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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "One Moment Can Change A LIfetime"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
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Comment from estrogen
The plot thickens. Wow, it's amazing how things shift depending on where the grim reaper decided to land. I loved the build up to this and then the pay off where there was a mistake in addresses. Still sad for the neighbour but made the protaganist ever more grateful for what she had.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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The plot thickens. Wow, it's amazing how things shift depending on where the grim reaper decided to land. I loved the build up to this and then the pay off where there was a mistake in addresses. Still sad for the neighbour but made the protaganist ever more grateful for what she had.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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estrogen,
Thanks for the kind review and support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from RebelRose
This must be so hard on military wives to see that car pull up to the curb and two officers get out. Feeling relief for themselves and yet shame for feeling that on top of sympathy for the wives who suffered loss. Great story albeit a sad one.
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This must be so hard on military wives to see that car pull up to the curb and two officers get out. Feeling relief for themselves and yet shame for feeling that on top of sympathy for the wives who suffered loss. Great story albeit a sad one.
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Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Patty,
Sad for the family and all the other families that are forced to face this tragedy. I so wish these wars would end and stop taking the lives of our young people. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Joan E.
The suspense you created and the resolution were very effective. I admired the story from the beginning with your use of "chirped" and the countdown, plus the grandmother's vivid description. I also liked your hyperbole: "sucking the life" and "Time stood still." You flash is a terrific contest entry.
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The suspense you created and the resolution were very effective. I admired the story from the beginning with your use of "chirped" and the countdown, plus the grandmother's vivid description. I also liked your hyperbole: "sucking the life" and "Time stood still." You flash is a terrific contest entry.
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Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
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Joan,
Thank you so much for indicating what sections of the story entertained you the most. I truly appreciate the kind review. Smiles, Carol
