Sonnet for JJ
for Judian James22 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Mike - what a great sonnet
and tribute to Jude - so
well thoughtout and your
words ringing true - she's
sure to love it.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Mike - what a great sonnet
and tribute to Jude - so
well thoughtout and your
words ringing true - she's
sure to love it.
Margaret.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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She tells me I made her cry, but in a good way! This one came from a strong whim, and was composed on a noisy, packed commuter train heading home from London. This is true of many of my poems!
Mike
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A lovely tribute - Mike. Doyou work in the heart of London - I've a son who has an apartment between Leicester and Trafalgar Square, and although close to all one could need -- to noisy for us - we love to come home to the peace and quiet. M
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I work at the Home Office headquarters in Marsham Street, although after hearing the news reports today, who knows how long that'll last!
That apartment must cost an absolute mint! I enjoy working in central London, but there's no way I could live there - it's just too fast, loud, dirty, noisy and busy for my liking :-). I live in South East London, although my post code is Kent, so I'm in the outskirts.
If we ever have the money and appropriate jobs, my soon-to-be wife and I would love to move to Norfolk or Yorkshire, but for now that's just an aspiration.
Mike
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good luck, Mike. M
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Afternoon Mike,
What a delightful poem you've written about Jude. As
I read the poem I had to agree with all that you said. I've
come to admire her writings and love to read them.
I think you've done her great honor by writing this beautiful sonnet for her.
I am still learning how to write in iambic pentameter, but I would like to share a thought with you.
wrought by her scribe's illuminating eye,
Wrought seems to be "heavy", and therefore stressed vis-a-vis the second word of by being "light" and feeling unstressed. When I scanned and read the line, it felt like this to me:
WROUGHT by her SCRIBES IlLUMinATing EYE
Thanks for honoring Jude and for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
ray
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Good Afternoon Mike,
What a delightful poem you've written about Jude. As
I read the poem I had to agree with all that you said. I've
come to admire her writings and love to read them.
I think you've done her great honor by writing this beautiful sonnet for her.
I am still learning how to write in iambic pentameter, but I would like to share a thought with you.
wrought by her scribe's illuminating eye,
Wrought seems to be "heavy", and therefore stressed vis-a-vis the second word of by being "light" and feeling unstressed. When I scanned and read the line, it felt like this to me:
WROUGHT by her SCRIBES IlLUMinATing EYE
Thanks for honoring Jude and for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
ray
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Ray. I'm so glad you liked it, and I'm always open to thoughts on iambic stresses and where they might be improved. Of course, how the stresses work is very much down to context, pronunciation, and personal interpretation, but you're right about that line 'feeling' a little off. I'll have a think, and perchance a fiddle :-)
Thanks again.
Mike
Comment from jshep
Well said, Mike. She writes the notes we can't resist and is so versatile in her forms. This sonnet is flawless and rich in the description of an accomplished and published poet, well deserving of your words. I adore the line "On this bright cousin of a parchment's sheet"- that is such a clever line, as well as 'dreamer, feeler, family inspired.'- that is a perfect description. Well done and I have no doubt Jude is thrilled with this beautiful tribute. Joycexx
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Well said, Mike. She writes the notes we can't resist and is so versatile in her forms. This sonnet is flawless and rich in the description of an accomplished and published poet, well deserving of your words. I adore the line "On this bright cousin of a parchment's sheet"- that is such a clever line, as well as 'dreamer, feeler, family inspired.'- that is a perfect description. Well done and I have no doubt Jude is thrilled with this beautiful tribute. Joycexx
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Joyce :-). I am enjoying sonnets at the moment, and I was struck with the strongest urge to scribble something for Jude, so the two things went very naturally together!
Mike
Comment from rama devi
Outstanding sonnet adn much deserved tribute. bet JJ loved this, Mike.
her ringing words will wheedle wonderful
and wily phrases without compromise
until we beg our heartbeats to be still.
Wonderful whimsy and wit!
On this bright cousin of a parchment's sheet, (great line!)
she plies the trade of acid wry insight, (brilliant line!)
at once enigma and bared book replete (superb line!)
with every style of literary might. (TRUE!!)
Superb stanza! Superb literary style and device here as well!
So every time we hang upon a line
wrought by her scribe's illuminating eye,
think of the poet hid twixt her designs -
the dreamer, feeler, family inspired.
this stanza is lovely and well phrased. Scribe's illuminating eye...love that.
In harmony with her poetic gift,
she is the note musicians can't resist.
Outstanding! her poems are so musically rich, so that is an apt closing couplet.
Glad I had a six left for this fine tribute and well crafted sonnet.
Kudos.
Warmly,r d
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Outstanding sonnet adn much deserved tribute. bet JJ loved this, Mike.
her ringing words will wheedle wonderful
and wily phrases without compromise
until we beg our heartbeats to be still.
Wonderful whimsy and wit!
On this bright cousin of a parchment's sheet, (great line!)
she plies the trade of acid wry insight, (brilliant line!)
at once enigma and bared book replete (superb line!)
with every style of literary might. (TRUE!!)
Superb stanza! Superb literary style and device here as well!
So every time we hang upon a line
wrought by her scribe's illuminating eye,
think of the poet hid twixt her designs -
the dreamer, feeler, family inspired.
this stanza is lovely and well phrased. Scribe's illuminating eye...love that.
In harmony with her poetic gift,
she is the note musicians can't resist.
Outstanding! her poems are so musically rich, so that is an apt closing couplet.
Glad I had a six left for this fine tribute and well crafted sonnet.
Kudos.
Warmly,r d
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you, so much, rd :-). A sixer from you, especially on a sonnet, means an awful lot, and I'm equaly thrilled you enjoyed my tribute to Jude. Her versatility is an example I try to follow, and I was glad to have the opportunity to write her something.
Mike
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She was indeed thrilled with it, too. She told me so! ;-) rd
Comment from Brad Sterling
Sure we all enjoyed the read -and any friend would be delighted to have such a fine sonnet written in their praise - good easy rhythm with no forced rhymes - some great alliteration - specially liked strong closing couplet - Brad.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Sure we all enjoyed the read -and any friend would be delighted to have such a fine sonnet written in their praise - good easy rhythm with no forced rhymes - some great alliteration - specially liked strong closing couplet - Brad.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thanks, Brad! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :-)
Mike
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Always nice to show appreciation to your friends...Brad.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Nice going, Mike. I had a image in mind as I read this piece. Your words in the third stanza were strong and uniquely combined. Great job.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Nice going, Mike. I had a image in mind as I read this piece. Your words in the third stanza were strong and uniquely combined. Great job.
Isaiah
Comment Written 16-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Isaiah. I'm always chasing down those unusual word combinations :-)
Mike
Comment from Angel Debbie
Very enjoyable easy flowing read. Enjoyed its message it brought across. Please write moe on this order thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Very enjoyable easy flowing read. Enjoyed its message it brought across. Please write moe on this order thank you for sharing
Comment Written 16-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Debbie :-). I really enjoyed writing this for my friend.
Mike
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Your very welcome
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello Mike and good morning. I am sure she will enjoy the sonnet and I did as well. It was very thoughtful and accurate for her, great work again, Loyd
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Hello Mike and good morning. I am sure she will enjoy the sonnet and I did as well. It was very thoughtful and accurate for her, great work again, Loyd
Comment Written 16-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Loyd. I'm honoured that I was able to even hint at her qualities.
Mike
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You are very welcome, Loyd
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Wow Mike this one felt almost romantic! "She is the note musicians can't resist", wow favorite line. Love it actually. Like the sonnet style of writing with its elegance and flow. Well done my friend. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Wow Mike this one felt almost romantic! "She is the note musicians can't resist", wow favorite line. Love it actually. Like the sonnet style of writing with its elegance and flow. Well done my friend. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 16-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Thanks! This came to me on a whim, inspired by the poetry I always enjoy. A sonnet just seemed right :-)
Mike
Comment from katz meow
Oh My Goodness Mike! Not only was this an extremely fulfilling read, it was an awesome tribute to Jude, your friend. This beautiful Sonnet will stay with me for awhile. If only I had six stars...Katz
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Oh My Goodness Mike! Not only was this an extremely fulfilling read, it was an awesome tribute to Jude, your friend. This beautiful Sonnet will stay with me for awhile. If only I had six stars...Katz
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Your wonderful comments are worth far more than any sixer, Katz. Thank you :-)
Mike