Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your tapping in to this particular human emotion--pay it forward. Your satori is quite effective. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2011

Hi Joan. Thanks for stopping by with your excellent review. Much appreciated!

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

It is nice to see some happy lines written and your senyru describes a real feeling of happiness. good luck in the competition with your entry.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011

Thanks Giddy. I'm happy you liked my poem. I really appreciate your excellent review lovely lady. Best wishes.

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

I'm reading all of these senryu entries and enjoying them very much. I love senryu and love when they are written well. Your is excellent with all of the elements of a well written senryu and a great satori ("account paid in full" has wonderful irony). My understanding is that technically, the title should be the first line, e.g. "senryu (gratitude sparkles"). Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011

Hi Sue! Hey, thanks for pointing that out. I think I can change that and it sounds better. So appreciate your encouraging review. Warm regards.

Comment from samandlancelot

Excellent

I see Jesus as the kind stranger who paid the full price for our sins. Our gratitude is the only repayment we need to make. Excellent! Patricia

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011

Hi Patricia. I couldn't agree with you more; however, I was thinking of all the kind people I've not formally met on FanStory, like yourself, who are so kind and encouraging with their supportive reviews. Thanks so much for stopping by! Warm regards.

Comment from b.anderson65

Excellent

Senryu. This is a wise saying. Each word is filled with clarity and creativity. Your word choices in this poem are excellent.

What word choices would you embark upon in a different style poem? I wonder.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011

Thanks for your thoughtful review. I'll have to ponder the last question. I like the short forms very much and have enjoyed taking the class offered by AlvinE. I so appreciate your concise and excellent review - you are most kind. Cheers.

Comment from riley289

Excellent

Well conceived senryu poem.
Gratiriude being fulfilled toward the kindness a stranger brought the reader wondering what
The ambiguity of the final line of an account being paid in full leaves the reader wondering what had been owed.
content and syllable count are spot on.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011

Thanks riley289. I'm so happy you stopped by to give me your enouraging thoughts on my contest entry. I much appreciate your interst and excellent review. Warm regards.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

This senryu poem is well written and tells a nice little lesson. I enjoyed read it. It's a great contribution for the contest. Kat

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2011

Thanks MisKat. Glad you liked my entry. I appreciate very much your encouraging review, as well as good wishes. Warm regards.

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is an interesting senryu with a clever satori: "Account paid in full." Real gratitude can be the best payment. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011

Thanks so much Jeanie. I appreciate your review and good wishes!