mary! Why thank you so much! I am always pleased to know if you like my stories!! Please go to my portfolio if you want and read "Don't Leave Me Love?" I havn't done poetry for a while? Thanks again!! Luv, susan
Comment from Espresso momma
My land is out in the boonies also, I know what you mean by the hills have eyes. In my area it is cyotes or deer or moose. This is a good read, good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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My land is out in the boonies also, I know what you mean by the hills have eyes. In my area it is cyotes or deer or moose. This is a good read, good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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OH moose! Wow! We have elk here, but in Indiana, they are penned like cattle...and these nitwits here THINK they are hunters when they shoot them after they have been handed hay and grain all winter by people! They don't know to run...and if they do, they are fenced in! Oh, sorry for this rant...mentioning moose got me started! Thank you so much, I am really glad you liked my little tale. I always appreciate hearing from you! What is your name? If I can ask? Thanks!! susan
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Roberta, or Berta...thanks.
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OH good! Thanks Berta! I like it! ") Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is a sinister view of nature and an excellent short story. I enjoyed reading this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Susan,
This is a sinister view of nature and an excellent short story. I enjoyed reading this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Dave! Thank you so much! I had the heebie jeebies coming home from a trip last week, hence this...") Thank you again! It's good to hear from you! Susan
Comment from The Stranger
this is a quirky little ofering that is light hearted in its attempt to paint a picture of hidden menaces as the writer drives home through the desolate road that cuts through the hills, I for one enjoyed it
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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this is a quirky little ofering that is light hearted in its attempt to paint a picture of hidden menaces as the writer drives home through the desolate road that cuts through the hills, I for one enjoyed it
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Stranger! Thank you! It's great to know you liked this! I had these creepy feelings upon returning from a trip last week, tho I didn't think of dinosaurs at that time! I'm honored to have you enjoy my effort! ") Susan
