The 23rd Psalms and 1/2
destruction and redemption34 total reviews
Comment from Aletheia
Kiwi, your poem is magnificent. It's so deep and profound. I love how you respond to each line in the psalm with your own reaction to it, and then you share so intimately that moment that you gave yourself to God. I'm so glad this was nominated. It is truly a piece of poetic art. Jen
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Kiwi, your poem is magnificent. It's so deep and profound. I love how you respond to each line in the psalm with your own reaction to it, and then you share so intimately that moment that you gave yourself to God. I'm so glad this was nominated. It is truly a piece of poetic art. Jen
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Hello begonia...this was a difficult poem to do but once I started it had a mind of it's own. I am so honored that you felt a kinship with this piece and that you understood. Thank you for that and for this truly amazing review. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from sunnilicious
Joyce Meyer gets to me too. Sometimes it takes writing everything down as a path to finding your way. And you really poured your soul out in 'Spiritual Encounters.' Well thought out and written. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Joyce Meyer gets to me too. Sometimes it takes writing everything down as a path to finding your way. And you really poured your soul out in 'Spiritual Encounters.' Well thought out and written. Good luck!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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yes you witnessed a piece of my soul with this one. thank you for the review. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from parisaboyd
This was beautiful! Lonely then not alone unaccepting then accepting. It brought tears to my eyes it touched my heart and I know I have felt in that very position. What a write. It is perfect Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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This was beautiful! Lonely then not alone unaccepting then accepting. It brought tears to my eyes it touched my heart and I know I have felt in that very position. What a write. It is perfect Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Paris I don't know what to say other than I humbly thank you for such a remarkable review ... your respect for my work humbles me in a way that I am at a loss to explain to you. This particular one hurt like hell to write and felt like I was being pulled apart honestly seeking a direction to believe in something... thank you so much for your remarkable review of this piece. xoxo Deborah
Comment from closetpoetjester
You did a fantastic job tackling something like this and especially here and in this fashion kiwi. Good for you. Very profound writing in parts. I take from this write that the author had a convincing arguement for not listening to all Gods wise words but that was because they thought when God spoke that they had to FOLLOW. So was he really saying walk BESIDE me and you will understand? Me thinks that is the point you make...up til the epiphany towards the end it sounded pretty doubtful God had convinced them. But the wise words of the Lord shone through Joyce and all was understood. Sometimes it takes something simple like that for the penny to drop.
Maybe some of the things in the bible ARE a little hard to understand, follow and live by in literal terms. Sounds like this gal had the right idea using some straight talking laymans terms.
Hope I am somewhere on the page...I am unfamiliar with all this Psalm stuff so please forgive my ignorance. I very much liked the whole lot but the first couplet really set the tone. Despite knowing the Lord was thy shepherd this poor sould STILL felt lost. A very spiritual write and good luck in poem of the month.
Cheers closet xo
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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You did a fantastic job tackling something like this and especially here and in this fashion kiwi. Good for you. Very profound writing in parts. I take from this write that the author had a convincing arguement for not listening to all Gods wise words but that was because they thought when God spoke that they had to FOLLOW. So was he really saying walk BESIDE me and you will understand? Me thinks that is the point you make...up til the epiphany towards the end it sounded pretty doubtful God had convinced them. But the wise words of the Lord shone through Joyce and all was understood. Sometimes it takes something simple like that for the penny to drop.
Maybe some of the things in the bible ARE a little hard to understand, follow and live by in literal terms. Sounds like this gal had the right idea using some straight talking laymans terms.
Hope I am somewhere on the page...I am unfamiliar with all this Psalm stuff so please forgive my ignorance. I very much liked the whole lot but the first couplet really set the tone. Despite knowing the Lord was thy shepherd this poor sould STILL felt lost. A very spiritual write and good luck in poem of the month.
Cheers closet xo
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Hello Closet.
Whoa nelly ... have no words to tell you what this meant to me so I'm going to have to settle with this one was a hard write for me. I was angry and scared and felt hideously alone and unwanted. I had to google the 23rd Psalm and copy it so I would have it completely correct. The last time I knew it by heart was when I was a teenager. So I think I understand completely as you do me on the religion thing.
I do know that we are in bad times seriously bad times but I equally know that things will work the way they are meant to do. I adore you my friend. Am so grateful of such a review. Thank you.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment from Rose Hearth
I am not usually a fan of spiritual poetry, as most spiritual poets tend to try to persuade the reader into believing as the writer does. You have presented a wonderful example of how your spirituality has enriched your life without attempting to make me feel guilty for not holding the same views. You kept it personal, which made it all the more heartfelt. I can't say anything about the form and content that has not already been expressed by other reviewers. Thank you.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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I am not usually a fan of spiritual poetry, as most spiritual poets tend to try to persuade the reader into believing as the writer does. You have presented a wonderful example of how your spirituality has enriched your life without attempting to make me feel guilty for not holding the same views. You kept it personal, which made it all the more heartfelt. I can't say anything about the form and content that has not already been expressed by other reviewers. Thank you.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for reading this one Rose. I appreciate what you are saying and I have to tell you the preachy position doesn't sit well with me either. Thanks again. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Deb. This is excellent writing. Completely different I might add. You start out by treading close to blasphemy (not) but rectify all with your closing words like this:
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"for when you walk in God's light
With Him at your side
What can anyone do
That the power of God's love
Can not undo
There is nothing to fear
There is only His love"
Bravo! You deserve to win. Bob
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Hi, Deb. This is excellent writing. Completely different I might add. You start out by treading close to blasphemy (not) but rectify all with your closing words like this:
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"for when you walk in God's light
With Him at your side
What can anyone do
That the power of God's love
Can not undo
There is nothing to fear
There is only His love"
Bravo! You deserve to win. Bob
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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No I was not trying to do anything but work through an internal position of faith. I am not always nice nor ladylike nor a good Christian woman...I'm just me and this is how it is for me on days. Thank you Bob for reading and for this fab review. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from katz meow
I don't know how I missed this, my friend. I thank God it is one of the Poem of the Month contestants, since I always read them. You wrote such a beautiful and moving piece to go along with the lines of the 23rd Psalm. And then the poem, and I read it all to the music, and you moved me to tears. What a wonderful story and a fantastic write. I so enjoyed reading this poem. You have a special talent. Love and Big Hugz, Katz
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I don't know how I missed this, my friend. I thank God it is one of the Poem of the Month contestants, since I always read them. You wrote such a beautiful and moving piece to go along with the lines of the 23rd Psalm. And then the poem, and I read it all to the music, and you moved me to tears. What a wonderful story and a fantastic write. I so enjoyed reading this poem. You have a special talent. Love and Big Hugz, Katz
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Hello Katz,
I appreciate this review more than you know. It is an honor to be recognized as a POM nominee and I don't care who wins. All the entries in my opinion are exceptional. This was a powerful day when I wrote this. I've always had the battles rage inside me but sometimes...the good guy wins...Thank you again for the honor of a six star review. love and hugs xoxo Deborah
Comment from mermaids
I love Keith Green's music and also like to hear Joyce Meyer preach. Your words capture how lost and hopeless we feel but there is always a way back to God. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I love Keith Green's music and also like to hear Joyce Meyer preach. Your words capture how lost and hopeless we feel but there is always a way back to God. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for this beautiful review Mermaids. Was so thoughtful. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from amada
I was inclined to this poem because I listen to Joyce Meyes as well. Her words reach my soul, and your writing here is a perfect example of our weak humanity. I loved the way you wrote it!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I was inclined to this poem because I listen to Joyce Meyes as well. Her words reach my soul, and your writing here is a perfect example of our weak humanity. I loved the way you wrote it!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you amada, this was a stormy write for me. Appreciate you taking the time to read and reviw. xoxo Kiwi
Comment from vickib
Okay this blew my socks off Kiwi- I read it twice. It's pretty amazing. If you take the second line from each verse and read them, they make a poem of their own. It's a poem in a poem. I'm so happy for you. Once I was so down and out I got down on my knees and said I can't do it anymore, basically begging for help. Next morning it was all very clear and I haven't been back to that darkness since. I don't go to church, but I know there is a God. XOXOXOXOX Vicki
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Okay this blew my socks off Kiwi- I read it twice. It's pretty amazing. If you take the second line from each verse and read them, they make a poem of their own. It's a poem in a poem. I'm so happy for you. Once I was so down and out I got down on my knees and said I can't do it anymore, basically begging for help. Next morning it was all very clear and I haven't been back to that darkness since. I don't go to church, but I know there is a God. XOXOXOXOX Vicki
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I don't know what to say vickib but thank you. I feel you true and clear...You summed up pretty much where I am as well in life. Thanks for the terrific honor of a sixer for this piece. xoxo Kiwi
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That poem is worth everyone of those. :)
