The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Time to Ask for Help"A family learns their father is a serial killer
28 total reviews
Comment from vickib
Super chapter , though I haven't come across one yet that wasn't. If I had some of your cake I could catch up even sooner. LOL!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Super chapter , though I haven't come across one yet that wasn't. If I had some of your cake I could catch up even sooner. LOL!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Sorry, the cake is all gone! Glad you liked this chapter.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Somehow I missed notification for this chapter, but now that I'm here I've really enjoyed reading it; and finally found out that they came back without seeing inside the cabin. Once again I feel this is outstanding work. it kept me glued to the words.
Giddy
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Somehow I missed notification for this chapter, but now that I'm here I've really enjoyed reading it; and finally found out that they came back without seeing inside the cabin. Once again I feel this is outstanding work. it kept me glued to the words.
Giddy
Comment Written 28-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much for your enthusiastic review. Thanks for the awesome 6 stars too. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from Showboat
iiiiiyy, Sasha! Don't stop there, girlie! OMG! What went on in that cabin?
Knowing that area as well as I do, it gives me the biggest bunch of chill bumps. Oy, all those huge trees and the rain and all that green and the rain. God have mercy!
When you're ready to get this one over to me, we'll do it again, same time, same station! I salute you, my little Smurphy-girl. You gett'em!:)
Oh, you need to catch that apostrophe "s" after:...Aunt Em about Dad'**s parents
Hugs, love and congratulations!
|Gayle
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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iiiiiyy, Sasha! Don't stop there, girlie! OMG! What went on in that cabin?
Knowing that area as well as I do, it gives me the biggest bunch of chill bumps. Oy, all those huge trees and the rain and all that green and the rain. God have mercy!
When you're ready to get this one over to me, we'll do it again, same time, same station! I salute you, my little Smurphy-girl. You gett'em!:)
Oh, you need to catch that apostrophe "s" after:...Aunt Em about Dad'**s parents
Hugs, love and congratulations!
|Gayle
Comment Written 27-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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I am so pleased you like this one. I made major changes from the original and I think you will really like them. Thanks so much for the awesome 6 stars.
Comment from raw form
SG I like the build up of suspense and anticipation you put together with your story. You keep me wanting to turn the page. I have nothing technically to say about the writing I just love reading it see you next chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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SG I like the build up of suspense and anticipation you put together with your story. You keep me wanting to turn the page. I have nothing technically to say about the writing I just love reading it see you next chapter.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much. I am pleased you continue to enjoy this story.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Good chapter.
I like the descriptions.
Good dialogue.
Good developments.
Interesting.
I like how you ended the chapter as well.
What a horrible thing to have to go through eh?
Katie
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2011
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Good chapter.
I like the descriptions.
Good dialogue.
Good developments.
Interesting.
I like how you ended the chapter as well.
What a horrible thing to have to go through eh?
Katie
Comment Written 26-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2011
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Yes, it is a horrible thing to go through. Having seen several families of serial killers attacked by the public and media is what inspired me to write this book. Although this is fiction it is based on experiences of real families.
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It's very interesting. :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I guess Evil Eddie isn't as impressed with your wonderful novel as I am. I am sure he searches for way to destory good work. (LOL) You have posted a wonderful addition to your previous posts. I read the previous novel and really like the changes you have made.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2011
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I guess Evil Eddie isn't as impressed with your wonderful novel as I am. I am sure he searches for way to destory good work. (LOL) You have posted a wonderful addition to your previous posts. I read the previous novel and really like the changes you have made.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2011
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I am pleased you like the changes. I hope you continue to enjoy them, as there are more to come.
Comment from marcii
Your story continues to be very interesting and I am always looking out for the next chapter.
One would think it would be an ideal place to have taken the girls. Isolated and quiet.
Marcii
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Your story continues to be very interesting and I am always looking out for the next chapter.
One would think it would be an ideal place to have taken the girls. Isolated and quiet.
Marcii
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thanks for the positive review, I am pleased you continue to enjoy this story.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
I almost missed this chapter the PM system was playing silly games - but found it in your profile.
A great read - and if a guy needs to pee, well.
Still keeping us in the dark with the cabin and gate I see.
Looking forward to the next installment already.
Ron
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Hi Smurphy
I almost missed this chapter the PM system was playing silly games - but found it in your profile.
A great read - and if a guy needs to pee, well.
Still keeping us in the dark with the cabin and gate I see.
Looking forward to the next installment already.
Ron
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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I don't know what the problem is, but Tom is working on it. Glad you liked this one and hope you enjoy the next one too.
Comment from Dave Sargeant
A good work that keept me wanting more. The characters and dialogue work wel. and tension is on the rise. The human element with Charlie wanting to pee is good. Dave.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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A good work that keept me wanting more. The characters and dialogue work wel. and tension is on the rise. The human element with Charlie wanting to pee is good. Dave.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Poor Charlie, always the fall guy. Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from moyramouse
Something strange is happening with the site. I tried to open this through the message but it kept telling me no work was posted. I tried through your profile and it came up straight away! Although you gave us no answers to why the sign and gate was up at the cabin, you certainly drew in more details of the characters' feelings. We empathize with this family going through such an ordeal, trying to come to terms with a situation beyond our worst imaginings.
Who is he off to see - Mac? Mr Hurley? what is the secret mum and Aunt Em are harbouring? Looking forward to the next chapter. x moyramouse
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Something strange is happening with the site. I tried to open this through the message but it kept telling me no work was posted. I tried through your profile and it came up straight away! Although you gave us no answers to why the sign and gate was up at the cabin, you certainly drew in more details of the characters' feelings. We empathize with this family going through such an ordeal, trying to come to terms with a situation beyond our worst imaginings.
Who is he off to see - Mac? Mr Hurley? what is the secret mum and Aunt Em are harbouring? Looking forward to the next chapter. x moyramouse
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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He is off to see both. Lots of questions that need answers. I have no idea what is going on with the site. Everyone has complained that they cannot access this chapter by clicking the message and have to go to my portfolio. I have told Tom, the site manager and he is, hopefully working on it.