Senryu (mid-term elections)
Senryu, 5-7-5, ironic political commentary29 total reviews
Comment from highlander104
Well,I'm giving you a sixer...while I'm not a poet, I certainly got the ironic message here. Loved it. Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Well,I'm giving you a sixer...while I'm not a poet, I certainly got the ironic message here. Loved it. Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Thanks very much Jean. Some folks didn't see the irony. I'm appreciative of your reading and your kind feedback!
Comment from c_lucas
It wouldn't surprise me if Hillary didn't trip him. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.Good job. Goo luck in your contest.
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It wouldn't surprise me if Hillary didn't trip him. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.Good job. Goo luck in your contest.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Thanks Charlie - some folks weren't so generous. Hell, I hate em all.
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I'm still waiting for an intelligent Politician.
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Well, Charlie, I would run, but my past would surely trip me up.
Comment from RebelRose
This is priceless. Very well done. By the way, congratulations on your win this morning. You're getting pretty good with these poems, aren't you? LOL
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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This is priceless. Very well done. By the way, congratulations on your win this morning. You're getting pretty good with these poems, aren't you? LOL
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Hi Patty - I don't think I'm getting good at all, but I'm getting lazy to do what I want to do ... write stories. LOL Bill
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It's good to take a break from story-writing to write something a little simpler. I know you'll get back to old Dax soon, ha ha.
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Thanks Patty - I'm calling it a night, so appreciate you sending me out with a smile :)
Comment from Sally Carter
Hahahahaaaa.. what a wonderful little poem, Bill.
And such a delightful commentary on that funny picture.
You have told me almost as much about US politics as some of our news broadcasts.
Love it!
Sal
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Hahahahaaaa.. what a wonderful little poem, Bill.
And such a delightful commentary on that funny picture.
You have told me almost as much about US politics as some of our news broadcasts.
Love it!
Sal
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Hi Sally - I was sitting here outlining the next chapter of my book, and I came across that picture. I couldn't help myself. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from lola29
Aah, you are truly the master of written irony. It was quite a fall into oblivian for some. But, I think their footprints will remain for a long time.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Aah, you are truly the master of written irony. It was quite a fall into oblivian for some. But, I think their footprints will remain for a long time.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Hi Lola - things in politics come and go, but my muse for this work was the picture. I'm not a democrat, but in honesty, I think Ms. Hillary is head and shoulders above ....
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
bhogg;
your senryu is just too funny
I hope the president plans to
make some friends soon or this
country will be in even more
trouble than it already is in
thanks for sharing
love, jan
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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bhogg;
your senryu is just too funny
I hope the president plans to
make some friends soon or this
country will be in even more
trouble than it already is in
thanks for sharing
love, jan
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Hi Jan - gotta tell you, that I don't really care who gets it done, I just promise that someone does. Thanks for reading and your kind comments.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh too funny. You said a lot in a short adorable poem. I always vote in major elections and sometimes vote in the mid-term election if there's an issue I feel strongly about. I HATE politics. Well, my husband has a MA in political science. He has no patience for me in this area. He always votes, at least once, twice, if they would let him. Well, when I arrived home from work Tuesday and he realized I hadn't voted, he continued to remind me the voting booths were open until 7:00 and if I was too tired to drive, he would take me. Tired of listening to his repeated requests that I vote, I finally said, "Are you sure you want me to vote. In the last election, I wrote in our cat for president because I didn't like either candidate." He sighed and said, you're right, it wouldn't make any difference if you voted.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Oh too funny. You said a lot in a short adorable poem. I always vote in major elections and sometimes vote in the mid-term election if there's an issue I feel strongly about. I HATE politics. Well, my husband has a MA in political science. He has no patience for me in this area. He always votes, at least once, twice, if they would let him. Well, when I arrived home from work Tuesday and he realized I hadn't voted, he continued to remind me the voting booths were open until 7:00 and if I was too tired to drive, he would take me. Tired of listening to his repeated requests that I vote, I finally said, "Are you sure you want me to vote. In the last election, I wrote in our cat for president because I didn't like either candidate." He sighed and said, you're right, it wouldn't make any difference if you voted.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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What's your cat's position? I might like him or her in 2012. I actually voted for myself in the recent elections in Georgia as a judge. I finished third!
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I can promise my cat would not be effects my lobbiest.
Comment from Shirley B
This is delightful. Shame on you for not being best friends with our President. :-) Your senyru was wonderful. Best of luck in the contest. Also best of luck to Auburn. Had to get that one in too! Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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This is delightful. Shame on you for not being best friends with our President. :-) Your senyru was wonderful. Best of luck in the contest. Also best of luck to Auburn. Had to get that one in too! Shirley
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Hi Shirley - I'm putting the dishes away right now so I can watch your Sooners. Alabama lost today. awwwwww
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My Sooners are driving me crazy. I am watching them now. They just scored 17 points. They are giving me a bad heart! LOL
Comment from Scribelle
I like this poem, but the political picture infects it with unnecessary commentary.
As a standalone poem, the basis of my rating, I like the implication that as a friend the poet will help the one who fell....until the end line, which packs a punch in the unexpected. It also reflects much of daily life, in which many don't take time to help a friend.
I also like the musical flow of the poem - the sounds, rhythm, thought crescendo, etc.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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I like this poem, but the political picture infects it with unnecessary commentary.
As a standalone poem, the basis of my rating, I like the implication that as a friend the poet will help the one who fell....until the end line, which packs a punch in the unexpected. It also reflects much of daily life, in which many don't take time to help a friend.
I also like the musical flow of the poem - the sounds, rhythm, thought crescendo, etc.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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It was of course, written tongue in cheek. I think both of the folks outlined are incredibly capable, but I think you would agreee that no love lost. By the way, written as total satire. With all the flaws in our Country, I wouldn't want to live anywhere else in the world, Regards, Bill
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I totally agree with you. It was just that the experience is so universal - we all have "friends that are not friends". The way you expressed it was still excellent, even if you meant it tongue in cheek. You tapped into a truth and expressed it well.
Comment from sidone
I like it, it says a lot simple but true it hit the right point Japanese philosophy is so true and simple love that style its speak so much for shorts words
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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I like it, it says a lot simple but true it hit the right point Japanese philosophy is so true and simple love that style its speak so much for shorts words
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2010
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Thanks - nice feedback that doesn't really seem to match the rating which usually indicates, "needs improvement" Regards, Bill
