The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Demon and His Son"A family learns their father is a serial killer
35 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Val. This is as with all of your writing, exceptionally written. The plot appears to be moving right along with just enough dialogue to keep the momentum in place. Though I've not read all of your chapters, I will try harder to get to them in the future. You know how it is when you are working on a project yourself and trying to cover all bases. LOL...Congratulaitons On being nominated this month for "Book Of The Month" by the way. Bob
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Hi, Val. This is as with all of your writing, exceptionally written. The plot appears to be moving right along with just enough dialogue to keep the momentum in place. Though I've not read all of your chapters, I will try harder to get to them in the future. You know how it is when you are working on a project yourself and trying to cover all bases. LOL...Congratulaitons On being nominated this month for "Book Of The Month" by the way. Bob
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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I understand all too well that there are just not enough house in the day to do accomplish everything we want. I am pleased you liked this chapter and don't worry about keeping up. Congratulations to you too for your nomination. Love your writing and I also hope to be able to catch up with your book too...I vote for a 28 hour day starting next week!
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LOL..Me too..That still may not be enough tho...Bob
Comment from Alaskastory
'The Demon and His Son' deserves more stars than FS shows I can give. It is done amazingly well!
I missed this chapter when you first posted it since my computer was being repaired. I;m so glad the contest made me aware of it. Great chapter, Sasha.
Your fan, Marie
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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'The Demon and His Son' deserves more stars than FS shows I can give. It is done amazingly well!
I missed this chapter when you first posted it since my computer was being repaired. I;m so glad the contest made me aware of it. Great chapter, Sasha.
Your fan, Marie
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for your positive and enthusiastic review. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Matoshka
The father was very rigid and would not except any blame or responsibility for his actions. I felt the young mans rage and disbelief. This was so sad. I enjoyed reading this, it had a lot of emotion and it read so smoothly. Blessings.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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The father was very rigid and would not except any blame or responsibility for his actions. I felt the young mans rage and disbelief. This was so sad. I enjoyed reading this, it had a lot of emotion and it read so smoothly. Blessings.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the generous and positive review. I sincerely appreciate it.
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You are so welcome. I enjoyed it. blessings.
Comment from RenieReader
This is an awesome chapter with interesting turns between father and son. I like James' characteristics and how he shows them when confronted by his father.
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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This is an awesome chapter with interesting turns between father and son. I like James' characteristics and how he shows them when confronted by his father.
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks. I am pleased you liked this one.
Comment from marcii
Although the chapter was good and I liked the fact that James was strong while facing his father, I thought more wopuld have been said.
James crying was a good thing for him.
Marcii
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Although the chapter was good and I liked the fact that James was strong while facing his father, I thought more wopuld have been said.
James crying was a good thing for him.
Marcii
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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There is not really much the father can say. There will be more interaction with Dad in future chapters.
Comment from raw form
Powerful stuff here SG I am just totally loving the storyline. Thiswas adeepchapter I amwondering when they check the cabin that they went to as kids if the police will find more evidence. Sorry my mind is racing ahead I dug the confrontation between father and son.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Powerful stuff here SG I am just totally loving the storyline. Thiswas adeepchapter I amwondering when they check the cabin that they went to as kids if the police will find more evidence. Sorry my mind is racing ahead I dug the confrontation between father and son.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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The next few chapters will be a less tense but then thing will heat up again. I am pleased you are enjoying this.
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I am Immensely.
Comment from jamesfrancis
definately worth a read and the awards it has been given. keep it up and i shall carry on Reading.. i swear I already read this or part one of it.. was quite a good read anyway
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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definately worth a read and the awards it has been given. keep it up and i shall carry on Reading.. i swear I already read this or part one of it.. was quite a good read anyway
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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This is a rewrite. In the beginning chapters there are minor changes but as we move forward I have made major changes to the story. Glad you like it so far.
Comment from Showboat
Hey Sasha,
Another great chapter here. I felt so sorry for James. Sometimes, in situations like his, what you think will make things better only manage to make them worse.
I felt so sorry for him, and the Dad remained true to type.
Excellent, m'dear, and I'm off for more!
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Hey Sasha,
Another great chapter here. I felt so sorry for James. Sometimes, in situations like his, what you think will make things better only manage to make them worse.
I felt so sorry for him, and the Dad remained true to type.
Excellent, m'dear, and I'm off for more!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Dad definitely doesn't have much going for him. And James is carrying a heavy weight. There are not book telling you what to do or how to deal with something like this, it is pretty much a learn as you go.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
WEll dear ole dad didn't get too far with that control thing did he now...good on James for giving it to pops right between the eyes. I don't care about any spags or whatever this is a damn fine story...keep writing. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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WEll dear ole dad didn't get too far with that control thing did he now...good on James for giving it to pops right between the eyes. I don't care about any spags or whatever this is a damn fine story...keep writing. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much. I am thrilled you are enjoying this story. I think (heavy emphasis on 'think') I caught most if not all the spags.
Comment from Aski
Well done. No matter how smart people are it does not mean that their emotional nature cannot take control for a time. An interesting hint about the father's past is revealed. That stirs the reader's curiosity and keeps the reader following the story. Given what we have seen from James so far this outburst fits his character.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Well done. No matter how smart people are it does not mean that their emotional nature cannot take control for a time. An interesting hint about the father's past is revealed. That stirs the reader's curiosity and keeps the reader following the story. Given what we have seen from James so far this outburst fits his character.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Yes, James may be smart but he is still human and still a young boy. I am thrilled you continue to find this interesting.
