Spiritual Oasis
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "I Welcome Life"a collection of spiritual poems
60 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem is in a sonnet format and tells of the simple beauties of life that give happiness in and of themselves. I like the repetition in the first line of each stanza.
Keep writing and stay healthly.
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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This poem is in a sonnet format and tells of the simple beauties of life that give happiness in and of themselves. I like the repetition in the first line of each stanza.
Keep writing and stay healthly.
Joan
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review. It really doesn't qualify for a sonnet for several reasons, but we can call it "a sonnet-like verse" I guess. Glad you enjoyed it, love, Muse
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You are very welcome. Yes, the lines are too short to have the right meter for a sonnet. I like the rhyme scheme and length of sonnets. So I like to write what I do call sonnet like poems.
Joan
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It's not the length of the rhymes. They are written in iambic pentameter appropriate for a sonnet. The problem is a repeating line in every stanza, and the third stanza missing a volta/a dramatic resolution.
Comment from Ignatius Albright
I love this poem!
It is beautiful and so expressive and real.
Well done I have decided to award you with one of my six star ratings for this top quality piece of writing. I have absolutely nothing bad to say about it. Your word choice Is on point and your structure and rhyme scheme fit together wonderfully.
Congratulations on a top-notch poem!
Keep writing and keep well!
Much love,
Ignatius A
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I love this poem!
It is beautiful and so expressive and real.
Well done I have decided to award you with one of my six star ratings for this top quality piece of writing. I have absolutely nothing bad to say about it. Your word choice Is on point and your structure and rhyme scheme fit together wonderfully.
Congratulations on a top-notch poem!
Keep writing and keep well!
Much love,
Ignatius A
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the exceptional review and the six stars. It is an honor.
Comment from zanya
A poem to lift the spirit and rejoice in the only thing that really matters - life in its many and varied format -sheer joy of living and with such vibrant color
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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A poem to lift the spirit and rejoice in the only thing that really matters - life in its many and varied format -sheer joy of living and with such vibrant color
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from amada
I am so glad I still have a six! For sure, I love your words and what you write in here...there are so many wonderful lines that I have to bookcase this poem. I need to read it many times...
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I am so glad I still have a six! For sure, I love your words and what you write in here...there are so many wonderful lines that I have to bookcase this poem. I need to read it many times...
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the exceptional review and the honor of six stars. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Colin John
An excellant poem which relates to life on this planet and our love of life when witnessing such beauty that is ours and that of nature that surrounds us. Kind regards Colin
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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An excellant poem which relates to life on this planet and our love of life when witnessing such beauty that is ours and that of nature that surrounds us. Kind regards Colin
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from estory
The pastoral romantic traditions come alive in this poem, with wonderful images of the blooming croccus, the horses running wild in the hills, the waves crashing in at the shore. It is a world of nature alive in your poem that seems to inspire us to enjoy what we have here and go on living. An uplifting moment in a tumultuous time. estory
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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The pastoral romantic traditions come alive in this poem, with wonderful images of the blooming croccus, the horses running wild in the hills, the waves crashing in at the shore. It is a world of nature alive in your poem that seems to inspire us to enjoy what we have here and go on living. An uplifting moment in a tumultuous time. estory
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from kahpot
A beautiful read, your words give the reader many images of things we do and can appreciate if only we took notice and not for granted, an excellent sonnet, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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A beautiful read, your words give the reader many images of things we do and can appreciate if only we took notice and not for granted, an excellent sonnet, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your sonnet is excellent in every respect--skillfully written (rhyming and metrical scheme, etc.), vividly descriptive, and exuberant, conveying a message of appreciation for life in all its forms.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Your sonnet is excellent in every respect--skillfully written (rhyming and metrical scheme, etc.), vividly descriptive, and exuberant, conveying a message of appreciation for life in all its forms.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I really like most of this poem - crimson poppies and the clover field - sounds so lovely. I like how you begin it with "I Welcome..." and those crocuses breaking through winter snow.
...to feisty sunflowers that parade with flare ... " I know it's close to fair, but "out there" just seems awkward to me.
songbirds... hammering? building (which I don't love is better, I think) I just don't know what "hammering" means. Maybe I am just ignorant on the terminology.
and "an" orchid's bliss? "the" sounds choppy to me.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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I really like most of this poem - crimson poppies and the clover field - sounds so lovely. I like how you begin it with "I Welcome..." and those crocuses breaking through winter snow.
...to feisty sunflowers that parade with flare ... " I know it's close to fair, but "out there" just seems awkward to me.
songbirds... hammering? building (which I don't love is better, I think) I just don't know what "hammering" means. Maybe I am just ignorant on the terminology.
and "an" orchid's bliss? "the" sounds choppy to me.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Margaret
Comment from Reese Turner
We share that fascination for the birth of new things. I enjoyed reading your poem and salute to the mysteries and blessings of nature's new beginnings. Easy to read and inspires. I think I'll go for a walk outside...
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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We share that fascination for the birth of new things. I enjoyed reading your poem and salute to the mysteries and blessings of nature's new beginnings. Easy to read and inspires. I think I'll go for a walk outside...
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review.
