One More Year With You
Taking time for granted24 total reviews
Comment from Xuders
As a reader who has lost both parents, I can really appreciate the sentiments of this poem. It's true--we take for granted the time we have, then wish we had done otherwise when it's too late.
The poem is both a tribute and a warning. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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As a reader who has lost both parents, I can really appreciate the sentiments of this poem. It's true--we take for granted the time we have, then wish we had done otherwise when it's too late.
The poem is both a tribute and a warning. Nicely done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Redux, I appreciate how you have read into this piece as both a tribute and a warning. Thank you for your kind and insightful review. Blessings, Katie
Comment from nancyjam
This is so true. Your poem is so touching and sad.
Hold onto memories though for they keep them with us
I like the way you used pictures to prompt your memories.
I wish you well.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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This is so true. Your poem is so touching and sad.
Hold onto memories though for they keep them with us
I like the way you used pictures to prompt your memories.
I wish you well.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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nancyjam, thank you so much for your understanding and insightful review. Blessings, Katie
Comment from Magics02
This poem made me cry for I know how hard it must feel and be when you lose someone so dear to you as your father. This poem touched me immensely and especiallly at this time when I just had my father move here with me and he needs so much care. I will do my best to tend to him as he did for me through the years. My prayers and thoughts go out to you on your loss and know this poem is very well indeed.
Blessings
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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This poem made me cry for I know how hard it must feel and be when you lose someone so dear to you as your father. This poem touched me immensely and especiallly at this time when I just had my father move here with me and he needs so much care. I will do my best to tend to him as he did for me through the years. My prayers and thoughts go out to you on your loss and know this poem is very well indeed.
Blessings
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Magics02, thank you so much for such an understanding review. This is such a difficult time. My dad's illness came on so suddenly. Enjoy the time you have with your father. It will be a challenge I am sure, if he needs a lot of care, but I pray it will be a blessing for you as well. Thank you for your kind review.
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Yes it is and it has been hard but I do it all in love. It is so hard to see our parents this way and I know my father is not out of the woods by any means yet. Today they were going to go in and do a procedure on his heart but I knew he was not ready for it and the doctor said exactly that. Have faith and know he loves you too honey. Bless your heart..Magics xox
Comment from Connie C
This is such a touching poem and is so true to life. You have some wonderful imagery here as you describe what you see while looking through the photographs. Your message that life ends too soon is certainly true. Very well done. Connie
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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This is such a touching poem and is so true to life. You have some wonderful imagery here as you describe what you see while looking through the photographs. Your message that life ends too soon is certainly true. Very well done. Connie
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Connie, thank you. Im glad you like the imagery, I literally wrote this as I looked a the pictures. I wrote this to be a song and want to play it with a slide show that will incorporate these pictures, at his memorial.
Comment from RADIO
Beautifully written from the pure
love in your heart. This is a very
touching poem that I can clearly
relate to. Not in a negative way but
facing reality with gratiude for my
life's many blessings.
Radio
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Beautifully written from the pure
love in your heart. This is a very
touching poem that I can clearly
relate to. Not in a negative way but
facing reality with gratiude for my
life's many blessings.
Radio
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your understanding of this piece. I'm so glad you can relate to this. Blessings, Katie
Comment from Jean Lutz
Beautiful. Your words come from the heart of one who knows what is important in life. So many spend their time in pursuits of things and that is what they end up with. May your time that is left be especially blessed.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Beautiful. Your words come from the heart of one who knows what is important in life. So many spend their time in pursuits of things and that is what they end up with. May your time that is left be especially blessed.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Jean, thank you. Yes my whole perspective on living has changed.
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hi Katie,
This is a beautiful and emotional piece. Very well written. It sounds like a song.
Looking at old photographs of good old days can remind us how amazingly fast time flies. Well done.
Anabella
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Hi Katie,
This is a beautiful and emotional piece. Very well written. It sounds like a song.
Looking at old photographs of good old days can remind us how amazingly fast time flies. Well done.
Anabella
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Anabella, thank you. You know me so well, I wrote this to be a song there is even a chorus I left out. Im glad you enjoyed this. Im glad I have writing in order to process things.
Comment from LorieS
After 30, life seems to fly faster than the speed of light, well depicted in this poem :) Great flow and imagery to this poem, well done :)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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After 30, life seems to fly faster than the speed of light, well depicted in this poem :) Great flow and imagery to this poem, well done :)
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thank you, yes I agree the older we get the faster time flies by.
Comment from Diny
First may I say I am sorry for the situation you write about in this sensitive subjected poem. I sympathize with you. I have read your bio and see you have been a member for a while now- So I hope you are used to honest constructive critques.
Your pace was good and flow felt natural. You do tend to be a bit cliche with overused phrases. In lyrics often that is over looked while in poetry it is a bit disyracting or disjointed.
I do hope you cherish every minute with your father and he with you and yours. Write on and if you are ver interested in a line by line/ formate and restructure let me know I do so enjoy your work and feel it could be top notch with a bit of effort.
Write on-Di
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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First may I say I am sorry for the situation you write about in this sensitive subjected poem. I sympathize with you. I have read your bio and see you have been a member for a while now- So I hope you are used to honest constructive critques.
Your pace was good and flow felt natural. You do tend to be a bit cliche with overused phrases. In lyrics often that is over looked while in poetry it is a bit disyracting or disjointed.
I do hope you cherish every minute with your father and he with you and yours. Write on and if you are ver interested in a line by line/ formate and restructure let me know I do so enjoy your work and feel it could be top notch with a bit of effort.
Write on-Di
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Thank you for this honest review. I feel as if you could sense my struggle. I wrote this as a song. So I can see where the lyrical, overused phrases are coming out. I have worked and reworked this and think that I just have not decided if this is a poem or a song. (I even have a tune in my head) I appreciate your honesty, I don't want the sensitive topic to hinder honest reviews. Blessings, Katie
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Thank you for this honest review. I feel as if you could sense my struggle. I wrote this as a song. So I can see where the lyrical, overused phrases are coming out. I even have a chorus which I left out... I have worked and reworked this and think that I just have not decided if this is a poem or a song. (I even have a tune in my head) I appreciate your honesty, I don't want the sensitive topic to hinder honest reviews. Blessings, Katie
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So happy to hear this- I love it when a writer excepts the review in the spirit in which it was given- Write on!- look forward to more from you-Di
Comment from RKagan
This poem is heartbreaking. It is filled with deep and honest emotion and I cried as I read it. God Bless you and give you and your family strength.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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This poem is heartbreaking. It is filled with deep and honest emotion and I cried as I read it. God Bless you and give you and your family strength.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate the prayer for strength too, it is only through God's strength that we are making it through this. I live each day with the hope that when my dad passes I will see him again. Blessings, Katie