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Debbie Did It

finding trouble

15 total reviews 
Comment from warbler
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I enjoyed your story of little Debbie's adventures. Your poem is very original. It meets all of the rules of the contest and is well done.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2011
    I grew up in San Antonio and lived in Michigan many years...funny how close circumstances are sometimes with people who don't know each other ... Thank you for this review...it was my first attempt at this type of poetry and I kinda liked Debbie's attitude of adventure and spirit. lol xoxo Kiwi
Comment from gramalot8
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Mystery Author, this is a very good contender for this contest. You created a truly conhesive, well versed storyline in the ABC requirements. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thank you gramalot8 for taking the time to read and review my first poem like this. Appreciate it! xoxo
Comment from chita
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You have great artwork and your arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem-you are descriptive in some lines-you tell a story in this poem very well and Debbie's brother caught her taking cookies--well done.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thank you for the read and review and Debbie is off out the door again but she said to tell you thanks for distracting mom for a minute or too...tee hee ... thanks again xoxo
Comment from RYME4U
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an excellent clearly told story. Interesting all the way through.The illustration is perfect for the well chosen alphabetical words! Great job

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review this piece and Debbie was hollering at me to tell you "yeah thanks" too as the little scamp is off to do her thing somewhere else again...xoxo
Comment from meg2
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Very witty. You have done very nicely with this challenge. Love the thought of a -pink lollipop kitchen- all kinds of pictures were drawn when I read this. Liberties accepted and enjoyed. At least by me.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review and Debbie said to thank you too ...oooops there she goes off again...gotta go catch her but thank you so much ...xoxo
Comment from Fireshadow
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This is a terrific entry for the Abecedarian Poem contest, and I'm sure it will be a top contender in the competition. Very amusing storyline within the poem format. Only one small suggestion :

When she was suppose[d]

Otherwise, very well done and best wishes for a win, my friend.


Ama


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thank you for this kind and thoughtful review! oh and Debbie says thank you too as she rustles off to see what else she can get into! lol xoox
Comment from Maxine Kendall
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This is a delightful poem and fits the writing prompt very well.
A little story within a poem of two mischievous children, your words sure made me smile.
Well done and good luck.
Maxine

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thank you Maxine for your lovely comments ... I appreciate your taking the time to read this one as it was my first attempt to do the format. xoxo
Comment from missy98writer
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Mystery Poet,
your poem is delightful. Lovely art work and visual presentation. I enjoyed your alliterated title. I enjoyed your lines: "Karaoke machine blasted through the Lime green walls which decorated her Mother's special room Next to the pink lollipop kitchen which." Your Abecdarian Pome is an excellent entry in the writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    ahhhhh thank you Missy and Debbie say to tell ya thanks too...ut oh there she goes again I'm off to chase her down now...appreciate the read and review xoxo
Comment from marcii
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Children especially the young ones try to do everything they can to avoid having their naps.

The parents know if the child doesn't have their nap they will be irritable for the rest of the day.

Good luck in the contest.

Marcii

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    thank you Marcii ... Debbie says to tell you that she was just kidding about not taking a nap and her brother is a big yuck for tattling on her! lol appreciate the read and review. xoxo
Comment from Dave Sargeant
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I think your poem works well and is entertaining. The story reaches a fitting conclusion when, for once in her life, debbie is caught out and punished. Dave.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2011

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2011
    Thanks Dave and believe you me Debbie would so be sticking her tongue out at you while lifting one eyelid watching the tick tock of the clock until she could stop pretending she was napping...lol...appreciate your read and review of my work. xoxo