Phantom
Darkness dwells in all of us!17 total reviews
Comment from markk
What a great poem, wonderful imagery created with your words.
Her joyous spirit drifts toward the abyss
Wandering fathoms below the raging crest
Ensconced in the smoky wisp of his maleness;
Captive languishes on her pirate's chest.
My favourite stanza.
well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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What a great poem, wonderful imagery created with your words.
Her joyous spirit drifts toward the abyss
Wandering fathoms below the raging crest
Ensconced in the smoky wisp of his maleness;
Captive languishes on her pirate's chest.
My favourite stanza.
well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind words. And, Thanks for taking the time to review my work.
Comment from joannesnow
Beautifully written verse. Your rhyme and meter are great and your metaphor comparing ocean to love unique and very visual. Your art work further enhances your words.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Beautifully written verse. Your rhyme and meter are great and your metaphor comparing ocean to love unique and very visual. Your art work further enhances your words.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reviewing my work. Your words are greatly appreciated.
Comment from Gungalo
Rhyme and meter lost in turbulent waves
As dark music echoes the sailors element,
Ghostly ships haunt the dark watery graves
The mist shrouded in her pirates lofty scent;
Oh my! Another thrilling write and I love it. So glad I bumped into you tonight, girl. This is beautiful and truly emanates a feeling of romance from another era. Your wording is clver and your dual meaning here is just amazing.
Do I love this one? Ohhhh yeah I do!!!!!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2011
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Rhyme and meter lost in turbulent waves
As dark music echoes the sailors element,
Ghostly ships haunt the dark watery graves
The mist shrouded in her pirates lofty scent;
Oh my! Another thrilling write and I love it. So glad I bumped into you tonight, girl. This is beautiful and truly emanates a feeling of romance from another era. Your wording is clver and your dual meaning here is just amazing.
Do I love this one? Ohhhh yeah I do!!!!!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2011
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Your kind words are going to go to my head!!! Thank you for your glowing words. I so so appreciate one who takes the time to read my poetry and especially one who enjoys my poetry. Thank you!!
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Oh I had such joy reading this one. I love poetry and devour it,especially when I find such great poetry!!!!
Comment from Swtdreamz
The dark gothic music pounds in her ears,
It speaks of ghost ships lost on an eerie - ghost ships are so creepy! But mostly 'cause they're usually lost in the silent dark waters of the sea.
Her joyous spirit drifts toward the abyss
Wandering fathoms below the raging crest - I hope that spirit finds rest eventually and can float towards the light.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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The dark gothic music pounds in her ears,
It speaks of ghost ships lost on an eerie - ghost ships are so creepy! But mostly 'cause they're usually lost in the silent dark waters of the sea.
Her joyous spirit drifts toward the abyss
Wandering fathoms below the raging crest - I hope that spirit finds rest eventually and can float towards the light.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Thank your for your descriptive review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from R. K. Alan
Powerful and vivid imagery you have captured with excellent word selection. Loved the cadence of this piece. Thanks for sharing. Ray aka Krylon
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Powerful and vivid imagery you have captured with excellent word selection. Loved the cadence of this piece. Thanks for sharing. Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 26-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
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Ray aka Krylon, thank you for your kind descriptive words. Your review is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Mastery
Bravo! Very good writing, foggie. From first word until last you capture The essence of it all. Very well done
"Rhyme and meter lost in turbulent waves
As dark music echoes the sailors element,
Ghostly ships haunt the dark watery graves
The mist shrouded in her pirates lofty scent"
Excellent! Bob
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Bravo! Very good writing, foggie. From first word until last you capture The essence of it all. Very well done
"Rhyme and meter lost in turbulent waves
As dark music echoes the sailors element,
Ghostly ships haunt the dark watery graves
The mist shrouded in her pirates lofty scent"
Excellent! Bob
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Bob, for your kind words. These reviews encourage me to keep writing.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting poem. I like the word choice. I like the rhyming scheme. The flow seems a little disjointed, but not to distraction. It's a great poem.
Barbara
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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This is a very interesting poem. I like the word choice. I like the rhyming scheme. The flow seems a little disjointed, but not to distraction. It's a great poem.
Barbara
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind words, Barbara. Its reviews like this that encourage me to keep writing.
Comment from Lastamen
A very haunting and chilling exposition of the dangers of travel along the uncharted depths. One conjures the mystic Sirens of the Sea in "Phantom". Well conceived and evenly balanced. Nicely done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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A very haunting and chilling exposition of the dangers of travel along the uncharted depths. One conjures the mystic Sirens of the Sea in "Phantom". Well conceived and evenly balanced. Nicely done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Lastamen, I appreciate your kind words. It reviews like this that encourage me to keep writing.
Comment from Connie C
Through powerful description and metaphor, you seem to be describing passionate love. At least that's what I get in the last stanza especially. I hope I'm not too far from what you intended to convey. I like the eerie nature of this poem. Very well done. Connie
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Through powerful description and metaphor, you seem to be describing passionate love. At least that's what I get in the last stanza especially. I hope I'm not too far from what you intended to convey. I like the eerie nature of this poem. Very well done. Connie
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Connie, your perception is good. It is about passonate but forbidden love. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
An interesting poem that compares a phantom and the sea; both being spirits that cannot be tamed. Because of their mysteries each is respected and revered. Very nice.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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An interesting poem that compares a phantom and the sea; both being spirits that cannot be tamed. Because of their mysteries each is respected and revered. Very nice.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Fiesty, thank you so much for your kind words. Review is greatly appreciated.
