Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Wm B. Naylor
I liked the frank, direct way this poem addresses the reader. It tells a lot about the mindset of the narrator. "seek the truth and the truth shall set you free.
Thanks for sharing Jewell.
Sincerely
Will
P.s. this only paid me one point but it was wrth hearing your two cents worth. Actually it piad two cents also.
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I liked the frank, direct way this poem addresses the reader. It tells a lot about the mindset of the narrator. "seek the truth and the truth shall set you free.
Thanks for sharing Jewell.
Sincerely
Will
P.s. this only paid me one point but it was wrth hearing your two cents worth. Actually it piad two cents also.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2004
Comment from Vennan
This works very well. I only found one error that needs to be corrected, but it cropped up in two different places in your poem.
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You wrote: Caged in it?s darkness
You need: Caged in its darkness
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You wrote:
Why do we allow it
to take us in it?s web?
You need:
Why do we allow it
to take us in its web?
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I really admire the final portion of your poem:
Freedom is around
the corner where
the key hangs
waiting to open
the lock that holds
the chains.
It hangs at the open
door of truth.
Which has no locks.
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All the best,
Vennan
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This works very well. I only found one error that needs to be corrected, but it cropped up in two different places in your poem.
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You wrote: Caged in it?s darkness
You need: Caged in its darkness
-------------
You wrote:
Why do we allow it
to take us in it?s web?
You need:
Why do we allow it
to take us in its web?
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I really admire the final portion of your poem:
Freedom is around
the corner where
the key hangs
waiting to open
the lock that holds
the chains.
It hangs at the open
door of truth.
Which has no locks.
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All the best,
Vennan
Comment Written 31-Oct-2004
Comment from Mrs Jones
It hangs at the open
door of truth.
Which has no locks.
Wise words indeed.
A poem for all.
Nothing to crit.
A good read
Cheers
Rose
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It hangs at the open
door of truth.
Which has no locks.
Wise words indeed.
A poem for all.
Nothing to crit.
A good read
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 31-Oct-2004
Comment from Sentra
Very interesting indeed. I have found that most who fear, fear acceptance. When one can truly accept all facts and distinguish the pros and cons, they can live life in equilibrium, thus becoming open and real to that that surrounds them.
It binds you in itself
Disabling you from
being real,
Fear is another form of panic, when a person panics, they make rash decisions which are not usually of who they are.
It hangs at the open
door of truth.
Which has no locks.
Once you accept the truth, the fear is let go and a person can move forward with serenity. Another great poem that got ol Sentra thinking. Nice work.
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Very interesting indeed. I have found that most who fear, fear acceptance. When one can truly accept all facts and distinguish the pros and cons, they can live life in equilibrium, thus becoming open and real to that that surrounds them.
It binds you in itself
Disabling you from
being real,
Fear is another form of panic, when a person panics, they make rash decisions which are not usually of who they are.
It hangs at the open
door of truth.
Which has no locks.
Once you accept the truth, the fear is let go and a person can move forward with serenity. Another great poem that got ol Sentra thinking. Nice work.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
Comment from Judy T. Lloyd
The author has once again come up with an accurate description of fear. She has also provided a way or key in which to handle fear. There is not much more that I can write here to improve on something that she has done so well. So for the reasons stated I like this one too.
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The author has once again come up with an accurate description of fear. She has also provided a way or key in which to handle fear. There is not much more that I can write here to improve on something that she has done so well. So for the reasons stated I like this one too.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
Comment from *Always Hope*
Fear is something that controlled my life for many years. I have over-come so much. It's amazing - I never thought I would be alive today. Your poem really drew me in. I've lived this horrible misery and refuse to let this happen to me again. Thanks for this great, SO TRUE read!
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Fear is something that controlled my life for many years. I have over-come so much. It's amazing - I never thought I would be alive today. Your poem really drew me in. I've lived this horrible misery and refuse to let this happen to me again. Thanks for this great, SO TRUE read!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
Comment from FmblingTwrdXtacy
Great poem ,great writing, wonderful imagery. Fear can definately be a crippling thing, oner that can be difficult to surpass. You really touched me with this writing. Thanks for a great read.
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Great poem ,great writing, wonderful imagery. Fear can definately be a crippling thing, oner that can be difficult to surpass. You really touched me with this writing. Thanks for a great read.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Wow, that is another good one. Fear, it can be binding that is for sure. I lived 18 years in an abusive relationship. I still have problems getting past that fear issue. It is something I am working on but it definitely is still there and it definitely can bind still. It is what brings on some of that lack of trust I have. Very good piece. You always reach me deep inside. Thanks for the great lunch break.
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Wow, that is another good one. Fear, it can be binding that is for sure. I lived 18 years in an abusive relationship. I still have problems getting past that fear issue. It is something I am working on but it definitely is still there and it definitely can bind still. It is what brings on some of that lack of trust I have. Very good piece. You always reach me deep inside. Thanks for the great lunch break.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very nicely written. I love the imagery you used here (with the walls for example). It's a strong poem that shows us fear.
One thing that bothered me is in places I "stumbled" reading it. A good example is at the start. You capitlize "Just,". Why? I think that would read better if it was in lowercase since it is part of the sentence.
A very minor point. I read it twice to fully appreciate it. Well done.
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Very nicely written. I love the imagery you used here (with the walls for example). It's a strong poem that shows us fear.
One thing that bothered me is in places I "stumbled" reading it. A good example is at the start. You capitlize "Just,". Why? I think that would read better if it was in lowercase since it is part of the sentence.
A very minor point. I read it twice to fully appreciate it. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004
Comment from Tempesta
Awesome expression! I agree with it 100% Your author's note was right on as well. For the most part I can say I've broken the bond, but every once in a while I seem to retreat for a short time. I can only guess that it's b/c it's there and it's reliable when one needs its comfort. Great job!
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Awesome expression! I agree with it 100% Your author's note was right on as well. For the most part I can say I've broken the bond, but every once in a while I seem to retreat for a short time. I can only guess that it's b/c it's there and it's reliable when one needs its comfort. Great job!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2004