The White Fairy
Poem of Love and Spirit15 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
Nicely written and has a lovely flow of words. The poem sends a message to any who cares to listen. I see you are a horse lover too. Do you still have horses in your Life? I'm 75 and let my horses go a few years ago. I still miss having them around.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2021
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Nicely written and has a lovely flow of words. The poem sends a message to any who cares to listen. I see you are a horse lover too. Do you still have horses in your Life? I'm 75 and let my horses go a few years ago. I still miss having them around.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2021
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This is a wonderful review, I'm so thankful for your kind review, I really appreciate it. A horse lover, always a horse lover, they never forget.
Comment from Pantygynt
A fairy tale, which morphs into a hint of the well known Christmas story. I think if this were mine I would have tried to maintain the full rhyme in the final stanza, rather tan settling for assonance perhaps this way:
They whisper words of love to you
revealing only (the deepest truth) what is true
of life's battle(s) and (their stories) its story
wrapped in God's own radiant glory.
But it's your poem. Use this if you want to. It is entirely up to you.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2021
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A fairy tale, which morphs into a hint of the well known Christmas story. I think if this were mine I would have tried to maintain the full rhyme in the final stanza, rather tan settling for assonance perhaps this way:
They whisper words of love to you
revealing only (the deepest truth) what is true
of life's battle(s) and (their stories) its story
wrapped in God's own radiant glory.
But it's your poem. Use this if you want to. It is entirely up to you.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2021
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This is a wonderful review, I'm so thankful for your suggestion about the rhyming, always good to get a good advise.
Comment from Dr. Nad
You have very carefully constructed a literary visual In order to facilitate an increased understanding of the divine. When you say, "This is my girl", it sounds like you are sharing a personal loss and private pain with your readers. May we are follow the path that God lays out before us, using all of the aids he provides us. Thanks for sharing the grace of love from above.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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You have very carefully constructed a literary visual In order to facilitate an increased understanding of the divine. When you say, "This is my girl", it sounds like you are sharing a personal loss and private pain with your readers. May we are follow the path that God lays out before us, using all of the aids he provides us. Thanks for sharing the grace of love from above.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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I really appreciate your review and the way you express your dedication to the Lord. The best expressions in writing come from deep, often dark, experiences but they bring the benefit of great blessings, too, in the long run.
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It was a pleasure to read and my privilege to review the white fairy.
Comment from Cristine22
Such elegant words and a beautiful poem. It flows so well, and you clearly have a good understanding of word usage and effect. My only thing (and it's small) was that I got a bit confused where you talk about your girl. I wasn't sure if this was meant literally or metaphorically or who the girl might be. In any case though, your poem is beautiful and very well done.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Such elegant words and a beautiful poem. It flows so well, and you clearly have a good understanding of word usage and effect. My only thing (and it's small) was that I got a bit confused where you talk about your girl. I wasn't sure if this was meant literally or metaphorically or who the girl might be. In any case though, your poem is beautiful and very well done.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for your review. The girl in question was someone I worked with. Her character was to reach out to others, taking the opportunity to always be there for them. Even though she had a lot of strengths, she also had weaknesses that could make it very difficult to work with her. However, it is clear that the Lord really loves her.
Comment from pookietoo
I can tell this poem is full of love and spirit. You did great rhyming throughout the poem. Have a great week, keep writing. Smile, others will too. :)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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I can tell this poem is full of love and spirit. You did great rhyming throughout the poem. Have a great week, keep writing. Smile, others will too. :)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for your encouragement and your review. I greatly appreciate your words.
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Welcome.
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Yes, a smile like giving, it spreads happiness.
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Yes.
Comment from Carrie1978
Love this poem. It reads very well and makes valid and interesting points. Almost telling a story. You have very good rhyming ability.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Love this poem. It reads very well and makes valid and interesting points. Almost telling a story. You have very good rhyming ability.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your great review, I really appreciate your comments on my poem. Sarah
Comment from sidone
good flow good details good expression poem makes its own picture keep up the good work a pleasure to read blessing for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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good flow good details good expression poem makes its own picture keep up the good work a pleasure to read blessing for sharing
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I really appreciate your encouraging comments. Sarah
Comment from dportwood
sarahice,
'The White Fairy' is a most pleasing poem with its sestet structure and aabbcc rhyming pattern. I'm glad I found this poem and would recommend it to others.
Duane
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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sarahice,
'The White Fairy' is a most pleasing poem with its sestet structure and aabbcc rhyming pattern. I'm glad I found this poem and would recommend it to others.
Duane
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you Duane for your great review, so detailed and clear. Also I love horseback riding, lovely they are.
Comment from markk
This is a great poem and very well written with a great metaphorical message and great imagery. lovely pace and rhymes. well done.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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This is a great poem and very well written with a great metaphorical message and great imagery. lovely pace and rhymes. well done.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your detailed review, so helpful and uplifting. With best regards Sarah
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
sarahice:
this is a beautiful spiritual poem
about the White Fairy and the angels
who share love, faith, and heavenly
aspirations with us in all their
splendour
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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sarahice:
this is a beautiful spiritual poem
about the White Fairy and the angels
who share love, faith, and heavenly
aspirations with us in all their
splendour
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for such an encouraging review, I really like how you express your thoughts and feelings about my poem. Love Sarah
