A Tale of Lillian Grace Revised
A children's Picture Book22 total reviews
Comment from Janie King
This is delightful and definitely something a child would enjoy reading. i think it's nice the main character is a little girl and her friend is a dragon, something little boys can associate with and not feel the story is for sissies. I had three brothers and they sure didn't want any sissy stories told them. Good job. God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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This is delightful and definitely something a child would enjoy reading. i think it's nice the main character is a little girl and her friend is a dragon, something little boys can associate with and not feel the story is for sissies. I had three brothers and they sure didn't want any sissy stories told them. Good job. God bless.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from WilliamDeen
girls surprise/// girls' surprise
GREAT story. The kids would love this one. It is so cute and fun with the girls and the dragon and unicorn. The dialogue even seems believable.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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girls surprise/// girls' surprise
GREAT story. The kids would love this one. It is so cute and fun with the girls and the dragon and unicorn. The dialogue even seems believable.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from oNray
Looks like it should work for children. It is soft, easy to fallow, contains imagination grabbing magic. The story does flow at a rate that would hold a child's attention Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Looks like it should work for children. It is soft, easy to fallow, contains imagination grabbing magic. The story does flow at a rate that would hold a child's attention Good job.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from ChowChow
This is one of the cutest children's stories I have ever read. And, I have read many! To lots of children, including my two and the grandkids, six. I am doing the same thing you are, but am going through Xlibris Publishing. Mine is a rhyming poem though... Called Mr. Woodchuck" But this isn't about me. I give you five stars and wish the very best for you. Thank you for sharing this story with us. Come visit me at: www.fanstory.com/chowchow
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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This is one of the cutest children's stories I have ever read. And, I have read many! To lots of children, including my two and the grandkids, six. I am doing the same thing you are, but am going through Xlibris Publishing. Mine is a rhyming poem though... Called Mr. Woodchuck" But this isn't about me. I give you five stars and wish the very best for you. Thank you for sharing this story with us. Come visit me at: www.fanstory.com/chowchow
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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I published my first book with
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Thank you for the info, but it's about paid for now. Can't afford to lose the investment in it. But now, thanks to you, I know where to go next time. Wish I would have known this before, I could have saved alot. Isn't it true, we live and learn? Again. Thanx
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Comment from Ozzie Trisha
This is a lovely 'Enid Blyton' style story for children. However, picture book stories require far fewer words as the pictures tell the story. For example the tent and sleeping bag don't need to be described as the pictures will tell the colours. This is why picture books are very hard to get published. Each word has to be chosen carefully. However as a story it's very sweet.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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This is a lovely 'Enid Blyton' style story for children. However, picture book stories require far fewer words as the pictures tell the story. For example the tent and sleeping bag don't need to be described as the pictures will tell the colours. This is why picture books are very hard to get published. Each word has to be chosen carefully. However as a story it's very sweet.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Osiek
I love reading picture books! I love dragons! So I am doubly happy in reading this one.
Cotton Candy Clouds, we want a treat". (I would put a new paragraph here, especially as Aubry speaks in a dialogue of her own) Up, up they went flying
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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I love reading picture books! I love dragons! So I am doubly happy in reading this one.
Cotton Candy Clouds, we want a treat". (I would put a new paragraph here, especially as Aubry speaks in a dialogue of her own) Up, up they went flying
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from laichan123
Lovely, innocent and charming children's story. I do have a question or two before rating and proceeding with the message: what age group are you targeting? and given today's fast-growing anti-sugar mentality, would favorite fruits not make the story more attractive to parents for their children? (I would verbally substitute fruits for lollipops for the young'uns I read to.) Can you get back to me? Both questions make a difference for comments, not necessarily rating.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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Lovely, innocent and charming children's story. I do have a question or two before rating and proceeding with the message: what age group are you targeting? and given today's fast-growing anti-sugar mentality, would favorite fruits not make the story more attractive to parents for their children? (I would verbally substitute fruits for lollipops for the young'uns I read to.) Can you get back to me? Both questions make a difference for comments, not necessarily rating.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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My target audience is 3 to 5 year olds. I appreciate your feedback about using fruit instead of sugar. I need to think about that for awhile.
Comment from quashdog
It was a lovely fantasy adventure sprung up from the mind of a child. As I read I almost felt like I was there in the fair grounds. Maybe the only suggestion is expand it a little have her go into a couple of other tens and experience some wonders you want her to share with other children, your readers.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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It was a lovely fantasy adventure sprung up from the mind of a child. As I read I almost felt like I was there in the fair grounds. Maybe the only suggestion is expand it a little have her go into a couple of other tens and experience some wonders you want her to share with other children, your readers.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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a couple of other tens?
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Sorry, I meant tents, you know, at the fair.
Comment from anne1204
My four year old twins would love this story. I hope you have a good illustrator. The pictures are just as important as the word to children. They want to see. I loved it. Anne
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2011
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My four year old twins would love this story. I hope you have a good illustrator. The pictures are just as important as the word to children. They want to see. I loved it. Anne
Comment Written 11-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. This will be my second children's book to publish. I really learned a lot abput the self-publisahing business.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
What a love children's story.
Lily said, "Mr. Hedgehog can we go for a ride?" He replied, shaking his head no, "I am sorry but with that horn the unicorn cannot go. She might burst the balloon." (Two dialogues in the same paragraph. You need a space and you need a comma after Hedgehog.)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2011
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What a love children's story.
Lily said, "Mr. Hedgehog can we go for a ride?" He replied, shaking his head no, "I am sorry but with that horn the unicorn cannot go. She might burst the balloon." (Two dialogues in the same paragraph. You need a space and you need a comma after Hedgehog.)
Comment Written 09-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback and the many stars.
