Senryu (writing)
Emotional interchange12 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good senryu form, Bill. Your satori line reflects well on the first two lines as it explains how a reader's response to what a writer puts into his work makes all that work and emotional sharing worth while. Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2011
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Your poem is in good senryu form, Bill. Your satori line reflects well on the first two lines as it explains how a reader's response to what a writer puts into his work makes all that work and emotional sharing worth while. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2011
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Thank you Brooke - your feedback is very kind. I still try these short forms of poetry and truly believe they help me write stories. Regards, Bill
Comment from Joan E.
You have painted a vivid scene and captured strong emotions in this 5-7-5. Your satori is quite effective as well. Your picture choice is thoughtfully synergistic as well. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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You have painted a vivid scene and captured strong emotions in this 5-7-5. Your satori is quite effective as well. Your picture choice is thoughtfully synergistic as well. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Thanks Joan - I appreciate you reading and your for your kind feedback.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You have written a great Senyru with deep human emotion. Your artwork is excellent for the demonstration. Good luck in the competition and best wishes.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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You have written a great Senyru with deep human emotion. Your artwork is excellent for the demonstration. Good luck in the competition and best wishes.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Thanks Giddy - I appreciate you reading and for your kind feedback!
Comment from sgalletti
I'm reading all of these senryu entries and enjoying them very much. I love senryu and love when they are written well. Your is excellent with all of the elements of a well written senryu and a great satori (loved the paradox and irony between the writer misting up and the priceless tears). Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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I'm reading all of these senryu entries and enjoying them very much. I love senryu and love when they are written well. Your is excellent with all of the elements of a well written senryu and a great satori (loved the paradox and irony between the writer misting up and the priceless tears). Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Hi Sue - I very much appreciate your kind feedback. I like this form as well, perhaps for a different reason. My passion is writing stories and I like the discipline you learn from these short forms. So few words. Regards ....
Comment from samandlancelot
I love this. As writers, it takes courage to open the depths of our souls and share those depths with others. That others would see, understand, and weep with us is beautiful! Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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I love this. As writers, it takes courage to open the depths of our souls and share those depths with others. That others would see, understand, and weep with us is beautiful! Patricia
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Thanks for reading and understanding what I was trying to say. Very warm regards ....
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great senryu about how it makes a writer feel when tears flow when reading his or her work, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great senryu about how it makes a writer feel when tears flow when reading his or her work, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Thanks Pam - first for reading and then understanding the message I was trying to convey.
Comment from Veekz
Very powerful little senryu! Your picture compliments your piece perfectly as I can just picture him pouring out his most precious thoughts and weeping from the nostalgia of them.
Very nicely done :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Very powerful little senryu! Your picture compliments your piece perfectly as I can just picture him pouring out his most precious thoughts and weeping from the nostalgia of them.
Very nicely done :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Thanks V - first for reading and then for your kind feedback.
Comment from riley289
An excellent example.
Rich imagery which survives long after the poem has been left behind.
Loneliness and grief are apparent and heavily embedded in each syllable and also the quiet selfish sense of a writer almost reveling in misery as it offers material.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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An excellent example.
Rich imagery which survives long after the poem has been left behind.
Loneliness and grief are apparent and heavily embedded in each syllable and also the quiet selfish sense of a writer almost reveling in misery as it offers material.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011
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Thank you for reading and then for your kind feedback
Comment from missy98writer
Mystery Poet,
your art work is lovely and your senryu is rich in imagery. Effective use of alliteration with the S words. Your senryu is in great form and syllable count of 5/7/5. Effective satori line. You poem is an excellent entry in the Senryu Poetry writing prompt.
Missy.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011
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Mystery Poet,
your art work is lovely and your senryu is rich in imagery. Effective use of alliteration with the S words. Your senryu is in great form and syllable count of 5/7/5. Effective satori line. You poem is an excellent entry in the Senryu Poetry writing prompt.
Missy.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011
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Thanks Missy for your very kind feedback!
Comment from Espresso momma
Oh dear, I've done that. More than once I must say. I guess that is supposed to be good for us huh. I did love the photo, it fits so well with your Haiku.Thanks and good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011
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Oh dear, I've done that. More than once I must say. I guess that is supposed to be good for us huh. I did love the photo, it fits so well with your Haiku.Thanks and good luck.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011
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Thanks for reading and your kind feedback.
